Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Winds of Change"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Armagin
This poem, to me, expresses the questions that many of us must have felt when meeting flames, on a journey that by its nature must relinquish one moment to the next. The second and third lines, I particularly like. You express so well the feeling of being "forever, for now"
"Can we stand hand in hand at peace with the understanding of time in this moonlight?". Brilliant!
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This poem, to me, expresses the questions that many of us must have felt when meeting flames, on a journey that by its nature must relinquish one moment to the next. The second and third lines, I particularly like. You express so well the feeling of being "forever, for now"
"Can we stand hand in hand at peace with the understanding of time in this moonlight?". Brilliant!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
Comment from James Dooney
I like what you have done here good Sir and I feel it is almost serenade like in Nature. Your pic and your words match nicely ! Well done !
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I like what you have done here good Sir and I feel it is almost serenade like in Nature. Your pic and your words match nicely ! Well done !
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
Comment from Diny
You need to do the editing yourself and not rely on word/ or whatever processing program you use... because it will always capitalize the first word of a sentnece when many times it should not be that way in poetry- Also you need to cut out some words because this is not a metered piece so many times less is more...
I see your reflection upon waters, still and tranquil.
Are you my love, my life, my soul mate? Do I dare to dream?
Can we stand hand in hand at peace, understanding time in this moonlight?
Or will the cold winds of change blow upon our earthly spirits?
Would this change our intimacy, to the discomfort of being apart,
like ripples betraying still waters. Will you stay with me,
or run for shelter on the nearby shores?
That voice will always call your name.
If I dare show you my heart, will you cherish the passion it would bring?
Or will you slowly destroy the life within, with promises that will never be?
When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness,
or cast me aside to be forgotten,
only to replenish yourself with the winds of change.
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You need to do the editing yourself and not rely on word/ or whatever processing program you use... because it will always capitalize the first word of a sentnece when many times it should not be that way in poetry- Also you need to cut out some words because this is not a metered piece so many times less is more...
I see your reflection upon waters, still and tranquil.
Are you my love, my life, my soul mate? Do I dare to dream?
Can we stand hand in hand at peace, understanding time in this moonlight?
Or will the cold winds of change blow upon our earthly spirits?
Would this change our intimacy, to the discomfort of being apart,
like ripples betraying still waters. Will you stay with me,
or run for shelter on the nearby shores?
That voice will always call your name.
If I dare show you my heart, will you cherish the passion it would bring?
Or will you slowly destroy the life within, with promises that will never be?
When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness,
or cast me aside to be forgotten,
only to replenish yourself with the winds of change.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from livelylinda
deepwater: Have I mentioned that I'm really enjoying reading your words? They are beautiful, original, deep, mature. And, you are equally handsome. . .oh, don't blush; you've heard that before, I'm sure. livelylinda
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deepwater: Have I mentioned that I'm really enjoying reading your words? They are beautiful, original, deep, mature. And, you are equally handsome. . .oh, don't blush; you've heard that before, I'm sure. livelylinda
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow this is deep...I love the imagery ....Love makes us vulnerable to another person....to open up truly ...it is beautifully expressed with ripples betraying still waters....just beautiful and well worthy of kudos and ribbons...
God bless
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Wow this is deep...I love the imagery ....Love makes us vulnerable to another person....to open up truly ...it is beautifully expressed with ripples betraying still waters....just beautiful and well worthy of kudos and ribbons...
God bless
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Well done free verse that speaks eloquently to the deep passions within your soul. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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Well done free verse that speaks eloquently to the deep passions within your soul. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from Ben Colder
Another good poem that sings a song of wonder. Good strong wording and easy rhythm. I had no trouble following or understanding the depth. Well done poet. Blessings
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Another good poem that sings a song of wonder. Good strong wording and easy rhythm. I had no trouble following or understanding the depth. Well done poet. Blessings
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem seems to be seeking the commitment that one wishes will last through all the sea changes experienced in the course of a relationship. The good times and bad met together. These are some sensitive and meaningful inquiries of one's heart. Nicely put.
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This poem seems to be seeking the commitment that one wishes will last through all the sea changes experienced in the course of a relationship. The good times and bad met together. These are some sensitive and meaningful inquiries of one's heart. Nicely put.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from DR DIP
Another beautiful read GW! your writing improves like a fine wine with age!
looking forward to reading your book
thank you for sharing
dip
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Another beautiful read GW! your writing improves like a fine wine with age!
looking forward to reading your book
thank you for sharing
dip
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from Eric1
Your descriptions and writing are like an old Port wine, they get better and better, I have read this through a couple of times and then returned to soak up every last word, Brilliant!
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Your descriptions and writing are like an old Port wine, they get better and better, I have read this through a couple of times and then returned to soak up every last word, Brilliant!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
