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Writings From the Heart

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A book of Poetry & Writing

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Comment from Jean Lutz
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In addition to the physical and emotional pains of war, now another heartbreak has been added - disrespect. How it must pain those who now serve.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2010
    thanks for reading Jean
Comment from thequillman
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deepwater, another fine piece of poetry. I find myself being drawn to your poetry, almost as a continual living memorial for those soldiers who are now nameless and faceless. Thank you for keeping their memory alive. well done. quill.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thank you for your welcome comments quill with respect Gary
Comment from mjfande
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Wow, I can really feel your poem. The descriptiveness that you use with such a small amount of words, and with a rhythm to it, is phenomenal. It felt like I was actually there, or at least watching a really intense war movie since I doubt I will ever know what it feels like to be in that kind of a situation.
My heart goes out to those forgotten soldiers and their families. I am honored just to be able to know of them.
Keep up with the awesome writing.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thank you for your welcome comments mj and for the 6 stars you have put on this work to remember the soldiers of pass years
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi GW,

Your imagery, in this poem, is great. I like that you used the first person, it gives reality to the words. How very sad that 6,000 soldiers were buried in a mass grave without ID tags. I can only guess how much their loved ones must have wondered about them. A wonderful tribute to very brave men. Well done....chey

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thank you chey for your welcome comments
Comment from FredCollingwood
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With the two great wars, our nation has left several thousand more throughout europe. Some over there remember ... others have forgotten. I'm glad you haven't. I haven't forgotten, either.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thanks for your welcome comments Fred
Comment from Mike K2
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You did pick a harsh war to write about. This well written poem did capture my attention very well. I not only enjoyed the details, but the emotions that are represented. We don't often think about them.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thank you Mike
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi deepwater,

What a very nice tribute to the fallen of that long forgotten battle. The slaughter on those French fields was horredous and even today one can sense the agony as you stand where the trenches were. The Menin Gate reduced me to tears - the men named on it have no known graves, they are indeed "vanished away, as if they had never been."

Patrick

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thank you Patrick for your welcome comments
Comment from RazberryBullet
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World War I was truly horrific! So many dead, more from disease and gas than bullets, I think.

Scary last line here: Six thousand soldiers, we march through the night/only two hundred soldiers made it up there today.

Well done!

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thank you Raz for reading
Comment from AmorGentil
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it is sad, real sad, soldiers fighting, following orders, going to their certain death, is there any act of valor greater than this? and what is their reward?
Not even the recognition of their names.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thank you Amor for the comment and reading thats why i write myfriend
Comment from Wendyanne
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Hi deepwater. I found this to be a sad and poignant, well-written piece of war poetry. Your poem makes us realize just how few people actually survived and the tremendous loss of life during the war

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2010


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
    thanks for reading Wendy