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Comment from Adri7enne
Very nice, snod. Good little mystery and tension building. Good show on introducing Laura's mom. She sounds cool.
It was a good background chapter, advancing the story and setting it up for more action. Nice job.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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Very nice, snod. Good little mystery and tension building. Good show on introducing Laura's mom. She sounds cool.
It was a good background chapter, advancing the story and setting it up for more action. Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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Thanks. Glad it worked for you
Comment from Hanna Marie
Do you have any books out? Do you have this written all the way, or is this a work in progress? kinda fun keeping people in suspense I suppose...LOL Blessings Hanna
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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Do you have any books out? Do you have this written all the way, or is this a work in progress? kinda fun keeping people in suspense I suppose...LOL Blessings Hanna
Comment Written 15-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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I have rejection letters for books, but none published, and this is a work in progress. I have the general plot, but my characters keep doing things I hadn't planned, so the path to the destination keeps changing. Sometimes I'm in suspense too.
Comment from adewpearl
Well, I should just have paid way more attention to the top of the page - I finished reading this and was about to read it again to see why the heck the story didn't seem to end and why I never figured out all I should about the guild and then I see it's a chapter in your novel. LOLOL Chalk this one up to a senior moment.
Anyway, excellent dialogue - I certainly got the tension that was going on and a sense of this young woman's relationships
from the conversations. I like how you offer enough information to make things interesting without giving everything away. :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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Well, I should just have paid way more attention to the top of the page - I finished reading this and was about to read it again to see why the heck the story didn't seem to end and why I never figured out all I should about the guild and then I see it's a chapter in your novel. LOLOL Chalk this one up to a senior moment.
Anyway, excellent dialogue - I certainly got the tension that was going on and a sense of this young woman's relationships
from the conversations. I like how you offer enough information to make things interesting without giving everything away. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
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Thanks. Christmas is the schemer, and I'm trying to reveal his plan bit by bit without giving away the plot. Describing a plan and then describing its execution is a little repetitive, and I want to surprise the reader if things go wrong, and possibly fool them into thinking its going one way when its going another.
Glad you liked it
