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Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "a perfect night falls"I dare you....
10 total reviews
Comment from Nicki_Mist
"no one would surrender tonight"
I really enjoyed that line very much. I'm sure someone was very disappointed. lol Good imagery and keep on writing like this.
Nicole
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
"no one would surrender tonight"
I really enjoyed that line very much. I'm sure someone was very disappointed. lol Good imagery and keep on writing like this.
Nicole
Comment Written 05-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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lol thanx nicole :)
Comment from Pili Pubul
You responded very well to the challenge, I love the imagery, very romantic and passionate even without surrender, LOL.
as waves of emotion
crashed on the shore
salty tears flowed
over bodies entangled
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
You responded very well to the challenge, I love the imagery, very romantic and passionate even without surrender, LOL.
as waves of emotion
crashed on the shore
salty tears flowed
over bodies entangled
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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thanx pili! :)
Comment from mmichelle97219
:-) its the best kind of surrender if there has to be one. Good one shelley I am glad you liked the line just as much as I did.
Michelle
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
:-) its the best kind of surrender if there has to be one. Good one shelley I am glad you liked the line just as much as I did.
Michelle
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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thanx! :)
Comment from Sasha
I enjoy these challenges very much. I am still trying to think of one for you but fortunately others are doing a pretty good job. I enjoyed this very much. Please, keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
I enjoy these challenges very much. I am still trying to think of one for you but fortunately others are doing a pretty good job. I enjoyed this very much. Please, keep up the great work.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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lol thanx smurphette :)
Comment from learning_to_write
I thought this poem had really good imagery, I could see that beach, and in the last line I could feel her fear.
Easy read, good flow.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
I thought this poem had really good imagery, I could see that beach, and in the last line I could feel her fear.
Easy read, good flow.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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thank you learning :)
Comment from Brantley88
This reminded me of that famous scene from the movie, HERE TO ETERNITY, the imagery was that strong. Excellent application of the English Language.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
This reminded me of that famous scene from the movie, HERE TO ETERNITY, the imagery was that strong. Excellent application of the English Language.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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cool! thank you so much! :-)
Comment from RADIO
Yes, go on, and she missed the
opportunity to go from here to
eternity as the scene played between
Deborah and burt. Yes, I remember,
he was 17 and she was 33. Yes, go on.
As always I enjoy your imaginative writing.
Radio
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
Yes, go on, and she missed the
opportunity to go from here to
eternity as the scene played between
Deborah and burt. Yes, I remember,
he was 17 and she was 33. Yes, go on.
As always I enjoy your imaginative writing.
Radio
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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never saw that movie lol
Comment from Charlene0513
To shelley kaye, Apoem addressing the errotic feelings that a couple have toether as they skirmish their bodies on the sands until they are pulled under.
Different yet tantilizing fervor.
Charlene
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
To shelley kaye, Apoem addressing the errotic feelings that a couple have toether as they skirmish their bodies on the sands until they are pulled under.
Different yet tantilizing fervor.
Charlene
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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hehe thank you charlene :)
Comment from sugarfish
I like this poem and think that you've done a good job in the challenge of creating something based on the one line given. Your image is strong and the words don't feel forced. Good job overall.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
I like this poem and think that you've done a good job in the challenge of creating something based on the one line given. Your image is strong and the words don't feel forced. Good job overall.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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thank you sugar :)
Comment from Chuck23
Your poem is a pleasure to read. It offered great flow, without the steady rhyme. Your words created a very romantic atmospher which I easily envisioned.
Thank you for sharing you poetry! Your very talented!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
Your poem is a pleasure to read. It offered great flow, without the steady rhyme. Your words created a very romantic atmospher which I easily envisioned.
Thank you for sharing you poetry! Your very talented!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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and thank you for reading it! :-)