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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from KayteeF
Exceptional
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Yesssss. I love it.
Surely small town attitudes still do not exist, do they?
Well you have sure made Joe into an even more gorgeous guy.
You continue to relate this story brilliantly.
It is better than just reading a book. We get to comment as well. I love it. Thanks.

By the way, as I am playing catch up, you do not have to reply to all my reviews.
I had intended to just read through without reviews but in this case there are moments I just have to react.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
    Hey, if you read, I will review. I appreciate your comments and diligence in reading. The very least I can do is answer.
Comment from Nicnac
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I LOVE it! What a deliciously romantic scene! I could picture Joe yelling his intentions to the townsfolk. What a joy. :)

This chapter made me feel wobbly kneed. What a catch Joe is. I want him.

What about Jac, you ask? Jac who? LOL

Fabulous writing. Sorry I've gotten behind. Catching up is fun though. LOL

Hmm... It wont allow me to give you a sixer...
Here ya go: ****** Definitely deserving.

Nic

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your kindness. I always appreciate hearing from you, girlfriend.
Comment from dmjones
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I missed this one when I was on vacation so thought before I continued on I should read it. As usual a good chapter.
I have just one comment and it my be me regarding this sentence: After long slow kisses, he inhaled a deep breath. "Yes, I do."

Do you mean several long kisses or just one? When Sara jumped back so quick and made a comment about kissing in the parking lot, I assumed just one. Could be wrong though.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
    I assumed just one too. (LOL) I am sorry you didn't read this while it had bonus points on it. Thank you for going back though.
Comment from Ponder
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Hi Barbara,

I think this chapter does a lot to further describe the characters of both Joe and Sara - Sara's hesitency and Joes chivelry are nicely done here.

Very enjoyable.

Jules

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. Sorry you didn't get to read it when there where bonus points on it.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
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This romance does look like it is getting rather serious.
Like Sara, I wonder how they can carry on a relationship when they are five hundred miles apart.
However, Joe is such a determined character he no doubt has something up his sleeve.


Juliette

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2010


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Jenniferhsrn
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Your right, I need to read the previous chapters, but standing alone, I want to know more. The dialog is believable, and the last line, that was really good.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2010


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from afternoonlight
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Yummy chapter I gobbled it up. Romantic tension building, you are doing your usual great job with discription, detail, scene setting and dialogue. Love it!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2010


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from noland
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I haven't read the previous chapters and it's not hard to understand why the characters act the way they do---they're falling in love.
This is very well written and absorbing. The dialogue flows naturally and all is very believable.
Great read. Well done. Write on!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2010


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. Some have not understood, that's why I had to add the note. I appreciate your support.
reply by noland on 28-Jul-2010
    You are most welcome.
Comment from nora arjuna
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Bab, my only suggestion is for this last sentence:

His lips locked firmly with hers.

to be on its own in a new para for effect, or else it becomes too sudden soon after he finished speaking. if you want it to be in the same para, you have to add something before it for better flow. maybe something like - He bent his head...

i enjoyed the rest of the read. :)


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2010


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
    Thank your for your review. I will take another look at that sentence.
Comment from Shane Marquardt
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I am very intrigued by these characters and look forward to seeing how their relationship continues. I find myself cheering for them. This has been a enjoyable story to follow

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2010


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
    Thankyo for your kind review.