Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 " Special forces soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from PuigmartiB
This is really sad. Honestly, i though the concept was good, typical, but good. You could have done much more with it and i wish you did... goo attempt. P.S. i don't like the font, its hard to read....
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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This is really sad. Honestly, i though the concept was good, typical, but good. You could have done much more with it and i wish you did... goo attempt. P.S. i don't like the font, its hard to read....
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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please come back when you write somethink and let me review it i would love to see how you write thanks
Comment from fictionwriter
There is no room for the pain to get to you. There are so many that have died to save our butts, and most American's have no idea. Thanks for showing them a slice. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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There is no room for the pain to get to you. There are so many that have died to save our butts, and most American's have no idea. Thanks for showing them a slice. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you fictionwriter for your welcome comments and review Gary
Comment from vandawalker
Certainly intense with unbelievable suffering. Each step that is taken is realistic and harsh. This is very good and different writing. Good work.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Certainly intense with unbelievable suffering. Each step that is taken is realistic and harsh. This is very good and different writing. Good work.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you Vandawalker for youe welcome review and comments Gary
Comment from Werdy_Nerd
This is powerful work. Despite the lack of punctuation, it works and reads like prose. The treatment of the subject matter seems distant and detached but this is well done here. Your words have made me stop and think hard about what it means to be in the armed forces. I don't know how those individuals do what they do, when the training itself is that gruelling. They have my respect.
Werdy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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This is powerful work. Despite the lack of punctuation, it works and reads like prose. The treatment of the subject matter seems distant and detached but this is well done here. Your words have made me stop and think hard about what it means to be in the armed forces. I don't know how those individuals do what they do, when the training itself is that gruelling. They have my respect.
Werdy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you for your comments and review Werdy
Comment from bhogg
Very powerful read. I know that you wrote this way intentionally, but some minimal punctuation might help. Maybe it was your intention for us to read without stopping, kind of like the situation you describe.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Very powerful read. I know that you wrote this way intentionally, but some minimal punctuation might help. Maybe it was your intention for us to read without stopping, kind of like the situation you describe.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you bhogg i did when i write i post and let others read and comment but thanks for your review Gary
Comment from cherry_rose
I'm an Air Force veteran myself, and I would not have wanted to be placed in combat zones. Granted, it limited the job opportunities, but I don't really feel the average US man is going to be able to stay strong if a woman is targeted for abuse and worse by the enemy. I'm in favor of women in combat, but only if they can do everyting the men in the unit can do. Preferential treatment should not be given based on sex...and you've painted a stark picture of exactly why not.
cherry_
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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I'm an Air Force veteran myself, and I would not have wanted to be placed in combat zones. Granted, it limited the job opportunities, but I don't really feel the average US man is going to be able to stay strong if a woman is targeted for abuse and worse by the enemy. I'm in favor of women in combat, but only if they can do everyting the men in the unit can do. Preferential treatment should not be given based on sex...and you've painted a stark picture of exactly why not.
cherry_
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you cherry same same here
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Deepwater, this story cuts deep and those back home never know and never will what this young man really goes through. War is harsh and unrelenting. Fancy seeing your mate shot in the back of the head just for information.
Well told. luv jada
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Hi Deepwater, this story cuts deep and those back home never know and never will what this young man really goes through. War is harsh and unrelenting. Fancy seeing your mate shot in the back of the head just for information.
Well told. luv jada
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review and comments Jade GW
Comment from lilblackcat
It's very moving, especially since this seems to be a never ending battle now. The way you wrote it makes it sound more like someone trying to tell their story in a hurry, as if every second counts. Very well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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It's very moving, especially since this seems to be a never ending battle now. The way you wrote it makes it sound more like someone trying to tell their story in a hurry, as if every second counts. Very well done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Your messsage is a good one, Gary. But I must say that fiction without punctuation is very awkward to me--don't know when to pause or where one sentence ends.
Would be a great piece, with a few periods.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Your messsage is a good one, Gary. But I must say that fiction without punctuation is very awkward to me--don't know when to pause or where one sentence ends.
Would be a great piece, with a few periods.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thanks for the review Isaiah
Comment from jwlee211
You paint an accurate description of the horrors of war. I really wish that we did not have to send men or women into the front lines. Maybe one day war will not be necessary
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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You paint an accurate description of the horrors of war. I really wish that we did not have to send men or women into the front lines. Maybe one day war will not be necessary
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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thank you jw for reading this GW
