Walkabout
Going walkabout is Aboriginal Dreamtime.28 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
talk to the tempests and ride on raindrops, what a lovely alliterative line that describes so beautifully this speaker's dream of paradise.
The image of the wind bringing him home is so uplifting and gorgeous to visualize
Kay, this is, without a doubt, one of your best, in my view, but I'm currently restricted from giving you sixes since I've given you two recently. It's Tom's fault, not mine!! Brooke :-)
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talk to the tempests and ride on raindrops, what a lovely alliterative line that describes so beautifully this speaker's dream of paradise.
The image of the wind bringing him home is so uplifting and gorgeous to visualize
Kay, this is, without a doubt, one of your best, in my view, but I'm currently restricted from giving you sixes since I've given you two recently. It's Tom's fault, not mine!! Brooke :-)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Tanka you so much dear friend; glad you enjoyed the ride. Love, Kay.
Comment from patmedium
This is wonderful, Kai. You evoke such marvellous images in my mind's eye with these true writes. More, please ... you know the true Australia fascinates me, anyway! xxx
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This is wonderful, Kai. You evoke such marvellous images in my mind's eye with these true writes. More, please ... you know the true Australia fascinates me, anyway! xxx
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Thanks so much and glad you enjoyed the ride. Love, Kay.
Comment from marcellawachtel
This is a most beautiful poem. You are taking your readers along as your spirit ventures into places yet to be explored, places where you can "learn to love and be free."
Everyone who you meet on this journey will be enriched by your joy and determination.
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This is a most beautiful poem. You are taking your readers along as your spirit ventures into places yet to be explored, places where you can "learn to love and be free."
Everyone who you meet on this journey will be enriched by your joy and determination.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Thanks so much and glad you enjoyed the ride. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from G.B.Ante
As a free form poem it can, naturally, be of any meter, rhyme scheme, syllable count, or punctuation; so there is no revision needed, now is there?!
There are some fine moments of metaphor, so I enjoyed this.
Thanks,
G
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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As a free form poem it can, naturally, be of any meter, rhyme scheme, syllable count, or punctuation; so there is no revision needed, now is there?!
There are some fine moments of metaphor, so I enjoyed this.
Thanks,
G
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Thanks so much for reviewing; glad you enjoyed the journey. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from robbis4
Wow a great piece of writing upbeat in its message a canvass of light and joy of hope and fulfillment, you must be truly at peace to write with such gentle carefree optimism, I love the way you immerse yourself in the the journey and become a living part of the story well done keep writing bob
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Wow a great piece of writing upbeat in its message a canvass of light and joy of hope and fulfillment, you must be truly at peace to write with such gentle carefree optimism, I love the way you immerse yourself in the the journey and become a living part of the story well done keep writing bob
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Bob, We all need to go 'walkabout' outside this world of darkness and enjoy the light. Thanks, Kay.
Comment from Inge_Meldgaard
This is a wonderful poem! I can relate to it very strongly, and am deeply touched by your words.
"And smiles and tears are truths in themselves."
What a particularly beautiful line, with such great insight!
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This is a wonderful poem! I can relate to it very strongly, and am deeply touched by your words.
"And smiles and tears are truths in themselves."
What a particularly beautiful line, with such great insight!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and so pleased you enjoyed the journey. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Nicki_Mist
My best part are these lines and the whole poem is very full of imagery and metaphors. Great word usage and keep it up:
And I shall come home only after the days
Have taught me to love and be free.
You will know when I am returning
For the wind will lend me a home-bound breeze to sail upon.
Lovely poem!
Nicole.
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My best part are these lines and the whole poem is very full of imagery and metaphors. Great word usage and keep it up:
And I shall come home only after the days
Have taught me to love and be free.
You will know when I am returning
For the wind will lend me a home-bound breeze to sail upon.
Lovely poem!
Nicole.
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Nicole, Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed the journey. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from R. K. Alan
I love the imagery of this telling. The poetic form and cadence work very well. I thank you for sharing this with us.
"just tell them
I've gone chasing after rainbows,
They'll understand"
love the inage this conjures up...
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I love the imagery of this telling. The poetic form and cadence work very well. I thank you for sharing this with us.
"just tell them
I've gone chasing after rainbows,
They'll understand"
love the inage this conjures up...
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed the journey. Cheers, Kay.
