Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Waves Come Rolling Rows by Rows"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
85 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke A delightful poem, it's seem quite a tricky pattern, but when read aloud sounds great. Good choice of artwork Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke A delightful poem, it's seem quite a tricky pattern, but when read aloud sounds great. Good choice of artwork Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Gaye. I love this format :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonqueen1983
what alot of w's you have in this well written water poem. i like the way your poem flows just like waves do. i also like the pic that you used
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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what alot of w's you have in this well written water poem. i like the way your poem flows just like waves do. i also like the pic that you used
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Thank you, my friend - I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
This is another fun poems, and one that reflects my joy of the sea. I found it delightful and perfectly executed as always and you chose such a perfect photo to highlight it. Rose.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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This is another fun poems, and one that reflects my joy of the sea. I found it delightful and perfectly executed as always and you chose such a perfect photo to highlight it. Rose.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Rose - I always appreciate your thoughtful reviews :-) Brooke
Comment from Annmuma
The picture really enhances the quizzicality (not sure that's a word, but it is a feeling -lol) of the poem. I like it. ann
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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The picture really enhances the quizzicality (not sure that's a word, but it is a feeling -lol) of the poem. I like it. ann
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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I like the word, if you just made it up or not, Ann :-) Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
I like the air work it is perfect for your poem
your open opened m,y minds in so many ways one I kew the ocean waters came to shore to washaway the no-no, but I never thought from where they came and bring what to our shores Mmmmm
this is good write.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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I like the air work it is perfect for your poem
your open opened m,y minds in so many ways one I kew the ocean waters came to shore to washaway the no-no, but I never thought from where they came and bring what to our shores Mmmmm
this is good write.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Miss Cookie, thank you and good morning :-) Brooke
Comment from --Turtle.
Ah the trusty triolet,
I'm starting to form a fancy for them. This one felt in a deeper registry... when spoken, has a lot of woah woah, sounds to it, even when you get to the r's, giving it a neat vibration.
Made me think about sitting on the beach, getting pelted with waves, one after the other. A pleasant sensation.
The only thing I paused on was the use of wonders in the third line. Calls attention to itself as its part of the repeating form but outside the repeating part.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Ah the trusty triolet,
I'm starting to form a fancy for them. This one felt in a deeper registry... when spoken, has a lot of woah woah, sounds to it, even when you get to the r's, giving it a neat vibration.
Made me think about sitting on the beach, getting pelted with waves, one after the other. A pleasant sensation.
The only thing I paused on was the use of wonders in the third line. Calls attention to itself as its part of the repeating form but outside the repeating part.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Turtle :-) I love the triolet, so I'm thrilled you're starting to like them :-) Brooke
Comment from kintesiegel
Here you go again showing your mastery of various forms. This is another delightful poem that captures every person's curiousity about the nature and meaning of life.
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Here you go again showing your mastery of various forms. This is another delightful poem that captures every person's curiousity about the nature and meaning of life.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
Comment from despiser
Brooke
You and your gulls and seashores :) There is something so serene about the images you create with these. Imagine what a find a message in a bottle would be!
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Brooke
You and your gulls and seashores :) There is something so serene about the images you create with these. Imagine what a find a message in a bottle would be!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
Comment from Dom G Robles
Excellenty written--the rhyme and the rhythm. Wondering where the waves come-- Coming from a distant shore I know--but where? In what part of the country or the universe, and yes,they come tumbling--rolling and striking at your feet along the shore--these make you wonder...? Excellent in theme and it bugles my thinking, too Did they ever come from my homeland across the seas in the Pearl of the Orient Seas? If I ever drop a bottle and put inside that bottle a simple message...will they ever come to you with the waves...? or someplace else in the Universe...? You are great! Dom
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Excellenty written--the rhyme and the rhythm. Wondering where the waves come-- Coming from a distant shore I know--but where? In what part of the country or the universe, and yes,they come tumbling--rolling and striking at your feet along the shore--these make you wonder...? Excellent in theme and it bugles my thinking, too Did they ever come from my homeland across the seas in the Pearl of the Orient Seas? If I ever drop a bottle and put inside that bottle a simple message...will they ever come to you with the waves...? or someplace else in the Universe...? You are great! Dom
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Dom - It is always wonderful to know a reader has really gotten involved in thinking about what the poem has to say. You're a sweetheart :-) Brooke
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Adewpearl, you are welcome. You are a jewel of poetry!
Comment from Patricia.Green
This is a wonderful form, and you've kept to it quite well. Your A repeat has lovely imagery, and the flow is traditional and comfortable.
An excellent poem.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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This is a wonderful form, and you've kept to it quite well. Your A repeat has lovely imagery, and the flow is traditional and comfortable.
An excellent poem.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Patricia, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
