Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Over the Top 1914 Eastern Front"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Peter Burger
To PAY our country back might be more precise. You're pretty obsessed with this topic. I like the first line, very visual. I see a battlefield strewn with dead and injured bodies, too many to gather, laying in the burning sun, proud to have committed the ultimate sacrifice for their country. World events requiring aggressive defense, again drawing the brotherhood together.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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To PAY our country back might be more precise. You're pretty obsessed with this topic. I like the first line, very visual. I see a battlefield strewn with dead and injured bodies, too many to gather, laying in the burning sun, proud to have committed the ultimate sacrifice for their country. World events requiring aggressive defense, again drawing the brotherhood together.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
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thanks for the comments peter and for reading
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love the mixture of pride and defiance you've twined into your words here. I can only imagine the horrors of the WW1 trenches.
Mike
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I love the mixture of pride and defiance you've twined into your words here. I can only imagine the horrors of the WW1 trenches.
Mike
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
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thaaks for reading Fleed
Comment from jmyron
Another good one Gary. My only complaint would be that I felt that there was more to be said from this soldier. Write on...
John
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Another good one Gary. My only complaint would be that I felt that there was more to be said from this soldier. Write on...
John
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
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thank you John for reading and yes i have more to say...Gary
Comment from Thirsty4Lecter
Deep and learned. I love this piece. An excellent rhyme. The first and second line was my favorite. I did notice that the last line felt wrong somehow. Not sure why. Was it meant to feel that way? I hope so. Maybe I am just being picky. You do have quite a talent though, keep it up.
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Deep and learned. I love this piece. An excellent rhyme. The first and second line was my favorite. I did notice that the last line felt wrong somehow. Not sure why. Was it meant to feel that way? I hope so. Maybe I am just being picky. You do have quite a talent though, keep it up.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2010
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Comment from scrambledpen
You really conjure up a visious image with your words, deepwater. A fitting poem, especially after this Memorial Day. Good Job.
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You really conjure up a visious image with your words, deepwater. A fitting poem, especially after this Memorial Day. Good Job.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2010
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thank you scramble for reading this GW
Comment from Abba Lin
Hi deepwater, I so appreciate your poem.. telling it through your own eyes and experiences.. great flow and great poem.. Thank you for sharing..love Lin
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Hi deepwater, I so appreciate your poem.. telling it through your own eyes and experiences.. great flow and great poem.. Thank you for sharing..love Lin
Comment Written 02-Jun-2010
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thank you Lin
Comment from IanC
You have shared both visual and thoughtful words creating nice images. This is a strong powerful piece. Well done, blessings
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You have shared both visual and thoughtful words creating nice images. This is a strong powerful piece. Well done, blessings
Comment Written 02-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading Ian
Comment from InHisownwrite
your side of the war you went through..
through your eyes.... what better way can it be told..
I've learned alot from your insight....
love this (now fix bayonets went the battle cry)
that even says alot..... I always enjoy your sharing... Bryan
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your side of the war you went through..
through your eyes.... what better way can it be told..
I've learned alot from your insight....
love this (now fix bayonets went the battle cry)
that even says alot..... I always enjoy your sharing... Bryan
Comment Written 02-Jun-2010
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thank you Bryan for reading
Comment from words
Great opening lines:
Our dead will mock the searing heat
My wounds will blister black
You tell us that our strength was sold
To help your country back
Well done.
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Great opening lines:
Our dead will mock the searing heat
My wounds will blister black
You tell us that our strength was sold
To help your country back
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2010
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thank you words
Comment from Signaler
Hello deepwater, As each war comes and goes we seem to forget the lessons learned. Your poem brings back the memories. Thank you .
Keep Your Angel on your Shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2010
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Hello deepwater, As each war comes and goes we seem to forget the lessons learned. Your poem brings back the memories. Thank you .
Keep Your Angel on your Shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading Signaler
