Ease My Pain
For my friend, Gaye150 total reviews
Comment from shelley kaye
a verse in "if today was your last day" by nickelback says....
Would you call old friends you never see?
Reminisce of memories
Would you forgive your enemies?
i 'heard' that song going through my head as i read this
didn't notice any spaggies or typos
thanx for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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a verse in "if today was your last day" by nickelback says....
Would you call old friends you never see?
Reminisce of memories
Would you forgive your enemies?
i 'heard' that song going through my head as i read this
didn't notice any spaggies or typos
thanx for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Ah, yes, an excellent song indeed. Thank you, Shel. I do so appreciate your review.
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from Somer
This was truly a touching story. It's very well written. I'm sorry about your friend, I hope everything turns out okay.
One thing: You put 'Why did it take that phone call to I realize I still do?' You added the extra 'I.'
Anyways, great story! :)
Thanks,
Somer
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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This was truly a touching story. It's very well written. I'm sorry about your friend, I hope everything turns out okay.
One thing: You put 'Why did it take that phone call to I realize I still do?' You added the extra 'I.'
Anyways, great story! :)
Thanks,
Somer
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Thank you, Somer. I will fix that nit! Many thanks.
Jani
Comment from Judian James
The pain in this paragraph: "They say time heals all wounds, but it isn't true. Time buries wounds, until a word spoken, a whiff of memory, tears open the wound and the pain surfaces as though time itself dissolved into yesterday. One never really forgets." is palpable, Jani!
"Ironic, don't you think? In the end, your friendship now may be the only thing that can ease my pain." Wow the power in your words throughout this piece is amazing. Don't beat yourself up ... sometimes it takes pain to bring people together again. You had a lot to bear. You weren't mean, you were just "gone" and that's okay, considering. Well written as always and I'm so pleased you are there for her now. You are friends in need now, and that's okay. excellent, my dear friend
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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The pain in this paragraph: "They say time heals all wounds, but it isn't true. Time buries wounds, until a word spoken, a whiff of memory, tears open the wound and the pain surfaces as though time itself dissolved into yesterday. One never really forgets." is palpable, Jani!
"Ironic, don't you think? In the end, your friendship now may be the only thing that can ease my pain." Wow the power in your words throughout this piece is amazing. Don't beat yourself up ... sometimes it takes pain to bring people together again. You had a lot to bear. You weren't mean, you were just "gone" and that's okay, considering. Well written as always and I'm so pleased you are there for her now. You are friends in need now, and that's okay. excellent, my dear friend
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Bless your heart. Thanks, Jude. Your words mean a great deal to me.
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from FredCollingwood
I can feel the pain. I knw it's no consolation, but that's excellent writing. Minor comments:
days on the beach, playgroup, school -- the list goes on and on. > no spaces with an em dash
All at once, you became the other woman and( )the person my children had > extra space
Time buries wounds, until a word spoken, a whiff of memory, tears open the wound() and the pain surfaces as though time itself dissolved into yesterday. > add comma. Independent clauses
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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I can feel the pain. I knw it's no consolation, but that's excellent writing. Minor comments:
days on the beach, playgroup, school -- the list goes on and on. > no spaces with an em dash
All at once, you became the other woman and( )the person my children had > extra space
Time buries wounds, until a word spoken, a whiff of memory, tears open the wound() and the pain surfaces as though time itself dissolved into yesterday. > add comma. Independent clauses
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much, Fred. I have made the corrections. Thank you for taking the time to point them out and for your kind words.
Jani
Comment from Dave M
Janilou,
This is a well written post, good, flowing style and no nits. Otherwise, it's difficult for me to comment on this. I just hope things work out.
Dave
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Janilou,
This is a well written post, good, flowing style and no nits. Otherwise, it's difficult for me to comment on this. I just hope things work out.
Dave
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much, Dave.
Jani
Comment from tspencer
Good and interesting story! Friendship is a great thing and should always be cherished. Thank for the writing such a good story.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Good and interesting story! Friendship is a great thing and should always be cherished. Thank for the writing such a good story.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much for your review. I do appreciate it.
Jani
Comment from chocoletdrop052
If we could rewrite the times that are worse, then could that be better, I find that forgiveness is just the start of healing. I was once in that same situation, but it took a moment to forgive and move on. It takes courage to give up on a battle that is not yours in the first place, and love the ones who brought you so much pain. Stay uplifted my precious one, for the Lord knows a true giver. Stay blessed and keep writing. This one story would be a good book, I am interested in seeing how it ends.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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If we could rewrite the times that are worse, then could that be better, I find that forgiveness is just the start of healing. I was once in that same situation, but it took a moment to forgive and move on. It takes courage to give up on a battle that is not yours in the first place, and love the ones who brought you so much pain. Stay uplifted my precious one, for the Lord knows a true giver. Stay blessed and keep writing. This one story would be a good book, I am interested in seeing how it ends.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much. It took this for me to realize, that in refusing to be friends, I was in fact harboring unforgiveness. So glad you took the time to review. Thank you.
Jani
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Jani, it easy for others to say, time heals all wounds, but that's not true, for Lord pierced your heart, and it is was the love that you had all the time. Your just speaking what the was there all the time. Remember, love has no conditions, and no consequences, it can weigh heavy or it can weigh light, but it will always have substance. I pray that you let go of the mess and let the Lord do what he knows best, for there is nothing greater than his love for you. Stay blessed precious and expect a miracle. Karen
Comment from Jnetgame
What a sad story. I definitely think you should send the letter to your friend, it's not too late to reconnect. Just one missing punctuation mark.
Why did it take that phone call to I realize I still do.(?)
Thanks for sharing this and I hope you and your friend work thngs out.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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What a sad story. I definitely think you should send the letter to your friend, it's not too late to reconnect. Just one missing punctuation mark.
Why did it take that phone call to I realize I still do.(?)
Thanks for sharing this and I hope you and your friend work thngs out.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Ah, thank you. I will see to that nit right now. Many thanks for your kind words.
Jani
Comment from anabellapongasi
This is a very sad true story, written from the heart. I am so sorry about what happened that broke your once-special friendship and I am so sorry that she is very sick now. It is very sad that it usually takes something tragic to happen before we realize something...But it's not too late. This letter is a very good thing you are doing. My prayers are with you and your friend.
Anabella
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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This is a very sad true story, written from the heart. I am so sorry about what happened that broke your once-special friendship and I am so sorry that she is very sick now. It is very sad that it usually takes something tragic to happen before we realize something...But it's not too late. This letter is a very good thing you are doing. My prayers are with you and your friend.
Anabella
Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much, Anabella. I do very much appreciate your comments and your prayers.
Hugs,
Jani
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You're very welcome.
Anabella
Comment from adewpearl
I don't think you've gone wrong at all and you should send it as is, as soon as possible. You are honest, genuine, explain your hurt and why you held onto the distrust, you show her how you recognize her efforts to reconnect, you let her know you are sorry for the missed years that might have been, and you let her know you are here for her now. With a terrible prognosis, she could really use this letter, I believe. I certainly know this letter and my old friend's renewed friendship would help me in these circumstances. Brooke
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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I don't think you've gone wrong at all and you should send it as is, as soon as possible. You are honest, genuine, explain your hurt and why you held onto the distrust, you show her how you recognize her efforts to reconnect, you let her know you are sorry for the missed years that might have been, and you let her know you are here for her now. With a terrible prognosis, she could really use this letter, I believe. I certainly know this letter and my old friend's renewed friendship would help me in these circumstances. Brooke
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2010
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Thank you so, so much, Brooke. I can't tell you how much your kind words mean to me. I will send it to her.
Hugs,
Jani
