Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "This fellow's on the Square"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi GW,
A excellent image to enhance your poem and I am wondering if you drew it yourself. A couple of good end rhymes that pulls the words down the page with ease. An enjoyable poem with a good message in the last line. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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Hi GW,
A excellent image to enhance your poem and I am wondering if you drew it yourself. A couple of good end rhymes that pulls the words down the page with ease. An enjoyable poem with a good message in the last line. Well done....chey
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you chey
Comment from ryanlion
a very modest, easy going poem that makes the reader think of what they have done with their lives and what people will think of them. you have chosen your words well and the message contained within is clear
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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a very modest, easy going poem that makes the reader think of what they have done with their lives and what people will think of them. you have chosen your words well and the message contained within is clear
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you ryan
Comment from Dall
I like this, and what is a man worth if not the strength of his word. I think many of the younger ones should read this. It was very well written, I enjoyed it... Well done!
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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I like this, and what is a man worth if not the strength of his word. I think many of the younger ones should read this. It was very well written, I enjoyed it... Well done!
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you Dall
Comment from ulster3
Hi deepwater.
This is another excellent write. The closing line (verse) is exceptional and very strong. I will be looking for more.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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Hi deepwater.
This is another excellent write. The closing line (verse) is exceptional and very strong. I will be looking for more.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you Rebecca
Comment from J. Bond
Once again, you really impressed me here. Simple yet effective. I loved your diction. The flow was immaculate, and the structure of the poem served the content well. I like the interesting themes you touch on, it is a nice respite from the overflow of similar-sounding spiritual poetry on this site (not to insult anyone's beliefs...but perhaps merely their work; I kid, of course). A job well done, sir.
Cheers
J
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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Once again, you really impressed me here. Simple yet effective. I loved your diction. The flow was immaculate, and the structure of the poem served the content well. I like the interesting themes you touch on, it is a nice respite from the overflow of similar-sounding spiritual poetry on this site (not to insult anyone's beliefs...but perhaps merely their work; I kid, of course). A job well done, sir.
Cheers
J
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you J for reading gary
Comment from bard owl
Square is an excellent way to live life, for it is balanced and means life was well-spent. Excellently inspiring read. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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Square is an excellent way to live life, for it is balanced and means life was well-spent. Excellently inspiring read. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you Linda
Comment from words
I could not imagine a better epitaph:
Just this one phrase of all I choose
To show my life was fair
Here sleeps now a fellow who was always on the Square
Well said.
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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I could not imagine a better epitaph:
Just this one phrase of all I choose
To show my life was fair
Here sleeps now a fellow who was always on the Square
Well said.
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you words for comments and reading Gary
Comment from Janine Ellis-Fynn
This is a lovely, honest and heartfelt poem. I am sure that your loved ones will honour your simple request. Well done and thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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This is a lovely, honest and heartfelt poem. I am sure that your loved ones will honour your simple request. Well done and thanks for posting.
Comment Written 24-May-2010
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thank you for reading Janine
Comment from midgev
Very nice, great message. In a day when a man's word does not seem to mean what it use to mean, this poem represents what is honorable and worthy. Very good thought well presented. Thanks.
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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Very nice, great message. In a day when a man's word does not seem to mean what it use to mean, this poem represents what is honorable and worthy. Very good thought well presented. Thanks.
Comment Written 24-May-2010
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thank you midgev
Comment from smileycloud
hey
thank you
beautiful proud humble honorable work from an obviously very talented but connected and insightful writer
well done
I could not only feel but see the soldier(s);the hard working husband and father;the provider of truth and faith;
all of these memorable souls can be seen in this piece
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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hey
thank you
beautiful proud humble honorable work from an obviously very talented but connected and insightful writer
well done
I could not only feel but see the soldier(s);the hard working husband and father;the provider of truth and faith;
all of these memorable souls can be seen in this piece
have a smiley day
Comment Written 24-May-2010
reply by the author on 24-May-2010
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thank you smiley
