Comment from Sherelynne

Good

Nice chapater. Just a few SPAGs:

it weight[ed] over 100 pounds

so I grabbed the Hearst [hearse] instead

I had her so creped out[creeped]

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010

I thank you for reviewing this and made the corrections. Mike

Comment from Donna Thompson

Excellent

alot of depth and meaning to this story and I commend you for putting it all out there again for all to read.. well done with description, feeling and thought put in.. great job

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010

I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from MikiB

Excellent

A very long read but since it goes to a book I guess that's ok. It looks like this is chapter 43 and if all of the chapters are this long you will have a War & Peace thick book! But very well written and interesting.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010

I hate to say it, War and Peace crossed my mind as well. While it is a bit of a concern with me, everyone seems to stick with it. Every chapter has it tib bits. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Interesting chapter with your adventures in school, Mike. Just a couple of things for you to look over...

What was strange was that night, I had a dream. (two 'was' is two too many. How about ... That night I had a strange dream. ?)

The next day drove us to Newport (who drove?)

Other preschool excursions included Cranston Mall (this paragraph is one long sentence. Breaking it up would make it way easier to read.)

I planned to make us(use) of the free study day

'llI(I'll) think about things.

I would take the nicotine, the(then) pump the one,

Indy

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010

As always, I thank you very much for your compliment and reviews. The changes also, which I have fixed. On your first suggestion, I changed it to, "I found it very strange to have a peculiar dream that very night." It better states my thought that it was strange to have the dream. I also changed a couple more thats. LOL

Have a great week ahead! Mike