Rabbit
Life is Like a Bookshelf69 total reviews
Comment from The Wood Work
That was the most charming story I've read in awhile. Very well done. I was charmed by this unusual friendship. With the father gone and brothers being brothers Mr Verge & Rabbit were friends by default I loved it! Keep writing
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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That was the most charming story I've read in awhile. Very well done. I was charmed by this unusual friendship. With the father gone and brothers being brothers Mr Verge & Rabbit were friends by default I loved it! Keep writing
Comment Written 05-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed. There is a follow up story called Virge and the Watermelon Caper. I hope you get the chance to read as well.
Comment from carlene32
Dear bhogg,
This is fantastic, very clever - comparing the expanse of life to bookends.
Love the part about the boy immitating the walk.
The dialogue is excellent - really brings warmth to the story and creates the bond between Virge and Rabbit - tells us a lot about who Virge is inside. You've an excellent grasp on writing the local dialect.
Tears are running down my cheeks at this ending. Really well done. Good luck with the contest.
Carlene
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Dear bhogg,
This is fantastic, very clever - comparing the expanse of life to bookends.
Love the part about the boy immitating the walk.
The dialogue is excellent - really brings warmth to the story and creates the bond between Virge and Rabbit - tells us a lot about who Virge is inside. You've an excellent grasp on writing the local dialect.
Tears are running down my cheeks at this ending. Really well done. Good luck with the contest.
Carlene
Comment Written 05-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Hi Carlene - sure didn't mean to make you cry, but as I point out in the story, I cried when writing (wasn't really allergies!)
Comment from anne1204
Perfect in every way. The Characters are realistic and you give great descriptions, The setting is perfect for the story. I feel this story is true rather than fiction as I live in the south and there have probably been many Rabbits and Virgie. Very Good writing. Anne 1204
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Perfect in every way. The Characters are realistic and you give great descriptions, The setting is perfect for the story. I feel this story is true rather than fiction as I live in the south and there have probably been many Rabbits and Virgie. Very Good writing. Anne 1204
Comment Written 05-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Thanks again Anne!
Comment from Bellringer
Beautifully written piece. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story about true friendship and the simple but effective wisdom shared therein. This work reminds me of Joel Chandler Harris' stories. As a recent retiree from New Jersey, I have come to love living in Georgia. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Beautifully written piece. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story about true friendship and the simple but effective wisdom shared therein. This work reminds me of Joel Chandler Harris' stories. As a recent retiree from New Jersey, I have come to love living in Georgia. Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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I'm so glad that you enjoyed. I remember sitting on my grandmother's couch and her reading Joel Chandler Harris to me. It was a signed copy - sure wish I had it!
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I have an unsigned copy from the late 1800s that I purchased on e-Bay. I got this after visiting the little cabin (a tourist spot honoring Harris) in Eatonton, GA.
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Yep - I'm jealous. The shame is that I know where the book I was talkiing about is, but is tied up with family. Right now it is probably bug eaten and ruined....
Comment from Jean Lutz
Looks like o.k. grammar to me. But then I was raised in Tennessee in the 1940s and 1950s. My bookshelf of life is overflowing. Lots of shelves, but now books on the floor, table and dang near everywhere. I suspect we are both adding some of the finest volumns in the latter years. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Looks like o.k. grammar to me. But then I was raised in Tennessee in the 1940s and 1950s. My bookshelf of life is overflowing. Lots of shelves, but now books on the floor, table and dang near everywhere. I suspect we are both adding some of the finest volumns in the latter years. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Hi Jean - thanks for reading. Your response mad me smile. My stuff is all over too!
Comment from afternoonlight
Good story! Moved to tears with nostalgia specially about a special friend I had who taught me to fish and bait a hook. That is one huge glorious well told story. I loved it!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Good story! Moved to tears with nostalgia specially about a special friend I had who taught me to fish and bait a hook. That is one huge glorious well told story. I loved it!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Thanks for your kind and generous words. Bill
Comment from BethShelby
This is a heartwarming story which I throughly enjoyed reading. I love the non fiction best and being from the South myself, (Mississippi) I've known people who were a lot like Verge. The friendship make a wonderful memories.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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This is a heartwarming story which I throughly enjoyed reading. I love the non fiction best and being from the South myself, (Mississippi) I've known people who were a lot like Verge. The friendship make a wonderful memories.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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Thank you very much for reading and for your kind feedback!
Comment from scrittore
What a beautiful story. Tugging at your reader's heart is a gift. Your story is very Capote-esque. I really enjoyed it. Well done!
Rob
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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What a beautiful story. Tugging at your reader's heart is a gift. Your story is very Capote-esque. I really enjoyed it. Well done!
Rob
Comment Written 04-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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What a nice compliment! Thank you.
Comment from samandlancelot
Wonderful story you've told with great pacing and enjoyable dialogue.
He had on a pair of blue denim overall's, (overalls) a long sleeve blue and white striped cotton shirt, a rail-road (railroad) engineers (engineer's) cap
with all my family, (change comma to semicolon) even my brothers were
lookin aroun to see who you talkin too." (to)
through that mater (matter) and down through dat
I looked up as Virge's niece Carrie, (if he had only one niece, comma goes before and after her name. If more than one niece, no commas before or after.) walked over.
Inside, (remove comma) (was) a small square box and a note.
Patricia
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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Wonderful story you've told with great pacing and enjoyable dialogue.
He had on a pair of blue denim overall's, (overalls) a long sleeve blue and white striped cotton shirt, a rail-road (railroad) engineers (engineer's) cap
with all my family, (change comma to semicolon) even my brothers were
lookin aroun to see who you talkin too." (to)
through that mater (matter) and down through dat
I looked up as Virge's niece Carrie, (if he had only one niece, comma goes before and after her name. If more than one niece, no commas before or after.) walked over.
Inside, (remove comma) (was) a small square box and a note.
Patricia
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2010
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Thanks for reading and thanks for the editing suggestions!
Comment from TimothyGriffin
Nice piece of biographical fiction. A well-deserved entry into the story of the month contest. Your style is excellent, and you clearly illustrate the relationship between you and Virgil. I really liked the fishing and living analogy where you shouldn't take more than you need. Strong ending, the emotion was evident so the allergies ending was a nice touch.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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Nice piece of biographical fiction. A well-deserved entry into the story of the month contest. Your style is excellent, and you clearly illustrate the relationship between you and Virgil. I really liked the fishing and living analogy where you shouldn't take more than you need. Strong ending, the emotion was evident so the allergies ending was a nice touch.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2010
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Thanks for reading Timothy and for the feedback. Much appreciated!
