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Comment from katz meow
What an excellent poem here. I must also ask you: did you find the artwork first? Great job of matching Senryu with pic! This piece is actually quite moving, too. A well penned poem...katz
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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What an excellent poem here. I must also ask you: did you find the artwork first? Great job of matching Senryu with pic! This piece is actually quite moving, too. A well penned poem...katz
Comment Written 02-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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I had the concept first,in a different version, then found the picture to match that one, then moved on into this one for this contest. Thank you for your wonderful comments.
Comment from fishcantswim
Good entry for senryu.
An issues that faces so many of us these days - the world keeps spinning, but we've stopped running...
Not sure about the capital letter after a semi-colon in the first line?
Well written.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Good entry for senryu.
An issues that faces so many of us these days - the world keeps spinning, but we've stopped running...
Not sure about the capital letter after a semi-colon in the first line?
Well written.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from Earthlover
A great poem for the Senryu poem contest. The art work captures the emotion of the situation perfectly.
These are difficult times, and people are struggling to make ends meet.
Your poem portrys this in a kind way.
Thanks for sharing,
Earthlover
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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A great poem for the Senryu poem contest. The art work captures the emotion of the situation perfectly.
These are difficult times, and people are struggling to make ends meet.
Your poem portrys this in a kind way.
Thanks for sharing,
Earthlover
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your comments
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
You get a five grama, because the rules of the contest do not include the correct form of Senryu. I, personally, do not know why anyone would bother creating a contest that doesn't include the rules of the genre. shadowpoetry.com is an excellent place to begin to learn about the satorial line and the other elements that make a Senryu a Senryu and an Haiku an Haiku.
Write on~
Pea
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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You get a five grama, because the rules of the contest do not include the correct form of Senryu. I, personally, do not know why anyone would bother creating a contest that doesn't include the rules of the genre. shadowpoetry.com is an excellent place to begin to learn about the satorial line and the other elements that make a Senryu a Senryu and an Haiku an Haiku.
Write on~
Pea
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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So, if it is worth a 6, I don't get it because I followed the rules? Hmmm. ok. Well, that's ok. I did as I was told. LOL
Comment from rozie12
Wonderful gramalot8. I love you and your poem so keep on writing so that you can teach me more, and I love your beautiful picture.-Thank you
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Wonderful gramalot8. I love you and your poem so keep on writing so that you can teach me more, and I love your beautiful picture.-Thank you
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your love and your review. G-
Comment from dmoncrief
Just realized a senryu is seventeen syllables OR LESS. I notice you deleted my previous PM about the syllable count and I feel silly now. Lesson learned.
Anyway, I wanted to comment on this the first time I read it. The topic is so timely, and I think you have expressed the plight of the jobless and homeless very well.
Good luck in the contest. --Denise
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Just realized a senryu is seventeen syllables OR LESS. I notice you deleted my previous PM about the syllable count and I feel silly now. Lesson learned.
Anyway, I wanted to comment on this the first time I read it. The topic is so timely, and I think you have expressed the plight of the jobless and homeless very well.
Good luck in the contest. --Denise
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much for your comments. Jerri
Comment from fictionwriter
We have quite a few that need that sort of help. I know that my husband was laid off and has been looking for a job for six months now. He'd take just about anything, but it's a hard road. Great job.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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We have quite a few that need that sort of help. I know that my husband was laid off and has been looking for a job for six months now. He'd take just about anything, but it's a hard road. Great job.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your comments. It's been sadly amazing how many of our co-writers have told me that they or their spouse is laid off right now. Hang in there and I hope he gets something soon. Jerri
Comment from joyceebarb
I loved your short poem. It is really about what is happening
today. I loved the line - can't pay my bills due yesterday.
I am glad you are off the unemployment line.
Keep up the good writing.
Best Wishes,
Joyce
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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I loved your short poem. It is really about what is happening
today. I loved the line - can't pay my bills due yesterday.
I am glad you are off the unemployment line.
Keep up the good writing.
Best Wishes,
Joyce
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your wonderful comments. Jerri
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written poem highlighting a major social problem; unemployment. The poem says much with very few words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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This is a very well written poem highlighting a major social problem; unemployment. The poem says much with very few words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your comments and rating. Jerri
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You're welcome, Jerri. Charlie
Comment from chita
You have great artwork and good arthor notes. This poem shouts to me (No money--hire me) I hope this unemployment crisis end soon--great job.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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You have great artwork and good arthor notes. This poem shouts to me (No money--hire me) I hope this unemployment crisis end soon--great job.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your comments. I hope the crisis ends soon also.
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You did a great job--keep the good work up!!
