Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Her life she must endure"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Valkarie
I like this because...It has a good flow is concise and is qualkarie...ite inspiring, but you need to watch your lettering as its too small on this piece.
Your poem flows so well and the picture you paint is so real with a good balance and a intiguing emotional feel.
Good write.
V
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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I like this because...It has a good flow is concise and is qualkarie...ite inspiring, but you need to watch your lettering as its too small on this piece.
Your poem flows so well and the picture you paint is so real with a good balance and a intiguing emotional feel.
Good write.
V
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you Valkarie for reading
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Exquisite Poetry, and what wonder background image you have used. Lovely and superb one!
The line flow with such warmth and class,
er fancy ways long gone with age,
Her life she must endure[ Fancy style]
K
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Exquisite Poetry, and what wonder background image you have used. Lovely and superb one!
The line flow with such warmth and class,
er fancy ways long gone with age,
Her life she must endure[ Fancy style]
K
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you K for reading
Comment from jwlee211
i like this poem. It has an interesting message. You might want to look at the line that says has change--it needs to read has changed. good work
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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i like this poem. It has an interesting message. You might want to look at the line that says has change--it needs to read has changed. good work
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you Jw and for the comment
Comment from Pili Pubul
Good poem my friend,it seems a hard life indeed , perhaps mostly not to have him home often. Life is hard for most woman in general, but the loneliness you so well describe must be sad...
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Good poem my friend,it seems a hard life indeed , perhaps mostly not to have him home often. Life is hard for most woman in general, but the loneliness you so well describe must be sad...
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you pil hope your doing ok
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Doing fine, ty :>)
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good
Comment from janian
I'm not sure exactly how to express my thoughts on this. How we want life to be versus how it really is. sometimes hard and lonely but worth it.nice picture by the way.janian
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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I'm not sure exactly how to express my thoughts on this. How we want life to be versus how it really is. sometimes hard and lonely but worth it.nice picture by the way.janian
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you jan
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any time, janian
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thank you
Comment from Awatef
This is a well written poem describing some cowgirl's lives. Great job and it can relate to some cowgirls living in the city, LOL.
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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This is a well written poem describing some cowgirl's lives. Great job and it can relate to some cowgirls living in the city, LOL.
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you Awatef for reading
Comment from Jay Squires
Your content, subject matter, sincerity, is its usual high caliber. You have some problems with the mechanics, but your bio says you know that.
Her live revolves around dates and times, [Her LIFE revolves...]
when there was just the two [when there WERE just the two >> verb must agree with number.]
How sweet it was to think of thing's [to think of THINGS >> plural, not possessive]
Best of luck to you with your writing.
Jay
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Your content, subject matter, sincerity, is its usual high caliber. You have some problems with the mechanics, but your bio says you know that.
Her live revolves around dates and times, [Her LIFE revolves...]
when there was just the two [when there WERE just the two >> verb must agree with number.]
How sweet it was to think of thing's [to think of THINGS >> plural, not possessive]
Best of luck to you with your writing.
Jay
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thanks for your comments
Comment from AreKay'd
This is certainly cute, and it conveys the vision you are trying to. But there's a couple of spelling problems you need to correct...
The line:"Her live revolves.." shouldn't that be life instead of live?
The line:"Her life has change..." shouldn't that be changed instead of change?
Walmart should have a capitol W and no hyphen in it.
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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This is certainly cute, and it conveys the vision you are trying to. But there's a couple of spelling problems you need to correct...
The line:"Her live revolves.." shouldn't that be life instead of live?
The line:"Her life has change..." shouldn't that be changed instead of change?
Walmart should have a capitol W and no hyphen in it.
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thanks for the comments
Comment from Chuck23
What a beautiful poem! I found it most enjoyable to read, as I found myself smiling at her life... how we change over time!
Thank you for sharing your poetry!
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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What a beautiful poem! I found it most enjoyable to read, as I found myself smiling at her life... how we change over time!
Thank you for sharing your poetry!
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you Chuck
Comment from marcii
It seem to have a sad tone to it, im unsure if that was your intent.
I believe it is well written and if you have any spelling or grammar areas within,im much the same so wouldn't judge you on that at alone.
Marcii
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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It seem to have a sad tone to it, im unsure if that was your intent.
I believe it is well written and if you have any spelling or grammar areas within,im much the same so wouldn't judge you on that at alone.
Marcii
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you Marcii
