The Minute Poem
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Comment from Sonjalee
Perfect Minute poem using iambic meter (One of my favorites). Your word choices were great and the flow is wonderful. It is a bitter sweet poem-it's wonderful while she is alive , but bitter when one thinks that she will go away for ever some sad day.
I am going to write minute poem , ahorita ( in Spanish that means, right now,).
Sonjalee
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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Perfect Minute poem using iambic meter (One of my favorites). Your word choices were great and the flow is wonderful. It is a bitter sweet poem-it's wonderful while she is alive , but bitter when one thinks that she will go away for ever some sad day.
I am going to write minute poem , ahorita ( in Spanish that means, right now,).
Sonjalee
Comment Written 04-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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I don't write that many poems about my mother since she died too early for me to have many well-formed memories, so this poem has a special place in my heart. I so appreciate your exceptional rating for it, Sonjalee. I so look forward to reading your minute poem :-) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
With mothers day just around the corner, this I'm sure has special feelings attached. When we lose a parent early in life it's hard to know all that we might have should they have tarried a while longer. Would they have enjoyed dancing at our wedding, would they have approved of our choice of spouse, career,and etc. And would they be proud to be a grandparent???? These and so many more questions go un ansered even as years pass, we still ask them. Well done, my friend. Mike
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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With mothers day just around the corner, this I'm sure has special feelings attached. When we lose a parent early in life it's hard to know all that we might have should they have tarried a while longer. Would they have enjoyed dancing at our wedding, would they have approved of our choice of spouse, career,and etc. And would they be proud to be a grandparent???? These and so many more questions go un ansered even as years pass, we still ask them. Well done, my friend. Mike
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Mike, hi!! :-) You're so right about those what ifs - since my mother died when I was so young, we never had those mother daughter moments where there is disapproval or even worry about it, along with no moments like dancing at the wedding. My biggest regret for her is that she died 5 days before her first grandchild was born, 10 days before her second. Thank you, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from nancyjam
What a touching tribute to your Mother.
I've lost mine as well but the memories
are many and dear. Your last stanza is
is especially moving.
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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What a touching tribute to your Mother.
I've lost mine as well but the memories
are many and dear. Your last stanza is
is especially moving.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Thank you so much, Nancy :-) I have so many more memories of my father, who did not die until I was in my 30's. Brooke
Comment from Brad Sterling
Alas, not allowed to give any more stars - another new type of poem to me - keeps gray cells alert - in that context is accent of the word "minute" on the first or second syllable"? - however, to the poem - a very tender and emotive story - flowing and rhyming, as ever, so very deceptively with ease and expertise - great truth, as indicated, that a mother's kiss - and hug - can cure many a troubled or hurt child - especially like thought and rhyme of last two lines - "but she has gone her kiss withdrawn" - wistful happy memories - good luck in contest - best regards - Brad.
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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Alas, not allowed to give any more stars - another new type of poem to me - keeps gray cells alert - in that context is accent of the word "minute" on the first or second syllable"? - however, to the poem - a very tender and emotive story - flowing and rhyming, as ever, so very deceptively with ease and expertise - great truth, as indicated, that a mother's kiss - and hug - can cure many a troubled or hurt child - especially like thought and rhyme of last two lines - "but she has gone her kiss withdrawn" - wistful happy memories - good luck in contest - best regards - Brad.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 04-May-2010
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Thank you, Brad. I so appreciate your thoughtful and generous comments :-) Brooke
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Welcome - as always - Brad.
Comment from Janelle
Another lovely tribute to you mother Brooke and I am sad for you that you have to write it from such a long ago memory, but glad that her kind of loving mothering is still so vivid in your heart and mind.
Beautifully presented, with excellent rhythm and rhyme. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Another lovely tribute to you mother Brooke and I am sad for you that you have to write it from such a long ago memory, but glad that her kind of loving mothering is still so vivid in your heart and mind.
Beautifully presented, with excellent rhythm and rhyme. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you so much, Jan, and good morning :-) You are most kind. Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
I haven't seen a minute poem for a long while, so this poem was a double delight. Your poem, the presentation, the thoughts are all so touching. A mother's kiss is one of the most wonderful things. It heals, it conveys love, moops up tears, and it reassures. It is so sad that your mother passed away when you were so young - but her influence and kisses have stayed with you throughout your life, and no doubt have been passed on to her grandchildren through your own tender lips. Rose.
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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I haven't seen a minute poem for a long while, so this poem was a double delight. Your poem, the presentation, the thoughts are all so touching. A mother's kiss is one of the most wonderful things. It heals, it conveys love, moops up tears, and it reassures. It is so sad that your mother passed away when you were so young - but her influence and kisses have stayed with you throughout your life, and no doubt have been passed on to her grandchildren through your own tender lips. Rose.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, Rose - I really like the minute poem style - there was a writing prompt contest the day before, and while I refuse to enter blind contests, it reminded me I had not written one in a while :-) Brooke
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I don't enter contests much at all anymore. Yesterday, being an exception. I curious though - why don't you like the 'blind' contests? Rose.
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one practical reason - my fans don't get notification I've posted, even after the contest ends
one philosophical reason for the principle of it - I think blind contests insult the integrity of site members - they assume bad behavior will occur if we know the names of entrants and that we're little children who don't know better than to vote for the best entry despite our friendships or feuds with other writers. In all the time before blind contests I always voted for the best entry, not my bestest friend. I resent that we are all suspected of immaturity by making a contest blind - it's like in schools, I'm in favor of rounding up kids suspected of being drug dealers and searching their lockers and arresting them if they're guilty - but I'm not in favor of searching the lockers of hundreds of students who have never done a damn thing to make anyone think they're done anything illegal.
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Hmmm. There is not much incentive to enter a contest if your fans don't know you've written a poem. That would really curtail meaningful reviews. I got discouraged with contests long ago because mostly only other entrants were reading the submissions. Also, by the time the contest is in the voting stage - most have 2 penny payouts, so many members simply don't go there. It would be good if Tom offered a chance to win a pump or something like he does for an initial launch. It might stir more interest in the contests. I know we are not all children, but I do think that when one has a vested interest in winning - it might make an impact on who one chooses to cast a vote for. It would not be their best friend, but the one least likely to win. Just a thought, but I'm sure this happens. Twice in the past few months I have been nominated for Poem of the Month. It is forbidden to even let your fans know that you are in the running. Not that I expect to win - but I would like those who know me to know that I was at least nominated. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I appreciate it. Rose.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Another great write in an interesting form, with as usual, a poignant tale told in such soft flowing words.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Dear Brooke,
Another great write in an interesting form, with as usual, a poignant tale told in such soft flowing words.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, Reg - I really like the minute poem form :-) Brooke
Comment from Kellytr
Brooke, It's always very hard to lose your mum. Mine was in her eighties when she passed, but I still wasn't ready to let her go. I cannot even imagine how much harder it must be for a child. You have used a very beautiful picture that depicts the vey best of motherhood to support your lovely tribute to your mother. Kelly
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Brooke, It's always very hard to lose your mum. Mine was in her eighties when she passed, but I still wasn't ready to let her go. I cannot even imagine how much harder it must be for a child. You have used a very beautiful picture that depicts the vey best of motherhood to support your lovely tribute to your mother. Kelly
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thanks so much, Kelly - I don't think anyone is ever ready to lose a mom, no matter what the age. Brooke :-)
Comment from Lydia LaMent
Such a sad feeling, the last stanza kind of punches me in the stomach.. I lost my mother as well and it's difficult to understand the gravity of the word "loss" unless you've felt it yourself. I think the presentation of the subject in your poem illustrates it as well as you can- the contrast between loving innocence and need of the child of its mother's care, and the sudden emptiness without in the last stanza draws the emotion very well. Good job on the picture as well, it's easy to imagine how lost that baby would be without his mother's protection.
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Such a sad feeling, the last stanza kind of punches me in the stomach.. I lost my mother as well and it's difficult to understand the gravity of the word "loss" unless you've felt it yourself. I think the presentation of the subject in your poem illustrates it as well as you can- the contrast between loving innocence and need of the child of its mother's care, and the sudden emptiness without in the last stanza draws the emotion very well. Good job on the picture as well, it's easy to imagine how lost that baby would be without his mother's protection.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thanks, Lydia, for a most gracious and thoughtful response to this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from Rick Koestler
but she has gone,
her kiss withdrawn.
This is a great tribute to all mothers for the up coming 2010 Mothers Day. My mother has gone to be with the Lord, so this poem really touched me.
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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but she has gone,
her kiss withdrawn.
This is a great tribute to all mothers for the up coming 2010 Mothers Day. My mother has gone to be with the Lord, so this poem really touched me.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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I thank you for your most gracious comments, Rick :-) Brooke
