Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Chatper 2 Part three"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from RebelRose
Very well done. The dialogue between Cassie, Joe and Sara is very believable and makes it feel like you are right there with them hearing it first hand.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Very well done. The dialogue between Cassie, Joe and Sara is very believable and makes it feel like you are right there with them hearing it first hand.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Ponder
Hi Barbara,
I'm really impressed with the quality of writing in this chapter. So much so I intent to go back and read the rest.
The dialogue and simple back-and-forth conversation between Joe and Sara is so well done its a real lesson in how to do it. The use of secondary characters to bring the chapter along is also excellent and you've managed to give Cassie an age apropriate characterisation.
The emotional ending to this chapter was superb.
Romance has a reputation for shoddy writing, but you've blown that stereotype out of the water here.
Jules
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Hi Barbara,
I'm really impressed with the quality of writing in this chapter. So much so I intent to go back and read the rest.
The dialogue and simple back-and-forth conversation between Joe and Sara is so well done its a real lesson in how to do it. The use of secondary characters to bring the chapter along is also excellent and you've managed to give Cassie an age apropriate characterisation.
The emotional ending to this chapter was superb.
Romance has a reputation for shoddy writing, but you've blown that stereotype out of the water here.
Jules
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I sure hope I don't disappoint you.
Comment from Monte Carbolic
Impressive writing. I don't believe I have read anything of yours before. You are a very detailed, entertaining writer. I hope to read more from you again.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Impressive writing. I don't believe I have read anything of yours before. You are a very detailed, entertaining writer. I hope to read more from you again.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I hope you stop by again.
Comment from ladybird
A nice follow on chapter leading from the meal they all shared. Joe seems quite intense in his feelings towards Sara, but she seems to hold back. Can't say as I blame her, after all the gossip she's had to endure over the years.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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A nice follow on chapter leading from the meal they all shared. Joe seems quite intense in his feelings towards Sara, but she seems to hold back. Can't say as I blame her, after all the gossip she's had to endure over the years.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and perceptive view.
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You're welcome.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi barb, I have nothing to pick at here. You've improved a lot since I first read you. Not that I'm an expert, but things appear to be much smoother now. Just one observation, you may want to cut on some unnecessary dialogues so the story will move faster. :)
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Hi barb, I have nothing to pick at here. You've improved a lot since I first read you. Not that I'm an expert, but things appear to be much smoother now. Just one observation, you may want to cut on some unnecessary dialogues so the story will move faster. :)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and I will look at the dialogue.
Comment from jclark
I enjoy the interaction amongst the three of them and Joe's character is easy to like. You are building a nice foundation and weaving details together. Can't wait to read on.
Judy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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I enjoy the interaction amongst the three of them and Joe's character is easy to like. You are building a nice foundation and weaving details together. Can't wait to read on.
Judy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Hi Barbara,
I'm back after a bit of a break. Your chapter is flawlessly written, I'll have to back track and catch up on the story line. I enjoyed this one though.
Connie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Hi Barbara,
I'm back after a bit of a break. Your chapter is flawlessly written, I'll have to back track and catch up on the story line. I enjoyed this one though.
Connie
Comment Written 11-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I have missed you.
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You're welcome Barbara, I've missed you also, as well as the others in my FS family.
I'll be posting and reviewing again soon.
Connie
Comment from bhogg
continue get (continued to) I'm sure this has been pointed out. I'm behind in my reading!
Barbara - you write so smoothly. I of course, keep up with this, but someone could have dropped in for the first time and felt comfortable. One of the things I'm hoping to learn from you is the easy way you create tension - making the reader want to follow up, almost diasppointed when the story ends. Very nicely done. Bill
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2010
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continue get (continued to) I'm sure this has been pointed out. I'm behind in my reading!
Barbara - you write so smoothly. I of course, keep up with this, but someone could have dropped in for the first time and felt comfortable. One of the things I'm hoping to learn from you is the easy way you create tension - making the reader want to follow up, almost diasppointed when the story ends. Very nicely done. Bill
Comment Written 11-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. You are so generous with your praise. You make a girl blush.
Comment from Kaladore
I think the story's pace is moving well and you are building up the characters well, not too fast, not too slow. It'll be interesting to see what happens from here.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2010
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I think the story's pace is moving well and you are building up the characters well, not too fast, not too slow. It'll be interesting to see what happens from here.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Interesting chapter and a bit more fleshing out f the people involved. This looks like its heading toward an interesting showdown at some stage with a few minor confrontations in between.
Good work.
Patrick
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2010
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Hi Barbara,
Interesting chapter and a bit more fleshing out f the people involved. This looks like its heading toward an interesting showdown at some stage with a few minor confrontations in between.
Good work.
Patrick
Comment Written 11-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
