Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Jean Lutz
Very inspiring. I attended the local meeting of Southern Christian Writers Guild this morning and our guest speaker spoke along these lines.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Very inspiring. I attended the local meeting of Southern Christian Writers Guild this morning and our guest speaker spoke along these lines.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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thanks again
Comment from gargoyle socks
This is a great poem to start off your book. It is very inspirational and uplifting. I like how you started it off with sadness and then transform into happy words of advice.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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This is a great poem to start off your book. It is very inspirational and uplifting. I like how you started it off with sadness and then transform into happy words of advice.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you sorrow for this review and comments
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I just read something that said why reach for the sky when there are foot prints on the moon or something to that effect. It made me stop and think. Growing up I never had an easy life. I had to work to get through what I did and to get to where I am. Although it seemed almost impossible when I started I just kept working at it and now I'm happy, content, and most of the time humble. It's important to go for your dreams but also know where you've been and came from. I'm in a 12 step group for my addictions and some of the stuff I've had to overcome and when a new person comes in freshly sober or whatever they are recovering from we need to be reminded that we were once in their place. We mustn't forget where we've been and came from because our past experiences can help others
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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I just read something that said why reach for the sky when there are foot prints on the moon or something to that effect. It made me stop and think. Growing up I never had an easy life. I had to work to get through what I did and to get to where I am. Although it seemed almost impossible when I started I just kept working at it and now I'm happy, content, and most of the time humble. It's important to go for your dreams but also know where you've been and came from. I'm in a 12 step group for my addictions and some of the stuff I've had to overcome and when a new person comes in freshly sober or whatever they are recovering from we need to be reminded that we were once in their place. We mustn't forget where we've been and came from because our past experiences can help others
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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red never forget the path you came down my friend
Comment from daniela.albu
A well written poem about life and our own approach to it. It adds value to what promises to be an intersting book "Writings from the Heart". The words are well chosen to have a strong impact on the reader and convey the poem's message:
"You have it within you, to reach and fly high
So remove your defenses, go reach for the sky
Go forward with gusto, show life what you are
The phoenix that rises, now claim your new start".
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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A well written poem about life and our own approach to it. It adds value to what promises to be an intersting book "Writings from the Heart". The words are well chosen to have a strong impact on the reader and convey the poem's message:
"You have it within you, to reach and fly high
So remove your defenses, go reach for the sky
Go forward with gusto, show life what you are
The phoenix that rises, now claim your new start".
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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thank you Daniela
Comment from bhogg
For an old cowboy, this is pretty darn good. Your poetry is always a little different, not necessarily conventional, but the message is always there.
Too lazy to do what's within your own reach
But criticize others, on their fight to succeed
Now how could I criticize your poem after reading those two lines! Well done.
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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For an old cowboy, this is pretty darn good. Your poetry is always a little different, not necessarily conventional, but the message is always there.
Too lazy to do what's within your own reach
But criticize others, on their fight to succeed
Now how could I criticize your poem after reading those two lines! Well done.
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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lo thank you bhogg, PS what is conventional today ?
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Fair question - not anything that I write!
Comment from Amicus
Deepwater, I like the positive attitude in this poem and the straight forward conversational tone of the narrator. You need however to either not punctuate at all or punctuate correctly. In this one, you use the comma erroneously several times and omit the periods the reader needs to make much sense of your statements. Correcting punctuation would make this a much better poem....I would also suggest you revise the last sentence...the phrase "the place that you start" is awkward and seems to be in the wrong verb tense simply to rhyme with heart...how about: So always remember where you got your start... as the final line instead?
Good thinking...needs some polishing and tinkering.
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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Deepwater, I like the positive attitude in this poem and the straight forward conversational tone of the narrator. You need however to either not punctuate at all or punctuate correctly. In this one, you use the comma erroneously several times and omit the periods the reader needs to make much sense of your statements. Correcting punctuation would make this a much better poem....I would also suggest you revise the last sentence...the phrase "the place that you start" is awkward and seems to be in the wrong verb tense simply to rhyme with heart...how about: So always remember where you got your start... as the final line instead?
Good thinking...needs some polishing and tinkering.
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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thanks for the comments Amicus
Comment from fastdigits
A poem poetically written with
a message on life the way it should
be lived, where it is up to you to
fly to the sky, up to you to stop
to smell the roses, leave your footprints
in the sands of time.
A poem that flows down the roads of
life that one travels, rhyming in the
rhythms of life's attainments.
Well done
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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A poem poetically written with
a message on life the way it should
be lived, where it is up to you to
fly to the sky, up to you to stop
to smell the roses, leave your footprints
in the sands of time.
A poem that flows down the roads of
life that one travels, rhyming in the
rhythms of life's attainments.
Well done
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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thank you fastdigits
Comment from Just2Write
There is much good advice in this poem, and it is error free. I'm not sure about the mix of couplets and the use of one non-rhyming line. The repetition of high and start used as rhyming words detracted a bit from the poem. There is much to enjoy in what you have written, and I see much potential here. Rose.
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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There is much good advice in this poem, and it is error free. I'm not sure about the mix of couplets and the use of one non-rhyming line. The repetition of high and start used as rhyming words detracted a bit from the poem. There is much to enjoy in what you have written, and I see much potential here. Rose.
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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thank you Rose
Comment from Peter Burger
Inspiration. Positive attitude. I can relate to sitting around doing nothing, criticizing others. Don't feel as if you have to conform to rhyming. I'd like to see what this poem would be without rhyme, because I think it might be more condensed, get to the point more efficiently. It's a positive, powerful message to address. I'd mess around with it a little more.
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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Inspiration. Positive attitude. I can relate to sitting around doing nothing, criticizing others. Don't feel as if you have to conform to rhyming. I'd like to see what this poem would be without rhyme, because I think it might be more condensed, get to the point more efficiently. It's a positive, powerful message to address. I'd mess around with it a little more.
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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thanks peter
Comment from Laidy
i liked that this had something to tell all of us... like a little learned messege at the end. i found this was well written and well thought out and put together. i liked the start and through out it makes the reader think about what state of mind the writer was in.
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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i liked that this had something to tell all of us... like a little learned messege at the end. i found this was well written and well thought out and put together. i liked the start and through out it makes the reader think about what state of mind the writer was in.
Comment Written 11-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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thank you laidy
