Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "October Morn"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from DanielEkine
As a reader, I am slowly growing fond of your poems. A remarkable and steamy style. The Spelling, Punctuation and Grammar flows brilliantly. Very meticulous. A well-deserved recognition it earned.
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As a reader, I am slowly growing fond of your poems. A remarkable and steamy style. The Spelling, Punctuation and Grammar flows brilliantly. Very meticulous. A well-deserved recognition it earned.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
To deepwater,
An essence of one's being to sail and view the ocean blue with not a care in the world would certainly be the wish of anyone that has not experienced anything.
Good use of some proximate statements.
Charlene
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To deepwater,
An essence of one's being to sail and view the ocean blue with not a care in the world would certainly be the wish of anyone that has not experienced anything.
Good use of some proximate statements.
Charlene
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
We could all die tomorrow but why worry about it? I just want to live in the present and whatever happens happens. I've lived through to much to sit and worry about if I'll wake up tomorrow or not. I'm living for right now, not tomorrow. Maybe that sounded weird. LOL. Great job with this
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We could all die tomorrow but why worry about it? I just want to live in the present and whatever happens happens. I've lived through to much to sit and worry about if I'll wake up tomorrow or not. I'm living for right now, not tomorrow. Maybe that sounded weird. LOL. Great job with this
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a well written free verse which speaks eloquently to the last thoughts one may have before dying. It flows well in the reading and repeating the first line at the end punctuates it nicely. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This is a well written free verse which speaks eloquently to the last thoughts one may have before dying. It flows well in the reading and repeating the first line at the end punctuates it nicely. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from McMurry903
I love the somber tone and depth of this piece, GW. I really like the repetition of the first line in closing. You pose a question that we all think about especially later in life. We all hope to leave a lasting mark and solid example for our family. Very well done!
Brian
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I love the somber tone and depth of this piece, GW. I really like the repetition of the first line in closing. You pose a question that we all think about especially later in life. We all hope to leave a lasting mark and solid example for our family. Very well done!
Brian
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from words
An interesting look at end of life contemplations.
I think that all of us can relate to the content.
Did we fulfill our destiny.
Did we live up to expectations.
Did we leave anything of value behind.
d
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An interesting look at end of life contemplations.
I think that all of us can relate to the content.
Did we fulfill our destiny.
Did we live up to expectations.
Did we leave anything of value behind.
d
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from ronnie k
I have not followed uyour book, this read has me in regrets, I loved the look into living and the thoughts of dieing, each line gave me reason to pause and pondered the answers of my life.
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I have not followed uyour book, this read has me in regrets, I loved the look into living and the thoughts of dieing, each line gave me reason to pause and pondered the answers of my life.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
you have chosen your words well to portray your journey as you stop and wonder on this cold morning what else you have
no matter what you have set examples for your to follow and learn from
cheers Smoothiecool
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you have chosen your words well to portray your journey as you stop and wonder on this cold morning what else you have
no matter what you have set examples for your to follow and learn from
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good description that paints a clear picture in my mind and allow me to feel the impact of the words written. Good alliteration with time/to...life/lived...some/sorrow...lay/life...leave/lead... Strong start complimented by a strong ending.
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Good description that paints a clear picture in my mind and allow me to feel the impact of the words written. Good alliteration with time/to...life/lived...some/sorrow...lay/life...leave/lead... Strong start complimented by a strong ending.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from dennis0530
This is obviously written on the deathbed as the character awaits his final moments. There is a pervasive mood of regret and the poem is tinge with sadness.
The picture is an apt accompaniment as it is symbolic. It shows the dying sun in the background while in the foreground, a wave breaks at the start of its back journey to mix with the vast ocean.
The character asks: "Did I live my life as it should have been lived? Maybe a satisfying answer will lead to a peaceful ending.
4th line : "what lies ahead" is better
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This is obviously written on the deathbed as the character awaits his final moments. There is a pervasive mood of regret and the poem is tinge with sadness.
The picture is an apt accompaniment as it is symbolic. It shows the dying sun in the background while in the foreground, a wave breaks at the start of its back journey to mix with the vast ocean.
The character asks: "Did I live my life as it should have been lived? Maybe a satisfying answer will lead to a peaceful ending.
4th line : "what lies ahead" is better
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
