Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Combat soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
48 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Again, it takes way more courage and strength than I have. I couldn't even imagine what it must be like fighting for your country like that. We must thank these people everyday because they give us our freedeom and make it so the rest of us don't have to go through what they do.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Again, it takes way more courage and strength than I have. I couldn't even imagine what it must be like fighting for your country like that. We must thank these people everyday because they give us our freedeom and make it so the rest of us don't have to go through what they do.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thanks again red bird for the review
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, the way the poem was like a script of a radio broadcast from the command post, brilliantly executed. good job
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, the way the poem was like a script of a radio broadcast from the command post, brilliantly executed. good job
Comment Written 30-May-2010
reply by the author on 30-May-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from jwlee211
Great poem. Very descriptive of a battle and the dangers the military faces every day. Also like the way things become so matter of fact also a part of life. great work.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Great poem. Very descriptive of a battle and the dangers the military faces every day. Also like the way things become so matter of fact also a part of life. great work.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading jwlee
Comment from dportwood
deepwater,
You have kept the reader engaged as you describe in step-by-step detail the action taking place in the city. Keep on writing.
Duane
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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deepwater,
You have kept the reader engaged as you describe in step-by-step detail the action taking place in the city. Keep on writing.
Duane
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you so much for reading combat soldier Gary
Comment from knowledge
I'm going to give you six-stars for this post. You were able to communicate to us the action of being a combat soldier during a mission.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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I'm going to give you six-stars for this post. You were able to communicate to us the action of being a combat soldier during a mission.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Thank you for reading my work Knowledge , Gary
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This reads like a log of some sort. It is descriptive, but needs a little work on expression. It describes everything moment by moment, but some sentences seem incomplete. Perhaps this is how they do it. I wouldn't know since I have never been in combat. That's why I am rating it this high. It feels like a real account of events. Good descriptions, God bless you!
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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This reads like a log of some sort. It is descriptive, but needs a little work on expression. It describes everything moment by moment, but some sentences seem incomplete. Perhaps this is how they do it. I wouldn't know since I have never been in combat. That's why I am rating it this high. It feels like a real account of events. Good descriptions, God bless you!
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Thank you for reading this was one of my logs from the 70's
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You are very welcome. Have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from Leigh Ann
This is a dark, deep story. Is sad, but well formatted and developed. I like the pattern of information given, like you were reporting this in a newspaper. The story pulled at my heartstrings. Great work. Leigh
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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This is a dark, deep story. Is sad, but well formatted and developed. I like the pattern of information given, like you were reporting this in a newspaper. The story pulled at my heartstrings. Great work. Leigh
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Thank you for reading Leigh
Comment from JeffreyStone
I like the stacatto feel to this "story", it moves the action and puts the reader on patrol. The foreboding is palpable. Well done.
people and traffuc starts (should be start)
JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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I like the stacatto feel to this "story", it moves the action and puts the reader on patrol. The foreboding is palpable. Well done.
people and traffuc starts (should be start)
JeffreyStone
Comment Written 06-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thanks for your comments Jeffrey
Comment from marion
Hi there deepwater
I think the beauty in this post is the cold short snappy sentences - putting us right into the combat zone. I liked the style and I liked the voice.
Rain and fog was on the ground. I wondered if you needed the 'was' in that? Thought it would sound just as good - Rain and fog on the ground.
A strong piece of writing. Marion.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Hi there deepwater
I think the beauty in this post is the cold short snappy sentences - putting us right into the combat zone. I liked the style and I liked the voice.
Rain and fog was on the ground. I wondered if you needed the 'was' in that? Thought it would sound just as good - Rain and fog on the ground.
A strong piece of writing. Marion.
Comment Written 06-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you for your review marion
Comment from hfriscia
This is a great story...I was hanging on every word, I could the whole thing in my head...The flow of the story works while kind of story telling...
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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This is a great story...I was hanging on every word, I could the whole thing in my head...The flow of the story works while kind of story telling...
Comment Written 06-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading hfriscia
