Kidnapped for Slavery - Part One
A Canadian Nurse is Kidnapped and Sold14 total reviews
Comment from Christina_Dufek
What a nicely written but horrible story. It's a harsh reality that is so easy to dismiss because it just makes me sick to think about stuff like this.
Focusing on the content, there was just one typo that I found.
"Because of the was you have presented this merchandise to me and embarrassed me before my clients, you will not be paid for your efforts."
*Should be "Because of the WAY..." Just an FYI
Thank you for sharing this piece of work, and though it is difficult for me to read, I am very anxious for Part II, and I hope I don't miss it! You definitely ended the story at a great place to keep your audience's attention!
So great job!
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What a nicely written but horrible story. It's a harsh reality that is so easy to dismiss because it just makes me sick to think about stuff like this.
Focusing on the content, there was just one typo that I found.
"Because of the was you have presented this merchandise to me and embarrassed me before my clients, you will not be paid for your efforts."
*Should be "Because of the WAY..." Just an FYI
Thank you for sharing this piece of work, and though it is difficult for me to read, I am very anxious for Part II, and I hope I don't miss it! You definitely ended the story at a great place to keep your audience's attention!
So great job!
Comment Written 27-May-2010
Comment from Charmane
This story excerpt brings directly into the story. The characters are so realistic and prolific. The dialogue makes the heart beat fast, and the action allows you to embrace the theme as it unfolds. I liked the steady energy that flowed from the characters, I thought that the story was too descriptive or wordy. However, the storyline is fantastic!
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This story excerpt brings directly into the story. The characters are so realistic and prolific. The dialogue makes the heart beat fast, and the action allows you to embrace the theme as it unfolds. I liked the steady energy that flowed from the characters, I thought that the story was too descriptive or wordy. However, the storyline is fantastic!
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Comment Written 27-May-2010
Comment from Tpa
A very intense, well-written story with believable characters. My mouse was frantically scrolling down each paragraph and made me wish was second part was just a scroll away. You had suspense, drama, and action; a good recipe for great reading.
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A very intense, well-written story with believable characters. My mouse was frantically scrolling down each paragraph and made me wish was second part was just a scroll away. You had suspense, drama, and action; a good recipe for great reading.
Comment Written 27-May-2010
Comment from ulster3
Wow Thesis.
I have to become a fan because I would not be pleased to miss the second part. This is a horrendous practice, but you have written about it with excellent style.
Fondly, Rebecca
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Wow Thesis.
I have to become a fan because I would not be pleased to miss the second part. This is a horrendous practice, but you have written about it with excellent style.
Fondly, Rebecca
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Comment Written 27-May-2010
