Another Pretty Face
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Comment from KayteeF
My friend, I do not know where this thought comes from, but I have had it a few times when reading this novel.
Remember earlier Joe said that he used to drink but stopped when he forgot what he did when drunk. At least, I think that is what you meant.
Anyway, what seems to keep coming into my head is that could Joe be Cassie's Dad? I do not think I have read this anywhere, but it is a strange thought.
I am getting too involved perhaps.
Another interesting chapter. It it great to read chapters on after the other like in a real book. I think it is easier to keep track this way.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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My friend, I do not know where this thought comes from, but I have had it a few times when reading this novel.
Remember earlier Joe said that he used to drink but stopped when he forgot what he did when drunk. At least, I think that is what you meant.
Anyway, what seems to keep coming into my head is that could Joe be Cassie's Dad? I do not think I have read this anywhere, but it is a strange thought.
I am getting too involved perhaps.
Another interesting chapter. It it great to read chapters on after the other like in a real book. I think it is easier to keep track this way.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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I have already read your review where you have it straightened out. A few reviewers thought the same thing.
Comment from skychild27
I feel like cassie is trying to find reasons why it wont work. she's taking him away from his family.. etc. she's so worried she's going to ruin things with him or for him.
well done as always!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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I feel like cassie is trying to find reasons why it wont work. she's taking him away from his family.. etc. she's so worried she's going to ruin things with him or for him.
well done as always!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your review. I am going to bed. It's an early day for me tomorrow.
Comment from Helen Tan
I guess you repeated the first 3 paragraphs of the previous part at the start of this on purpose.
"We only had sex once, so I don't have a lot of experience with him either," she interrupted.
"Were you ... raped?"
"No."
I think you did a great job releasing enough information to keep reader's interest with these lines yet the full story is not known. WHO is the guy?!!! Trust Grandma to call at this point of the story - well done!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
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I guess you repeated the first 3 paragraphs of the previous part at the start of this on purpose.
"We only had sex once, so I don't have a lot of experience with him either," she interrupted.
"Were you ... raped?"
"No."
I think you did a great job releasing enough information to keep reader's interest with these lines yet the full story is not known. WHO is the guy?!!! Trust Grandma to call at this point of the story - well done!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2010
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When something importants happens around here, somehow my mother always calls. So I thought it was only appropriate to add it. Thank you again.
Comment from marcii
A good family scene in this chapter, it flowed well at an even pace.
I thought it showed a little more about the characters and how hey behave or relate with one another in a rather every day type of scene.
Good
Marcii
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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A good family scene in this chapter, it flowed well at an even pace.
I thought it showed a little more about the characters and how hey behave or relate with one another in a rather every day type of scene.
Good
Marcii
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your review. I am sorry you didn't get to read this when the bonus points were on it.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
It just takes so long to get anywhere! I want to read on and see what's going on.
She searched for the page and then pointed to the sentence: [']Compro[] esto ayer.[']
"You're cute when you're frustrated," he said, --
This statement is just hanging out there. Nothing to show what triggered it nor does she respond to it. Expand?
"Now[,] Mom, you're supposed to step in
Roberta
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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It just takes so long to get anywhere! I want to read on and see what's going on.
She searched for the page and then pointed to the sentence: [']Compro[] esto ayer.[']
"You're cute when you're frustrated," he said, --
This statement is just hanging out there. Nothing to show what triggered it nor does she respond to it. Expand?
"Now[,] Mom, you're supposed to step in
Roberta
Comment Written 16-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Splendid story! You've used very good descriptive words and very interesting dialogues. I enjoyed this chapter as well. It flows and leads you to the next step.
Thanks, have a nice day!
:)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Splendid story! You've used very good descriptive words and very interesting dialogues. I enjoyed this chapter as well. It flows and leads you to the next step.
Thanks, have a nice day!
:)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sacred Heart
Hello my friend,
Hey I am learning a lot from you!
I'm new at writing book chapters and
I like how you go from one chapter
to the next as if starting where you
left off.
Love the dialog between the charactors.
You have left us with a great hook at
the end too which is so important to keep us
wanting to read more. I'm hooked!
Good to see Joe getting closer to Sara and Cassie.
Look forward to reading the next chapter!
Beautifully written
Love Light Patty
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Hello my friend,
Hey I am learning a lot from you!
I'm new at writing book chapters and
I like how you go from one chapter
to the next as if starting where you
left off.
Love the dialog between the charactors.
You have left us with a great hook at
the end too which is so important to keep us
wanting to read more. I'm hooked!
Good to see Joe getting closer to Sara and Cassie.
Look forward to reading the next chapter!
Beautifully written
Love Light Patty
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
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You are welcome Barbara! Take care Patty
Comment from CKLA
Barbara,
A great chapter. The interaction and easy dialogue are wonderful, allowing the reader to get into the story. I look forward to seeing where the story will go. Great job.
Collette
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Barbara,
A great chapter. The interaction and easy dialogue are wonderful, allowing the reader to get into the story. I look forward to seeing where the story will go. Great job.
Collette
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from ulster3
Hello Barbara.
This speaks to the entire dance of life, doesn't it. I like Sara and I hope she isn't just another pretty face to Joe. Cassie shows that Sara is doing an excellent mothering job. I think she needs an ego boost, and to get way beyond what happened to her with Cassie's father. This chapter continues to hold one in involvement. Great job.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Hello Barbara.
This speaks to the entire dance of life, doesn't it. I like Sara and I hope she isn't just another pretty face to Joe. Cassie shows that Sara is doing an excellent mothering job. I think she needs an ego boost, and to get way beyond what happened to her with Cassie's father. This chapter continues to hold one in involvement. Great job.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
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your work always gives a good read, Barbara.
Comment from jmyron
Hi Barbara, This is not the kind of reading I usually am into, but it looked interesting. For context, I guess that I should probably read the earlier pieces, but I liked this one. Is Joe a Colonel? If so, that should be Col. Joe not Col, Joe. It's the only SPAG that I caught.
John
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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Hi Barbara, This is not the kind of reading I usually am into, but it looked interesting. For context, I guess that I should probably read the earlier pieces, but I liked this one. Is Joe a Colonel? If so, that should be Col. Joe not Col, Joe. It's the only SPAG that I caught.
John
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2010
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I will corrcect that. I would have sworn, I had a period there. I am surprised some of my ex-miltary fans didn't catch it. Thank you for your review.
