First Base
four rhyming lines88 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
lol. I suspect the rules have changed. But at least you played when the game was still exciting. Good art and color to match the mood. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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lol. I suspect the rules have changed. But at least you played when the game was still exciting. Good art and color to match the mood. Best of luck.
Comment Written 03-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Thanks, Jean - I don't even want to know the new rules LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from dragonqueen1983
i wish you the best of luck in the contest as your poem put a smile on my face. it has an innocence about it that is rare. well done
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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i wish you the best of luck in the contest as your poem put a smile on my face. it has an innocence about it that is rare. well done
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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I'm so glad this bit of whimsy caused a smile - thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Frank Fiction
I am confused by bussed him twice. You drove a bus he was on twice, you are the busgirl or busboy at a restaurant and you bussed him twice. I am just curious. I enjoyed the poem. Thanks.
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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I am confused by bussed him twice. You drove a bus he was on twice, you are the busgirl or busboy at a restaurant and you bussed him twice. I am just curious. I enjoyed the poem. Thanks.
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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buss is an old fashioned synonym for kiss, just like smooch is - thanks, Frank, for reviewing :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
It probably means something very different now, but, who cares, it was fun back in them old days weren't it. It reads well and evokes some fun memories.
Patrick
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Hi Brooke,
It probably means something very different now, but, who cares, it was fun back in them old days weren't it. It reads well and evokes some fun memories.
Patrick
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thanks so much, Patrick - yes, the old memories are good ones :-) Brooke
Comment from rmdelta
Brooke,
great contest entry. I dont know what 'bussed' means spelled this way, especially with 'twice' added on. However, 'he kissed you once, you bussed him twice, he smooched you thrice' means, first base, second base and third base. I can only imagine that 'Sweet paradise' means 'home run' lol Great work and good luck, my friend.
REggie
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Brooke,
great contest entry. I dont know what 'bussed' means spelled this way, especially with 'twice' added on. However, 'he kissed you once, you bussed him twice, he smooched you thrice' means, first base, second base and third base. I can only imagine that 'Sweet paradise' means 'home run' lol Great work and good luck, my friend.
REggie
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you, Reggie - it is just another word for kiss, as smooch is :-) It's just a poem about how wonderful kissing (first base) can be : -) Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
The best of luck in the contest. I think we need a little light heartedness on this site. God only knows what they call it these days and I have a feeling it means much more that we thought it was. Oh, the good old days.
deb
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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The best of luck in the contest. I think we need a little light heartedness on this site. God only knows what they call it these days and I have a feeling it means much more that we thought it was. Oh, the good old days.
deb
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you, Deb - yes, some days I read so many anguished poems that a little humor seems in order :-) Brooke
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from Kingsland
this was rather short but very poetic. I liked how you put this short poetic piece together. It was my pleasure to have read and written a review for... John
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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this was rather short but very poetic. I liked how you put this short poetic piece together. It was my pleasure to have read and written a review for... John
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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It was for a 15 word or less contest, so "short" was my only option :-) Thanks, John. Brooke
Comment from kleblanc
Very nice poem. I am finding that short and simple can also be sweet. Nice work and picture to go along. Keep it up. Kristy
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Very nice poem. I am finding that short and simple can also be sweet. Nice work and picture to go along. Keep it up. Kristy
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you, kristy - glad you enjoyed my short love poem entry - light and sweet sometimes seems to be the way to go :-) Brooke
Comment from Hitcher
Ha ha, who knows indeed? Never heard of bussed before so I looked it up[kissed], it is a fun little take on the short love poem contest Brooke, I can still remember my first kiss, she is a policewoman now, we've managed to stayed friends throughout life, never slept with her though, so that probably helped, ha ha. Well done Brooke
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Ha ha, who knows indeed? Never heard of bussed before so I looked it up[kissed], it is a fun little take on the short love poem contest Brooke, I can still remember my first kiss, she is a policewoman now, we've managed to stayed friends throughout life, never slept with her though, so that probably helped, ha ha. Well done Brooke
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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You looked it up!!! Wow, I was beginning to wonder if that concept had died - I've had more than a dozen people ask me what the hell the word means. LOL God bless you. :-) Hitch kissed someone who became a cop - I like that for some odd reason. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading this short poem about being passionately in love. Great lines and feeling of emotion. First base as kissing is so much fun. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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I enjoyed reading this short poem about being passionately in love. Great lines and feeling of emotion. First base as kissing is so much fun. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Elaine - I appreciate your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
