Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Hi Mike! This was a fun chapter to read. Liked all the humor...even though it must have been embarrassing.

Here's some things to look over...

somehow seek help in (the) future,

ate of the end.(at the end...maybe sat at the end?)

and despite I dad (having instead of I dad) the exact same

It was,(what was??) but a couple days later Roxy and myself(I) found ourselves

Hitting my (hitting your what?)like a climbing accident

Tell me what happening?(what's happening)

Shhhh(.)

spend time with some on.(someone?)

She simply starting (started to talk to me) about relationships

without fear I will (won't?)become a problem for you

while I didn't stretch the condoms over my face to make the wrinkles, my makeup still had its effect.(WHAT??)

Hi(,) Mike

I am being(beginning) to like you

this time it (was)the cut of my jeans

she decided to talk to me again(.) So

impress her with her(his) Navy Seal

it's a D(.)

use a numbered syatem(system)

scale." (delete quote)


Indy :>)

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010

You floor me with your eagle eyes! I thank you very much for reviewing this and the compliments.

This is my second reply, we had a thunder boomer come through and knock out the power last night. I think it is the quality of the people there that prevented the embarrassment, but it had a quality of frustration. I likr the humorous outlook to deliver to the reader, my observations and ideas. It also blunts the pain of some of the experiences. I like that to be matter of fact. It's all about outlook.

Have a great week ahead! Mike

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Hi Mike, I thought I'd review a chapter once in awhile, although I can't follow the whole book. I was intrigued with the title of this one ... humorous. You do have a way of conveying how you manage to get along and make light of situations for survival's sake. I like that in a person. Sorry, no love match yet and yes, this was a long chapter!!

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010

I am glad that you occasionally decide to catch one. (Perhaps that isn't a good word to use with reviewing this chapter. LOL) I understand when you don't.

I think when one finds that humor to a given situation, one appreciates what life does give them. In my case though out life, it's a central theme. I think that it is the related humor that keeps a person reading, so I can relate observations and make points. I also hope it shows a certain spirit that I had to learn to aquire to keep one moving forward. I intend to have this published and while not intended as a self help book, it would be nice to be sitting on a self and used as a reference if the person suffer's a calamity in their lives. I also hope, though my various stories, to keep fresh in their memories the events and people that touched the reader's life.

I thank you very much for your compliment and this review. Mike

Oh! I rolled of my chair laughing with your last sentance. It has been mentioned that this could be about as long as War and Peace. What better for my loves. To be honest, there will be matches, but they go horribly wrong. Personally, I much more enjoy my near misses and at least, they made my life interesting.

Comment from Earthwriter

Excellent

very entertaining piece my friend almost felt like you were baring your soul in this one i was very entertained and enjoyed this piece very much

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010

Even though it was embarrassing! I am glad that I have the outlook and foresight to be able to use these events to provide a certain humor to relate observations or make points. I really enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike

Comment from tammipratt

Excellent

You have got good structure and form in this story.
The dialogue and character input was just the right balance.
There were good descriptions and use of words to create some strong images.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010

I thank you for this nice and complimentive review. Have a great week ahead! Mike

Comment from essence56

Good

I found the story to be somewhat humoorous. I tried to understand where it was going. The flow seemed to be forced. However, I can tell writer will do better with more writing effort.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010

Forced flow? I didn't realize that I posted this as a poem. This effort was a weeks work, but I understand reviews like this, since it is part of a book. I do thank you for reading and reviewing this. Mike

Comment from Addy García

Excellent

Congratulations!
have a great story, and very well done, really enjoyed reading it.
and I hope soon to read the next chapter.

receives a greeting from Mexico and my admiration.
ADDY GARCIA

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010

I really appreciate this review and look foward to future reviews. The next chapter is an extension of this one, as it's length was a bit too great to be included. It also still has the butterfingers aspect of this chapter, but a more serious tone. I thank you very much for your compliments, encouragement and review. Have a great week ahead! Mike