Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Perp Ihebom
A nice addition to this great work of fiction. I really felt touched to read about Leya's ordeal in her family before she escaped the fate her own father had condemned her to. Very well done
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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A nice addition to this great work of fiction. I really felt touched to read about Leya's ordeal in her family before she escaped the fate her own father had condemned her to. Very well done
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
Well, it seems like these tow are finally going to work things out. I'm glad they are talking and hope that it all get out. well done.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Well, it seems like these tow are finally going to work things out. I'm glad they are talking and hope that it all get out. well done.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Harrisa
Good thing she got away from Carlos, he sound like an awful man. It look like she is ready to be with Steven, but it is hard for her to trust him. This is another chapter that I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Good thing she got away from Carlos, he sound like an awful man. It look like she is ready to be with Steven, but it is hard for her to trust him. This is another chapter that I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from daniela.albu
A very well written book with strong characters. Indeed, Leya is experiecing a soul storm. The style is accurate and balanced. Many things happen to contribute to the character's transformation journey:
"Our fathers signed the marriage contract at our hacienda. After they signed it, I went outside trying to think of how I was going to avoid marrying him. Carlos followed me. He decided he was going to get an early start on our wedding night. He said I already belonged to him, so why wait."
She took an extra pillow and hugged it. "I refused and fought back. My mother came out and stopped him. This time I received a few broken ribs. My father said Carlos had every right to sample the merchandise." She squeezed the pillow tighter. "Mother won that time."
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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A very well written book with strong characters. Indeed, Leya is experiecing a soul storm. The style is accurate and balanced. Many things happen to contribute to the character's transformation journey:
"Our fathers signed the marriage contract at our hacienda. After they signed it, I went outside trying to think of how I was going to avoid marrying him. Carlos followed me. He decided he was going to get an early start on our wedding night. He said I already belonged to him, so why wait."
She took an extra pillow and hugged it. "I refused and fought back. My mother came out and stopped him. This time I received a few broken ribs. My father said Carlos had every right to sample the merchandise." She squeezed the pillow tighter. "Mother won that time."
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Arkine
Well, to put it blunly her father was a POS and doesn't deserve to be morned, but he was her father and I guess she's going to do that anyway because she's a caring person. Maybe they'll get lucky and someone will put a bullet in Carlos too? Good chapter! Didn't catch any nits. :)
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Well, to put it blunly her father was a POS and doesn't deserve to be morned, but he was her father and I guess she's going to do that anyway because she's a caring person. Maybe they'll get lucky and someone will put a bullet in Carlos too? Good chapter! Didn't catch any nits. :)
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I enjoyed this chapter, Barbara -
I do like a little romance, even
if she did wait until she'd finished
eating. Ha!
She rubbed (her)eyes
A healthy shade of red covered her cheeks
A healthy blush of red tinted her cheeks - just a thought
She removed (the)wrapper
Margaret
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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I enjoyed this chapter, Barbara -
I do like a little romance, even
if she did wait until she'd finished
eating. Ha!
She rubbed (her)eyes
A healthy shade of red covered her cheeks
A healthy blush of red tinted her cheeks - just a thought
She removed (the)wrapper
Margaret
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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No matter how many times I read over my post I still miss those words. I would have sworn they were there. I liked the tinted. I changed it. Thank you for your support and kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
A wonderful story. I have enjoyed reading it very much. You kept my interest all the way through. I did not find any spag. Good job.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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A wonderful story. I have enjoyed reading it very much. You kept my interest all the way through. I did not find any spag. Good job.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. I appreciate both.
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Another good one from you. The character of steven was awesome as usual. the expression and ending were exquisite.
This proves to be going great.
well done
K
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Another good one from you. The character of steven was awesome as usual. the expression and ending were exquisite.
This proves to be going great.
well done
K
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support. I appreciate both.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Girlfriend, this was a good fast paced chapter. I looks as if we're getting there with this affair. These two are so sweet together. Now Steven knows all about Leya I'm sure things between them will improve in leaps and bounds. Well done. luv jada
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Hi Girlfriend, this was a good fast paced chapter. I looks as if we're getting there with this affair. These two are so sweet together. Now Steven knows all about Leya I'm sure things between them will improve in leaps and bounds. Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. You better know how much I appreciate you.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Graphic, but true ;p--Love is like any other growing thing. It has to work its way through the manure to blossom.
Liked these lines: "I don't think there's any nutritional value in candy bars." "True, but it makes you smile." ;p...
"These are 'what did I do to deserve you being so nice to me tears'." :)
suggestion: "Can you give me time(to)process this?"
I appreciate the background information about Leya, her father and Carlos since I came into the story mid-way.
Good job!
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Graphic, but true ;p--Love is like any other growing thing. It has to work its way through the manure to blossom.
Liked these lines: "I don't think there's any nutritional value in candy bars." "True, but it makes you smile." ;p...
"These are 'what did I do to deserve you being so nice to me tears'." :)
suggestion: "Can you give me time(to)process this?"
I appreciate the background information about Leya, her father and Carlos since I came into the story mid-way.
Good job!
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I fixed the error. I am tying up all the loose ends for the ending.
