A Poet's Prayer
celebrating life83 total reviews
Comment from rmdelta
Brooke,
this was a beautiful writing, my friend. Great descriptives and so gentle -- so peaceful it was a pleasure to read. Well done.
Reggie
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
this was a beautiful writing, my friend. Great descriptives and so gentle -- so peaceful it was a pleasure to read. Well done.
Reggie
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Reggie, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
Very appealing and inspirational. The title made me anticipate--and I was rewarded by the reading. "A calla lily's sculptured swirl" is my favorite line!! elaine
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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adewpearl,
Very appealing and inspirational. The title made me anticipate--and I was rewarded by the reading. "A calla lily's sculptured swirl" is my favorite line!! elaine
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Elaine. I'm so glad you like the poem and that line in particular :-) Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
Your poem feels like spring, Brooke. There is something hopeful in its lines. I enjoyed the way you brought all the senses into the lines. :) Lovely.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Your poem feels like spring, Brooke. There is something hopeful in its lines. I enjoyed the way you brought all the senses into the lines. :) Lovely.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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What a lovely comment, dear friend - thank you :-) Brooke
Comment from Ann Smith
I too like the rhyme scheme and might try it. The rhyme scheme seems to feel more like the rhythm you might find in a song. The imagery and details in the poem have a sensory feel to them, and I especially like the line, 'the calla lily's scupltured swirl.' I can smell the flower now. ann
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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I too like the rhyme scheme and might try it. The rhyme scheme seems to feel more like the rhythm you might find in a song. The imagery and details in the poem have a sensory feel to them, and I especially like the line, 'the calla lily's scupltured swirl.' I can smell the flower now. ann
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Ann - I hope you do give it a try :-) I'm so pleased you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from flygirl254
Brooke,
I understand what you mean about this rhyme scheme being appealing. I think it's definitely one that lends an interesting flavor to your poem. It's as if the rhymes are not going to connect and that third line is just hanging there, and suddenly it's "brought home" by line six's rhyme. Pretty cool.
I thinks this is a very pretty poem. The picture goes well with it, because it has the fantasy-whimsy of the rainbow and slightly unreal scenery. I like your word choices, such as the rhyme of arc and meadowlark. My favorite line is, "A calla lily's sculptured swirl," not only because it has a nice sound and flow to it, but also because the calla lily is my favorite!
Great work on this different poetry form. I'm sure I'll see more:-)
Teresa
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
I understand what you mean about this rhyme scheme being appealing. I think it's definitely one that lends an interesting flavor to your poem. It's as if the rhymes are not going to connect and that third line is just hanging there, and suddenly it's "brought home" by line six's rhyme. Pretty cool.
I thinks this is a very pretty poem. The picture goes well with it, because it has the fantasy-whimsy of the rainbow and slightly unreal scenery. I like your word choices, such as the rhyme of arc and meadowlark. My favorite line is, "A calla lily's sculptured swirl," not only because it has a nice sound and flow to it, but also because the calla lily is my favorite!
Great work on this different poetry form. I'm sure I'll see more:-)
Teresa
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Teresa - I have not yet written another one in this form - the rhyming is far more difficult in this pattern - the calla lily sure is beautiful, isn't it? Brooke :-)
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I fell in love with the calla lily after (strange but true) watching a moving episode of the tv show "Quantum Leap". Sam's best friend Al's wife had believed Al was dead in Viet Nam. When he finally came home from the POW camp, she had moved on, throwing him into a life of debauchery because he never found love again. Sam refused to let Al tell his wife he was alive while they were in her time, because it wasn't the mission. Later, Sam made a deal with God that he would stay trapped as a leaper, doing good, if he could go back to that moment and let Al's wife know that he was alive and coming home, thereby changing history and meaning he and Al would never meet. Her favorite flower was the calla lily. I fell in love with the look of them, and I especially love the ones that are a lavendar shade.
Long explanation - I know! LOL!
Comment from Sasha
I really enjoyed this one. I found it very uplifting and like most of your work, it put a smile on my face. Very good job wit this one.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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I really enjoyed this one. I found it very uplifting and like most of your work, it put a smile on my face. Very good job wit this one.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Valerie - glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi Brooke,
A pretty poem, with a pattern that shakes things up from the norm but is identifiable to settle into if your like me and like the rhyming aspect of poems. I think this worked well.
The imagery was the best part of this, giving the scenes with a hint of a prayer to be able to share them, making them all the more memorable with the reminder that time is keeping time.
I liked it.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke,
A pretty poem, with a pattern that shakes things up from the norm but is identifiable to settle into if your like me and like the rhyming aspect of poems. I think this worked well.
The imagery was the best part of this, giving the scenes with a hint of a prayer to be able to share them, making them all the more memorable with the reminder that time is keeping time.
I liked it.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Turtle - I'm pleased you enjoyed the imagery :-) Brooke
Comment from The Highlander
Adewpearl, i have only been here a day, and your writing has really captured my attention. This poem is like the others i have read, simply a delight to read. Its time to hit the " Become A Fan " link. I will definately be following your writing endeavours on this site.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Adewpearl, i have only been here a day, and your writing has really captured my attention. This poem is like the others i have read, simply a delight to read. Its time to hit the " Become A Fan " link. I will definately be following your writing endeavours on this site.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Highlander :-) You are most gracious and I am most appreciative :-) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
Wonderfull sentiments. What a great way to say, Let me Spread the word. It a teriffic description with the seeds of the milkweed blowing in the breeze. A sermon, a prayer and not preachy. Well done. Mike
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Wonderfull sentiments. What a great way to say, Let me Spread the word. It a teriffic description with the seeds of the milkweed blowing in the breeze. A sermon, a prayer and not preachy. Well done. Mike
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Michael, I'm back on site - thank you :-) I'm glad it's not too preachy :-) Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
Really beautiful artwork--so vibrant!--accents the poem perfectly. I venture to say you've fulfilled your wish expressed in the last half of the second stanza. Nearly every day you spead the wonder and love you feel for God's creation with your beautifully composed poems. Thank you so much for sahring your God given talent.
Hugs,
Diane
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2010
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Really beautiful artwork--so vibrant!--accents the poem perfectly. I venture to say you've fulfilled your wish expressed in the last half of the second stanza. Nearly every day you spead the wonder and love you feel for God's creation with your beautifully composed poems. Thank you so much for sahring your God given talent.
Hugs,
Diane
Comment Written 16-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2010
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Diane, I really appreciate what you've said in these comments - you are such a lovely lady :-) Brooke
