The Dragon of Dark Harbour
Grand Manan Island revisited37 total reviews
Comment from Ailo
I love how you lead your four stanza to the final line...really cool!
I am not a poet, but I really loved this. It is unique in topic and style, unlike anything I have read thus far.
I really like the whole of your fifth stanza as well.
The entire poem starts and ends with a powerful intrigue. Well done!!!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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I love how you lead your four stanza to the final line...really cool!
I am not a poet, but I really loved this. It is unique in topic and style, unlike anything I have read thus far.
I really like the whole of your fifth stanza as well.
The entire poem starts and ends with a powerful intrigue. Well done!!!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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thank you so much, Ailo! I'm really glad you enjoyed this piece. It's one of my favorite poems. I appreciate your most kind review, and the six stars! Wow! Makes my day!
Kimbob
Comment from FredCollingwood
Who wouldn't enjoy this poem. It rolls off the tongue, ans great descriptions and is fun to read. Perhaps a meter change somewhere in there, but I enjoyed it too much to go back and check.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Who wouldn't enjoy this poem. It rolls off the tongue, ans great descriptions and is fun to read. Perhaps a meter change somewhere in there, but I enjoyed it too much to go back and check.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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thanks very much, Fred! I really appreciate your kind remarks and the stars! Drop by anytime.
cheers
Kimbob
Comment from MizKat
Father Flaps - I like your dragon poem. It is really cute and it held my interest. The rhyming is great too. I also like the picture. Great job!!! Kat
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Father Flaps - I like your dragon poem. It is really cute and it held my interest. The rhyming is great too. I also like the picture. Great job!!! Kat
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2010
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Thanks Kat!
I'm glad you stopped by to read one of my favorite poems. I do appreciate your kind review, and stars!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment from Phoenix Rising
A very colorful ode to the Dragon of Dark Harbor. This tale is full of vivid imagery and has a great flow overall. Thanks for sharing this one Father Flaps.
My pleasure to read and review.
Phoenix Rising
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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A very colorful ode to the Dragon of Dark Harbor. This tale is full of vivid imagery and has a great flow overall. Thanks for sharing this one Father Flaps.
My pleasure to read and review.
Phoenix Rising
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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thanks so much, Phoenix Rising! I really appreciate your kind review, and stars! This is one of my favorite poems.
Kimbob
Comment from Steve427
Here! You take my last 6. You deserve it. This is the kind of poetry I want to write. Nice touch of onomotopeia(I hope that's how you spell it). Perfect abab rhyme scheme, great story, exceptional poem! Would you answer a question for me? Your rhythm is "da-`dum, da-`dum, da-`dum, da-`dum" for most of the poem, but the second and fifth stanzas read, "`DUM, da-`dum, da-`dum, da-`dum." Is that a problem or no? I would like to do that also but I thought it was considered being inconsistent. Personally, I had to adjust the way I read your poem a little, but it still read very well. I would sure like to hear your thoughts on that. Thank you. Steve
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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Here! You take my last 6. You deserve it. This is the kind of poetry I want to write. Nice touch of onomotopeia(I hope that's how you spell it). Perfect abab rhyme scheme, great story, exceptional poem! Would you answer a question for me? Your rhythm is "da-`dum, da-`dum, da-`dum, da-`dum" for most of the poem, but the second and fifth stanzas read, "`DUM, da-`dum, da-`dum, da-`dum." Is that a problem or no? I would like to do that also but I thought it was considered being inconsistent. Personally, I had to adjust the way I read your poem a little, but it still read very well. I would sure like to hear your thoughts on that. Thank you. Steve
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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Hi Steve
I changed the rhythm on these two stanzas on purpose as I wanted to emphasize the descriptions of the cliffs with the birds nesting there (2nd stanza), and the dragon's head (in the 5th stanza). I wanted them to stand out for the reader.
I'm so glad that you enjoyed my poem. It is one of my favorites.
Thank you so much for the kind review, and the stars! Oh my goodness...six stars! This is indeed an honor!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment from inneroracle
I thought that was good. You did a great job with rhymes. I enjoyed the great big roar rhyming with shore. I like how you were able to set the scene first about where the dragon lives and then you talk about the dragon and its effect on its surroundings, even when it isn't doing anything. You were able to fully tell a story with this poem.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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I thought that was good. You did a great job with rhymes. I enjoyed the great big roar rhyming with shore. I like how you were able to set the scene first about where the dragon lives and then you talk about the dragon and its effect on its surroundings, even when it isn't doing anything. You were able to fully tell a story with this poem.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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thank you, inneroracle! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks so much for your kind remarks, and stars!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment from JMRoland
Hi Father Flaps,
You have created a rare gem of a poem here,deserving of 6 stars for your excellent story line, rhyming scheme, and skillful choice of words. This poem should be published somewhere, somehow. Could be set to music. Might be perfect in a collection for childrren. Great job.
JMR
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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Hi Father Flaps,
You have created a rare gem of a poem here,deserving of 6 stars for your excellent story line, rhyming scheme, and skillful choice of words. This poem should be published somewhere, somehow. Could be set to music. Might be perfect in a collection for childrren. Great job.
JMR
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2010
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Thank you so very much for this kind review, and all those stars! I might have to get my telescope out! Thanks for the encouragement as well! I have sent 30 of my poems imcluding this one to a publisher... just waiting for my first rejection letter. But keeping my fingers crossed! I included some illustrations with my poetry.
What a nice review to wake up to this morning! You've made my day!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment from Ty Callow
I could hear the sound of, what was it? a lute? I could picture the fire in the hearth as the old bard sung the beautiful, time-honored legend of the dragon of the harbor. Belongs in a story (perhaps you could write it?) by the same name - a children's story. The meter, the rhyme, it all read (sounded) so smooth. It takes one away.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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I could hear the sound of, what was it? a lute? I could picture the fire in the hearth as the old bard sung the beautiful, time-honored legend of the dragon of the harbor. Belongs in a story (perhaps you could write it?) by the same name - a children's story. The meter, the rhyme, it all read (sounded) so smooth. It takes one away.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
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thanks so much, Ty! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks for your kind remarks, and stars!
Kimbob
Comment from adewpearl
Oh, I love puffins. :-)
love the internal rhyme of horrid, torrid
droning foghorns, singing whales - you are including so many things that totally enchant me
Wonderful cadence and strong abab rhyming, beautifully vivid detail - what a charming story set midst a gorgeous setting. Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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Oh, I love puffins. :-)
love the internal rhyme of horrid, torrid
droning foghorns, singing whales - you are including so many things that totally enchant me
Wonderful cadence and strong abab rhyming, beautifully vivid detail - what a charming story set midst a gorgeous setting. Brooke
Comment Written 02-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
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thank you, Brooke! I love your reviews. This is one of my very favorite poems. I'm so glad you like it!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment from BeccaInaDaffydill
I loved this story; it was very much like a song itself - maybe that's what the dragon was singing, eh?. I loved the imagery of the birds listening to the dragon's opera. (That stanza was my favorite).
Lovely, I truly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!
~Becca
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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I loved this story; it was very much like a song itself - maybe that's what the dragon was singing, eh?. I loved the imagery of the birds listening to the dragon's opera. (That stanza was my favorite).
Lovely, I truly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!
~Becca
Comment Written 31-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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thanks Becca! I'm glad you liked my poem. It's one of my favorites. I really appreciate your kind review!
Kim
