Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Chapter 3 Part One"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Helen Tan
Hi, and 'bye Mr. Joe
Is the single quote mark meant to be in front of "bye"?
"I wonder what tonight's reunion will bring. I'm sure it will be interesting."
I think there will be some hot happenings. My only fear is that something is going to happen to Cassie. I guess it's the information you gave on Angela and their text messaging.
Onto the next chapter to find out...
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
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Hi, and 'bye Mr. Joe
Is the single quote mark meant to be in front of "bye"?
"I wonder what tonight's reunion will bring. I'm sure it will be interesting."
I think there will be some hot happenings. My only fear is that something is going to happen to Cassie. I guess it's the information you gave on Angela and their text messaging.
Onto the next chapter to find out...
Comment Written 27-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
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Thank you for continuing to follow my posts. I am sorry you weren't able to read whent their were bonus points attached.
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Don't worry about the $$$$ - I don't review based on $$$$. Anyway I don't intend to post anything for a while - catching up on my other assignment.
Comment from afternoonlight
You have the romantic tension going, and the prom coming up, the handsome guy leaving, and everyone reved up and hot! I'm moving on to the next chapter with anticipation
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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You have the romantic tension going, and the prom coming up, the handsome guy leaving, and everyone reved up and hot! I'm moving on to the next chapter with anticipation
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you for you kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from marcii
This was a good prelude to what im guessing is an eventual getting together of these two or in their minds at least.
Well written, keeping the readers interest,though I admit I was hoping for more,but that's perhaps me rushing things.
Marcii
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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This was a good prelude to what im guessing is an eventual getting together of these two or in their minds at least.
Well written, keeping the readers interest,though I admit I was hoping for more,but that's perhaps me rushing things.
Marcii
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for reading back. I appreciate it.
Comment from Ann Smith
As usual, your words flow across the page easily. I like the details and the dialogue, because it was lighthearted and fun with energy added in the jog. I wonder what tonight's reunion will bring as well. ann
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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As usual, your words flow across the page easily. I like the details and the dialogue, because it was lighthearted and fun with energy added in the jog. I wonder what tonight's reunion will bring as well. ann
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
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You are welcome. ann
Comment from fishcantswim
Another extremely well-written chapter.
All dialogue is sound and believable.
The chapter is nicely paced and continues character and relationship development.
No SPAG to report, as far as I could see.
Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Another extremely well-written chapter.
All dialogue is sound and believable.
The chapter is nicely paced and continues character and relationship development.
No SPAG to report, as far as I could see.
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Rain Chapman
Hello Barbara,
I liked this chapter, the interaction between them is becoming more relaxed, the attraction is strong, and I can't wait to see how these two come together with all of that distance in miles where they live. One thing for you to peek at.
He wore a light gray athletic T-shirt, and she couldn't help but notice muscle definition.
Sara noticed his dancing brown eyes slide down her body. - notice and noticed are very close together here, maybe change one?
Take care,
Rain :^)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Hello Barbara,
I liked this chapter, the interaction between them is becoming more relaxed, the attraction is strong, and I can't wait to see how these two come together with all of that distance in miles where they live. One thing for you to peek at.
He wore a light gray athletic T-shirt, and she couldn't help but notice muscle definition.
Sara noticed his dancing brown eyes slide down her body. - notice and noticed are very close together here, maybe change one?
Take care,
Rain :^)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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I will make that correction. Thank you for noticing it. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from judelesemann
Great narrative. I would like to see a little more physical description of Joe. What you've written is good. It is such an easy read. Look forward to more chapters. Well done. Be blessed, Jude
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Great narrative. I would like to see a little more physical description of Joe. What you've written is good. It is such an easy read. Look forward to more chapters. Well done. Be blessed, Jude
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Some of Joe's description has already been given. I have sort of done it in pieces. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Hello Barbara!
This is amazing how you created an interesting and beautiful chapter out of something so simple like this:
"What are you doing?" She rested her head against the doorframe.
"I'm stretching." While he touched his shoes, he added, "Last night you mentioned you jog to work."
Very well done!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Hello Barbara!
This is amazing how you created an interesting and beautiful chapter out of something so simple like this:
"What are you doing?" She rested her head against the doorframe.
"I'm stretching." While he touched his shoes, he added, "Last night you mentioned you jog to work."
Very well done!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Donovan
I am not sure I want to read any story about someone that can stretch and touch their shoes. I got a shoe shine the other day and just had to take the guy's word for it.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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I am not sure I want to read any story about someone that can stretch and touch their shoes. I got a shoe shine the other day and just had to take the guy's word for it.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Oh dear, what am I going to do with you? I shall enjoy your very interesting reviews.
Comment from Monte Carbolic
From the fast-paced story to the great dialogue, this is an ezceptional chapter. I am pretty sure I am new to this story, but that didn't keep me from following along. I look forward to reading more of this. You have earned yourself a new fan.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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From the fast-paced story to the great dialogue, this is an ezceptional chapter. I am pretty sure I am new to this story, but that didn't keep me from following along. I look forward to reading more of this. You have earned yourself a new fan.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
