Virge And the Yellow Jacket War
A Boy's Life in the South - See Author Notes37 total reviews
Comment from Ann Smith
This is the funniest story I have read in a long time. I hope you have more of your Virge stories left because they are awesome. The details and images are so clear, I felt I was there too. I know about yellow jackets; and those things are nasty. I especially like Virge's line about being ninety five years old. ann
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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This is the funniest story I have read in a long time. I hope you have more of your Virge stories left because they are awesome. The details and images are so clear, I felt I was there too. I know about yellow jackets; and those things are nasty. I especially like Virge's line about being ninety five years old. ann
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thanks for reading Ann, and I certainly appreciate the 6! I'm sure I'll write about Virge again. There are definitely some other adventures.
Comment from Shirley B
I enjoyed this story every much. The richness of your characters is very good. I could just see myself in rural Georgia. Your words painted a perfect picture of a kind black man who knew old time remedies, and loved to share his wisdom. By the way, I am 50 and have been stung many a time by wasp, only to have my Dad spit tobacco juice on the sting, It works! Thank you for sharing your gift of storytelling. I really enjoyed it. Great job, Shirley
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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I enjoyed this story every much. The richness of your characters is very good. I could just see myself in rural Georgia. Your words painted a perfect picture of a kind black man who knew old time remedies, and loved to share his wisdom. By the way, I am 50 and have been stung many a time by wasp, only to have my Dad spit tobacco juice on the sting, It works! Thank you for sharing your gift of storytelling. I really enjoyed it. Great job, Shirley
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thanks Shirley - I'm glad that you read the story and liked it enough to award a coveted "6". Warm regards, Bill
Comment from Judith Ann
Oh, what a wonderful story and you have such a way of telling a tale. I must read more of your work. Your words pulled me right in to the characters and the setting. I could see Virge in my minds eye as well as rabbit. The scene with John and the explosion was priceless. Wonderful. -Judy
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Oh, what a wonderful story and you have such a way of telling a tale. I must read more of your work. Your words pulled me right in to the characters and the setting. I could see Virge in my minds eye as well as rabbit. The scene with John and the explosion was priceless. Wonderful. -Judy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Hi Judy - thanks for reading and for your kind words. If you haven't read Rabbit in my portfolio, please do. It gives a background on how Virge and I met.
Comment from NadiaScrieva
I thought this was simply adorable! There were a few errors near the beginning, "tomato's" and such, but by the end you had gotten such a roll that they nearly slipped my mind. An extremely excellent job! I remember killing bees with my old landlord when I was young, and that was a fond memory. Thanks for bringing it back to me!
All the best,
Nadia
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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I thought this was simply adorable! There were a few errors near the beginning, "tomato's" and such, but by the end you had gotten such a roll that they nearly slipped my mind. An extremely excellent job! I remember killing bees with my old landlord when I was young, and that was a fond memory. Thanks for bringing it back to me!
All the best,
Nadia
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thanks for reading Nadia - I'll circle back and correct tomato's. Regards, Bill
Comment from LeeLongpre
I give this 6 stars. This was really good. I really enjoyed this a lot. Virge seems awesome! Great job on this. I liked it a lot.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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I give this 6 stars. This was really good. I really enjoyed this a lot. Virge seems awesome! Great job on this. I liked it a lot.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thank you very much for reading and the kind feedback. It's always wonderful to get a "sixer"!
Comment from adewpearl
his niece, Ms. Carrie, was usually there - add the second comma
He walks up, takes a look and asks - at this point you shift to present tense but I don't know why. By the next paragraph you're back to past tense.
my brother, standing on the barrel top, - add the second comma
Yea, Rabbit, me too. - Yeah,
I would love to see this as a one act play or a film short - I can just picture the little boy and the old man.
You have such a good narrative voice, Bill - I get drawn right into the conversation, with natural speech patterns, and I could picture the yellow jacket attack and the little boy holding in his tears. Brooke :-)
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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his niece, Ms. Carrie, was usually there - add the second comma
He walks up, takes a look and asks - at this point you shift to present tense but I don't know why. By the next paragraph you're back to past tense.
my brother, standing on the barrel top, - add the second comma
Yea, Rabbit, me too. - Yeah,
I would love to see this as a one act play or a film short - I can just picture the little boy and the old man.
You have such a good narrative voice, Bill - I get drawn right into the conversation, with natural speech patterns, and I could picture the yellow jacket attack and the little boy holding in his tears. Brooke :-)
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thanks for reading Brooke and for pointing out the corrections. I'll circle back around this morning. You are so good to provide feedback!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am enjoying your stories so much. You write I feel I am there watching the scenes unfold. I am allergic to all insect bites or stings, so I am very glad I was only there through your excellent story telling abilities.
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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I am enjoying your stories so much. You write I feel I am there watching the scenes unfold. I am allergic to all insect bites or stings, so I am very glad I was only there through your excellent story telling abilities.
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2010
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Thanks Barbara - that was quick. I was actually still in edit mode and pushed the wrong button. I always appreciate your visits. LOL Bill
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Thanks Barbara - that was quick. I was actually still in edit mode and pushed the wrong button. I always appreciate your visits. LOL Bill
