Creator of the Universe
a poem of thanks83 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
I know I'm still here, it's darn hard to take off.
I just have to read you poetry until I leave after May 1st.
Love your Faith entry. It's so full of happy things about God's creation.
Gert
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Hello Brooke,
I know I'm still here, it's darn hard to take off.
I just have to read you poetry until I leave after May 1st.
Love your Faith entry. It's so full of happy things about God's creation.
Gert
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Gert - I hope not being here doesn't cause you more strain than being here!!! Brooke :-)
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No I believe it won't it will take me a few days to adjust.
I will be working on my way in the future poem book
Gert
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written so meaningful you have expressed your faith very well good luck in the contest with the work well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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This is very well written so meaningful you have expressed your faith very well good luck in the contest with the work well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Fuller, for your gracious response to my faith poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from Annmuma
How beautiful and the use of the fruit art adds an even more "Thanksgiving" feel to the words. The poem works in imagery and in thought. Good job and good luck. ann
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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How beautiful and the use of the fruit art adds an even more "Thanksgiving" feel to the words. The poem works in imagery and in thought. Good job and good luck. ann
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Ann. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem of thanks : -) Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
Bravo! "Creator of the Universe" is another beautifully written poem filled with perfect rhythm and rhyme throughout. Well done and said.
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Bravo! "Creator of the Universe" is another beautifully written poem filled with perfect rhythm and rhyme throughout. Well done and said.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you, Steve. I so appreciate your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Sally Carter
Really beautiful, Brooke. What a wonderful range of marvels you have chosen to reflect the magificence of the universe, from the stars to a single flower, and then further still, to mankind's hopes for the future.
The way you use words in this poem is terrific - I specially loved the way the multi syllables fit in so perfectly, for instance in the third stanza.
A reader's delight.
Sally
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Really beautiful, Brooke. What a wonderful range of marvels you have chosen to reflect the magificence of the universe, from the stars to a single flower, and then further still, to mankind's hopes for the future.
The way you use words in this poem is terrific - I specially loved the way the multi syllables fit in so perfectly, for instance in the third stanza.
A reader's delight.
Sally
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Sally :-) I'm so glad you found meaning in this :-) Brooke
Comment from Maria C.
Brooke, this is a special write. It is so wonderful to read how you see beauty is the simplest things in creation:
the stone, grapes and buttercup and the more complex of the stars, the ocean and the air we need to live. The last lines sum up the whole, that we can be thankful for all this and live a life of gratitude. Loved reading it. Your
rhymes and presentation are beatiful.
Blessings,
Maria C.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Brooke, this is a special write. It is so wonderful to read how you see beauty is the simplest things in creation:
the stone, grapes and buttercup and the more complex of the stars, the ocean and the air we need to live. The last lines sum up the whole, that we can be thankful for all this and live a life of gratitude. Loved reading it. Your
rhymes and presentation are beatiful.
Blessings,
Maria C.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Maria, for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Such a peaceful and awesome poem to God, Brooke. Your faith is so refreshingly pure. I see this in your writing everyday - not just in this beautiful poem. Your use of contrasts from the expanse of the universe to the most simple of pleasures, like a the plumpened fruit of jelly grapes preserved within a mason jar is brilliantly done. Loved this poem. Best of luck in the contest. Rose.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Such a peaceful and awesome poem to God, Brooke. Your faith is so refreshingly pure. I see this in your writing everyday - not just in this beautiful poem. Your use of contrasts from the expanse of the universe to the most simple of pleasures, like a the plumpened fruit of jelly grapes preserved within a mason jar is brilliantly done. Loved this poem. Best of luck in the contest. Rose.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Rose - I'm so glad the macro/micro contrasts came through for you :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
Master of the universe,
your muscles bulging round,
with man-at-arms beside you
my youth you did astound.
Oh He-Man you were great,
a hero without par,
and skeletor, the evil git,
he couldn't your light mar.
Each day you went to battle
to right the wrongest wrongs,
your methods never subtle,
attired in dodgy thongs.
And yet you did inspire
this young man's energy,
so Masters of the Universe,
here's thank you, sent from me.
Mike
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Master of the universe,
your muscles bulging round,
with man-at-arms beside you
my youth you did astound.
Oh He-Man you were great,
a hero without par,
and skeletor, the evil git,
he couldn't your light mar.
Each day you went to battle
to right the wrongest wrongs,
your methods never subtle,
attired in dodgy thongs.
And yet you did inspire
this young man's energy,
so Masters of the Universe,
here's thank you, sent from me.
Mike
Comment Written 27-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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I have to share this with my 30 year old son - you have no idea how many hours I spent searching toy stores for the newest Skeletor dolls. LOL Thanks, Mike :-) Brooke
Comment from Ragnar
My, you really are quite prolific.
This is a very fine spiritual poem that stops short of being religious...not that there's anything wrong with that. LOL
From firmaments to buttercups to oceans; To my mind, this is the test of a good writer; to be able to bring together different ideas and imagery into a cohesive whole.
If you were a baseball player, you'd be batting a thousand. Congratulations!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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My, you really are quite prolific.
This is a very fine spiritual poem that stops short of being religious...not that there's anything wrong with that. LOL
From firmaments to buttercups to oceans; To my mind, this is the test of a good writer; to be able to bring together different ideas and imagery into a cohesive whole.
If you were a baseball player, you'd be batting a thousand. Congratulations!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Ragnar - batting a thousand, now that is a smile-inducing review :-) Brooke
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - Love this title. And what a great way to show the gratitude in describing those things that shows His greatness. I particularly liked the way you showed the grandiose along with the small. Awesome poem.
Charlie
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Brooke - Love this title. And what a great way to show the gratitude in describing those things that shows His greatness. I particularly liked the way you showed the grandiose along with the small. Awesome poem.
Charlie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Charlie, for a gracious review :-) Brooke
