The Plan
A married woman settles the score.80 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Ignoring what he did became easier than arguing about it.
A great line.
This has a crisp pace, fine characterization and makes a fine start to a novel. What will she do when Blair is gone? Stay tuned for next chapter? Will you continue this one? ;)
one suggestion--
More and more(,) she realized Craig was right. Blair had to go.
Good writing, as usual, dear Bob.
Blessings and Love, rd
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Ignoring what he did became easier than arguing about it.
A great line.
This has a crisp pace, fine characterization and makes a fine start to a novel. What will she do when Blair is gone? Stay tuned for next chapter? Will you continue this one? ;)
one suggestion--
More and more(,) she realized Craig was right. Blair had to go.
Good writing, as usual, dear Bob.
Blessings and Love, rd
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you, rama..I appreciate this...Bob
Comment from Live2Write
I definately think you should continue with this. You established an interesting character with a story that made me want to know more. I saw no SPAGS of other errors. Excellent writing.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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I definately think you should continue with this. You established an interesting character with a story that made me want to know more. I saw no SPAGS of other errors. Excellent writing.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thanks so much, Lives2Write. (Name please if you don't mind) just for more ease in staying in touch. I deeply appreciate your generous review and especially the sixth star. Wow! Bob
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Bob,
Very good beginning to a novel. Leaves the reader wondering about all that came before these clandestine, frequently tawdry events. The narration is frank enought for a guy, yet appeals to a woman's psyche by leaving much to the imagination.
Good luck in the contest.
Ray
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Hello Bob,
Very good beginning to a novel. Leaves the reader wondering about all that came before these clandestine, frequently tawdry events. The narration is frank enought for a guy, yet appeals to a woman's psyche by leaving much to the imagination.
Good luck in the contest.
Ray
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you, Ray...Glad you liked it...Will continue later...Bob
Comment from BethShelby
Bob, I love this start to a novel. It sound like a real thriller so I do hope you'll continue it. You have make a great start a developing the characters in so few line. I've probably missed some of your work because I've been dealing with computer virus which caused my hard drive to crash. It's good to be back on line.
Beth
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Bob, I love this start to a novel. It sound like a real thriller so I do hope you'll continue it. You have make a great start a developing the characters in so few line. I've probably missed some of your work because I've been dealing with computer virus which caused my hard drive to crash. It's good to be back on line.
Beth
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Hi,Beth..I missed you! Wow! So good to hear from you...I trust you will catch up to the book...I just posted chapter six today. Thanks so much for the six stars! Bless you...Bob
Comment from kleblanc
Very nice story that is all too common. I enjoyed reading it and it had great drama to captivate the audience. Thanks, Kristy!
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Very nice story that is all too common. I enjoyed reading it and it had great drama to captivate the audience. Thanks, Kristy!
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Welcome aboard Fanstory. Thanks for the review. What did you think of my Renee character by the way? Bob
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I wasn't able to find it on your page.
Comment from dragonqueen1983
i wish you luck in the contest as you have the making of a very interesting story. it has all the right elements and i saw no errors
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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i wish you luck in the contest as you have the making of a very interesting story. it has all the right elements and i saw no errors
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank so much, Queen...Bob
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Bob,
Good start to the story, leaving one wondering where to from here? Divorce? Murder? Combination of both? Excellent premise, now to tell the story perhaps?
Patrick
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Hi Bob,
Good start to the story, leaving one wondering where to from here? Divorce? Murder? Combination of both? Excellent premise, now to tell the story perhaps?
Patrick
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you, Patrick...Coming from a talented writer such as yourself, I am elated. Bob
Comment from Deejharrington
The best of luck in the contest. This is really a terrific start to a real novel. I hope you give a thought to really finishing it. I'd love to know how she goes about getting rid of her lying, cheating bastard of a husband. Murder maybe?
deb
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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The best of luck in the contest. This is really a terrific start to a real novel. I hope you give a thought to really finishing it. I'd love to know how she goes about getting rid of her lying, cheating bastard of a husband. Murder maybe?
deb
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Hi, DJ..where ya been? I'm glad you liked this one...Bob
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muse went on extended vacation and I got lazy with my reviews. Trying to catch up.
deb
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
Bob:
Nicely done! Your cliffhanger sentence at the end was the masterstroke (will the she murder him, blackmail him, or divorce him in a messy public proceeding) - Leaves the reader wanting more - excellent.
~ Steven
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Bob:
Nicely done! Your cliffhanger sentence at the end was the masterstroke (will the she murder him, blackmail him, or divorce him in a messy public proceeding) - Leaves the reader wanting more - excellent.
~ Steven
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thanks so much, Steve...Bob
Comment from Josipher32
Bob,
"The Plan" was a very well written horror piece for this contest "A Novel idea..." I especially enjoyed the eerie artwork you presented.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Bob,
"The Plan" was a very well written horror piece for this contest "A Novel idea..." I especially enjoyed the eerie artwork you presented.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Kristen...I appreciate your comments...Bob
