Rabbit
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Comment from Paradox Tremors
Anybody feeling compelled to correct all of the grammar is a plume-sucking fool. Your writing wouldn't be as good. Especially if you wrote it the way most "everybody" thunk (snickered) it should've been. I like the style and the "voice" you have. Never change. And, although my opinion doesn't mean much, I think you kept the most valuable of the two gifts Virge gave you. Never lose his memory, and never stop writing about 'im. I know he's looking down and smiling with that pride. Keep the stories coming and I'll keep on reading and throwing my two-cent back at you.
P.S. I ran out of "6." Sorry, I know, the "knowing" I enjoy your writing is good enough for you--but still ....
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2011
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Anybody feeling compelled to correct all of the grammar is a plume-sucking fool. Your writing wouldn't be as good. Especially if you wrote it the way most "everybody" thunk (snickered) it should've been. I like the style and the "voice" you have. Never change. And, although my opinion doesn't mean much, I think you kept the most valuable of the two gifts Virge gave you. Never lose his memory, and never stop writing about 'im. I know he's looking down and smiling with that pride. Keep the stories coming and I'll keep on reading and throwing my two-cent back at you.
P.S. I ran out of "6." Sorry, I know, the "knowing" I enjoy your writing is good enough for you--but still ....
Comment Written 20-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2011
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Thanks - When I first posted Rabbit, I didn't include a comment about correcting, and some folks had a field day. Who would have "thunk" it. Regards, Bill
Comment from quashdog
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. There are some publications like "Glimmertrain" that look for short stories like these to put to print. This story of yours is an especially nice story to go on one of these periodicals.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2011
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I thoroughly enjoyed this story. There are some publications like "Glimmertrain" that look for short stories like these to put to print. This story of yours is an especially nice story to go on one of these periodicals.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2011
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Thanks - I'll definitely check it out. Regards, Bill
Comment from mbarkersimpson
Hi Bill
This is a wonderful piece of writing. The tears were rolling down my cheeks and I don't have any allergies! What a beautiful way you have of bringing people to life. I think that is a great tribute to Virge. The way you wrote this shows how much he meant to you. I loved it.
Kind regards
Mel
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Hi Bill
This is a wonderful piece of writing. The tears were rolling down my cheeks and I don't have any allergies! What a beautiful way you have of bringing people to life. I think that is a great tribute to Virge. The way you wrote this shows how much he meant to you. I loved it.
Kind regards
Mel
Comment Written 05-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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Hi Mel - thank you very much for dusting off the archives. I'm going to add you as a favorite so I can keep up with you. You're going to do well on FS! Regards, Bill
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Hi, Bill. You've earned yourself a fan too! It's a great way of keeping up with the writers we enjoy. Thanks for your support so far. Kind regards, Mel
Comment from highlander104
Well, I accepted your invitation to read Rabbit and glad I did. This is a charming folk story coming from the deep south. Just the kind a love. One of my favorite authors is Fannie Flagg who delights in folksy, but funny fiction stories.
Thanks for letting me know about "Rabbit".
Jean K.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
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Well, I accepted your invitation to read Rabbit and glad I did. This is a charming folk story coming from the deep south. Just the kind a love. One of my favorite authors is Fannie Flagg who delights in folksy, but funny fiction stories.
Thanks for letting me know about "Rabbit".
Jean K.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
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Fannie Flagg is fantastic. If you ever get a chance, check out an author named Ferrol Sams. He is from Georgia and has written some fabulous books about growing up in the South. A great one to start with is called, "Run With the Horsemen". This is labelled as fiction, but is actually a slice of life. Thanks for visiting the archives!!!!
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[Thanks for visiting the archives!!!!]
You are welcome. Jean K.
Comment from Julia Yampolsky
WOW! Bill, you have an amazing power of transporting a reader right into your story. It's funny, how I should be confused by the southern way of speaking, but I am not at all. I actually love it! It is so expressive and you portrayed it so well. I could see the Virge with his teeth resembling the piano keys, I saw him walking his funny way. I heard your grandma saying: You ain't got it in you to walk like that." I read some of the lines to my husband (also a Russian) with this southern accent(the best I could),and he laughed at me, repeating the line of your grandma -"You ain't got it in you to TALK like that." And I liked how the whole fishing worm theme led to Virge's death and he was "feeding" "dem worms" again. I've just remembered something - my very first book in English was "The color purple". I had to write an essay in College about the book. It was my third year in US (I was thirty three) and my English was rather shaky, never mind the southern version of it. And the whole book was written in that dialect. Can you imagine my confusion?! But somehow I got it and loved it, just like I love your story for the very warm nostalgic feel, for such vivid kind characters, and for the innocent memories of childhood.
Thank you for guiding me through my new Homeland's history.
-Julia
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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WOW! Bill, you have an amazing power of transporting a reader right into your story. It's funny, how I should be confused by the southern way of speaking, but I am not at all. I actually love it! It is so expressive and you portrayed it so well. I could see the Virge with his teeth resembling the piano keys, I saw him walking his funny way. I heard your grandma saying: You ain't got it in you to walk like that." I read some of the lines to my husband (also a Russian) with this southern accent(the best I could),and he laughed at me, repeating the line of your grandma -"You ain't got it in you to TALK like that." And I liked how the whole fishing worm theme led to Virge's death and he was "feeding" "dem worms" again. I've just remembered something - my very first book in English was "The color purple". I had to write an essay in College about the book. It was my third year in US (I was thirty three) and my English was rather shaky, never mind the southern version of it. And the whole book was written in that dialect. Can you imagine my confusion?! But somehow I got it and loved it, just like I love your story for the very warm nostalgic feel, for such vivid kind characters, and for the innocent memories of childhood.
Thank you for guiding me through my new Homeland's history.
-Julia
Comment Written 04-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Well, Julia, you brought a big ol smile to this Southern Boys face. Such kind feedback. Regards, Bill
Comment from Judith Ann
Thanks for pointing me to this piece. It is a wonderful depiction of your childhood. You have a real gift (I may have said that before)storytelling. I enjoyed reading from beginning to end. Your style has motivated me to look at more of the good things/times I experienced growing up. The times where I learned about life and love from my grandparents. Thanks for the challenge. I look forward to reading more of your work. -Judy
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thanks for pointing me to this piece. It is a wonderful depiction of your childhood. You have a real gift (I may have said that before)storytelling. I enjoyed reading from beginning to end. Your style has motivated me to look at more of the good things/times I experienced growing up. The times where I learned about life and love from my grandparents. Thanks for the challenge. I look forward to reading more of your work. -Judy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2010
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Thanks Judy - Let me know when you post something from your past. We all do learn, some painful things, but lots of wonder as well. Plus, if we don't write them, they will be lost forever.
Comment from RolandtheGunslinger
Verge seems like a person we should all have in our lives one time
or another. I laughed when I read he was 92. I loved the part with you
trying to do the walk. I can picture it so clearly. I always enjoy your writing.
I would say that your transition from story teller to writer has been
successful. Drop me a line if you have the time. I would like to hear
from you. School's out now. Finally on summer vacation.
Be well.
Bill
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Verge seems like a person we should all have in our lives one time
or another. I laughed when I read he was 92. I loved the part with you
trying to do the walk. I can picture it so clearly. I always enjoy your writing.
I would say that your transition from story teller to writer has been
successful. Drop me a line if you have the time. I would like to hear
from you. School's out now. Finally on summer vacation.
Be well.
Bill
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Hey Roland - glad school is out. Maybe you can write more!!!! Aprciate the kind words. If you haven't read, there is an accompanying story about Virge and the Watermelon Caper. Bill
Comment from kath79
Such a beautiful story. I had to stop reading the first time I read this (I was having an over emotional day, and this set me off!). It's so well written, and I'm glad I came back to it...simply wonderful.
Cheers
Kath
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Such a beautiful story. I had to stop reading the first time I read this (I was having an over emotional day, and this set me off!). It's so well written, and I'm glad I came back to it...simply wonderful.
Cheers
Kath
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you very much Kath! I hope you re-visit and read a story after this one called Virge and the Watermelon caper. It is not sad.
Comment from patmedium
Bill, this is absolutely wonderful. You have brought your old mentor to life with absolute clarity. I wish you all the luck in this contest. Pat.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Bill, this is absolutely wonderful. You have brought your old mentor to life with absolute clarity. I wish you all the luck in this contest. Pat.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you very much Pat! I appreciate your reading the story and for your kind feedback.
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Comment from debbier2461
What a beatiful story, so well told. Virgil reminds me somewhat of my own grandfather, I had him for a little longer than you had you virgil.
I like your initial analogy, it makes good sense to me.
Memories are formative and so important, you capture this so well.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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What a beatiful story, so well told. Virgil reminds me somewhat of my own grandfather, I had him for a little longer than you had you virgil.
I like your initial analogy, it makes good sense to me.
Memories are formative and so important, you capture this so well.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2010
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Thanks again!
