You Ain't Seen Nothing Yet
Short devotional based on John 1:43-5015 total reviews
Comment from Katiesherrill
I'm changing my rating because your changes are WONDERFUL!! IT IS PERFECT!
I like this a lot. I like the intro. It is something the reader can relate to. I would think about changing how you talk about the river. I see what you are saying but you seem to be changing gears and in a short devotion I would keep the above theme flowing.
Tell of a time when you couldn't wait to introduce two people to each other but maybe they didn't connect until they saw the same connection you saw. Nathanael was the same way, he wasn't excited about Jesus, he even said can anything good come from Nazareth? but when Jesus revealed something interesting for Nathaneal he was hooked... Does that make sence. You don't have to tweek much, but it flows with the same consistant thought. As always, take what you like and throw the rest out. :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I'm changing my rating because your changes are WONDERFUL!! IT IS PERFECT!
I like this a lot. I like the intro. It is something the reader can relate to. I would think about changing how you talk about the river. I see what you are saying but you seem to be changing gears and in a short devotion I would keep the above theme flowing.
Tell of a time when you couldn't wait to introduce two people to each other but maybe they didn't connect until they saw the same connection you saw. Nathanael was the same way, he wasn't excited about Jesus, he even said can anything good come from Nazareth? but when Jesus revealed something interesting for Nathaneal he was hooked... Does that make sence. You don't have to tweek much, but it flows with the same consistant thought. As always, take what you like and throw the rest out. :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks, I had the same feeling when working on this last night but could not figure it out. I am going to rework this in a little while and would you take one more look at it then? Thanks
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yes send it my way!!
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Take a look at it now.
Comment from meb42
I like your new plan. It just might be a call on your life from God. I liked your way of describing this story I have read it many times. Your devotion had a different meaning. A reminder that Jesus is watching when we are unaware he is there.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I like your new plan. It just might be a call on your life from God. I liked your way of describing this story I have read it many times. Your devotion had a different meaning. A reminder that Jesus is watching when we are unaware he is there.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the encouragement and the review. I will keep working at this. -Judy
Comment from Ann Smith
I like how you included the imagery of the story from the Bible. It makes it more personal and real. Sometimes I think we don't realize that these were actual places with real people. Kingskid writes a lot of devotional material similar to this. I don't know if you visit her site but I have enjoyed reading her material. Tell her I sent you as they say in real life. ann
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I like how you included the imagery of the story from the Bible. It makes it more personal and real. Sometimes I think we don't realize that these were actual places with real people. Kingskid writes a lot of devotional material similar to this. I don't know if you visit her site but I have enjoyed reading her material. Tell her I sent you as they say in real life. ann
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you Ann. You are the second person to refer me to Kingskid. I will drop by there before trying my next one. Thank you again. -Judy
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You are welcome. Tell kindskid ann said hi. ann
Comment from redrider6612
It's always good to stretch as a writer and try new things. This is pretty good for a first try, but there is a main ingredient missing. Devotionals usually take a passage and apply it to daily life, concluding with a 'life lesson' or moral to uplift or encourage the reader.
Keep writing!
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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It's always good to stretch as a writer and try new things. This is pretty good for a first try, but there is a main ingredient missing. Devotionals usually take a passage and apply it to daily life, concluding with a 'life lesson' or moral to uplift or encourage the reader.
Keep writing!
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you. I will keep working at it. -Judy
Comment from jwlee211
I like this story. Strong words and message for the reader. I like the images you use. I also like the image of the fig tree and having a special place
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I like this story. Strong words and message for the reader. I like the images you use. I also like the image of the fig tree and having a special place
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the encouragement and the review. I will keep working at this. -Judy
