Gramalot's Storybook
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Faith Keeps Me Strong"A book of stories and poems for kids of all ages.
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Comment from jackpeg
A delightful, childlike poem one might even teach a tot to memorize. two lines, the I & H lines in FAITH, are out of scan and should match the four-accent lines in F, A, and T.
If the I line read, "I'll follow the path that shows the way." it would match the others. On second look, the H line is o.k.
After the rewording, a lot better. Take five.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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A delightful, childlike poem one might even teach a tot to memorize. two lines, the I & H lines in FAITH, are out of scan and should match the four-accent lines in F, A, and T.
If the I line read, "I'll follow the path that shows the way." it would match the others. On second look, the H line is o.k.
After the rewording, a lot better. Take five.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thanks for your helpful comments.
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I read my poem and changed the "I" line and the last line. Read it now and I hope you see it alls flows much better now.
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O.k. Looking it up now.
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Hope you feel the urge to change my rating to at least a 5. Thanks in advance.
Comment from JMonroe
This was very good! I am glad that your granddaughter did well with her talk. I'm sure that this poem gave her a boost of confidence. :)
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This was very good! I am glad that your granddaughter did well with her talk. I'm sure that this poem gave her a boost of confidence. :)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thanks for your kind comments and 5 star rating. Yes, my granddaughter has been able to speak more in public since that first time.
Comment from JeJo
Beautiful rhyming poem about faith. I liked that you said faith was a way of life. Excellent acronym and simple enough for the child to read and understand. - JeJo
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Beautiful rhyming poem about faith. I liked that you said faith was a way of life. Excellent acronym and simple enough for the child to read and understand. - JeJo
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your comments and 5 star rating.
Comment from almajac
This flows beautifully!
My favorite lines-
I'll walk this path knowing Faith leads the way,
To all the blessings I receive each day.
Heading towards where I know I can be:
Living with my Heavenly Father eternally
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This flows beautifully!
My favorite lines-
I'll walk this path knowing Faith leads the way,
To all the blessings I receive each day.
Heading towards where I know I can be:
Living with my Heavenly Father eternally
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you very much for your comments and rating.
Comment from Ann Smith
The Bible says, "unless we come as a little child..." Their faith is so strong. I can hear your granddaughter's voice, and she is lucky to have a grandma like you. I like the format of the acrostic within the body of the poem. Good luck with the contest. Welcome to fanstory. I joined in Jan. and have learned alot. ann
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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The Bible says, "unless we come as a little child..." Their faith is so strong. I can hear your granddaughter's voice, and she is lucky to have a grandma like you. I like the format of the acrostic within the body of the poem. Good luck with the contest. Welcome to fanstory. I joined in Jan. and have learned alot. ann
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your welcome, your comments and the 5 star rating.
Comment from countess gram
This is a beautiful prayer for a child. The words are written with feeling and have an emotional pull. Good luck in the contest. Well done!
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This is a beautiful prayer for a child. The words are written with feeling and have an emotional pull. Good luck in the contest. Well done!
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thanks, from one gram to another!
