As Katydids Sing Through the Night
a variation of a mirrored refrain poem75 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
It is so great to be back and actually able to see! The bright blue of this nearly blinded me! Absolutely lovely poem and I enjoyed it immensely. I now my reviews all too often sound the same but your work often leaves me speechless and I find myself reverting to the easiest way to say terrific work. So, here goes, this is terrific work!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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It is so great to be back and actually able to see! The bright blue of this nearly blinded me! Absolutely lovely poem and I enjoyed it immensely. I now my reviews all too often sound the same but your work often leaves me speechless and I find myself reverting to the easiest way to say terrific work. So, here goes, this is terrific work!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Valerie, you can see!!!! :-) I don't even care if you like the poem or not - just to see you're back and able to read is good enough for me :-) Brooke
Comment from The Highlander
Another tremendous poem, the rhyme and flow in dedication to the katydids is joyous. I can picture this poem being read as they sing, wonderful images it gives me. And what a strange name for this bush cricket. Thank you for sharing another gem.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Another tremendous poem, the rhyme and flow in dedication to the katydids is joyous. I can picture this poem being read as they sing, wonderful images it gives me. And what a strange name for this bush cricket. Thank you for sharing another gem.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Highlander. I am so glad you speak about the poem being read as I believe all poetry is meant to be spoken :-) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
As the master once said; Katydoes as katydid,yet never the two shall meet. Or something like that. It's kind of a creepy poem when you think that the bugs are crawling around all through the night keeping you company. And just the ones you can hear are in the forefront of your mind, what about the creepy crawly things that go silent through the night? What about the ones that bite? Okay, so it was a good poem, try sleeping now. As another master would say, LOL. Mike
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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As the master once said; Katydoes as katydid,yet never the two shall meet. Or something like that. It's kind of a creepy poem when you think that the bugs are crawling around all through the night keeping you company. And just the ones you can hear are in the forefront of your mind, what about the creepy crawly things that go silent through the night? What about the ones that bite? Okay, so it was a good poem, try sleeping now. As another master would say, LOL. Mike
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Mike, bugs are funny creatures - some creep me out like spiders and roaches, but crickets, katydids, grasshoppers, praying mantises, lady bugs, lightning bugs, caterpillars - I have held all of them and would gladly let them crawl up my arm :-) Thank you, little brother :-) Brooke
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Praying mantis are stange creatures to be sure. I like to watch the way they look about and turn thier heads. They are vary animated. It's bed time, I hope the bedbugs aren't biten tonight. Mike
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi Brooke,
I read this poem and enjoyed it. I liked the back and forth switching of the repeating line. My brain followed the one line moving from primary to secondary and I almost missed that the accompanying lines repeated, too. till I read the authors notes, and then read the piece again. This was really easy to read out loud--flowed right over the tongue. And the comfort of not being alone when the world is big, empty, or troubled was warming. I like that you explain things in the authors notes, I've learned lots of tidbits about poetry and sometimes nature, plants, animals. and sometimes people, from them.
You make it look easy.
--Turtle.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke,
I read this poem and enjoyed it. I liked the back and forth switching of the repeating line. My brain followed the one line moving from primary to secondary and I almost missed that the accompanying lines repeated, too. till I read the authors notes, and then read the piece again. This was really easy to read out loud--flowed right over the tongue. And the comfort of not being alone when the world is big, empty, or troubled was warming. I like that you explain things in the authors notes, I've learned lots of tidbits about poetry and sometimes nature, plants, animals. and sometimes people, from them.
You make it look easy.
--Turtle.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Turtle - I have fallen in love with this form in the past week. Your thoughtful comments about the composition of the poem are most appreciated :-) Brooke
Comment from Ann Smith
This poem has a gentle rhythm and flow like listening to the katydids in the night. Somehow when we stop and listen to the sounds around us it does give us comfort to know we are not alone. The imagery and detail in the poem are strong and I like the format. ann
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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This poem has a gentle rhythm and flow like listening to the katydids in the night. Somehow when we stop and listen to the sounds around us it does give us comfort to know we are not alone. The imagery and detail in the poem are strong and I like the format. ann
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Ann - I'm so glad you "get" my point :-) Brooke
Comment from luna
Brooke, I haven't had the pleasure of reviewing one of your poems in what seems like ages! FanStory is misbehaving and the picture won't show on my screen, unfortunately. The words do, however, and I absolutely love the message that the phrase "when doubts are planted in the dark, when met with faith they lose their might" imparts.
I must be honest. I am a purist when it comes to form poetry, and I don't believe (just a personal thing of mine) in revising the forms to suit our needs. So I will congratulate you on a lovely poem, well written, but I hope you understand that I cannot call it a mirrored refrain. It's just a personal quirk of mine, no harm intended.
I wish I could put my words together as well as you do.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Brooke, I haven't had the pleasure of reviewing one of your poems in what seems like ages! FanStory is misbehaving and the picture won't show on my screen, unfortunately. The words do, however, and I absolutely love the message that the phrase "when doubts are planted in the dark, when met with faith they lose their might" imparts.
I must be honest. I am a purist when it comes to form poetry, and I don't believe (just a personal thing of mine) in revising the forms to suit our needs. So I will congratulate you on a lovely poem, well written, but I hope you understand that I cannot call it a mirrored refrain. It's just a personal quirk of mine, no harm intended.
I wish I could put my words together as well as you do.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Jenny, I never care what the heck people call one of my poems - if you like the poem, why in the world would I care if you label it a form or not? In the vast majority of poetry anthologies poems are not labeled at all, just presented. You are most kind, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Patricia.Green
This is a deceptively simple poem. In reality, it has complex imagery and creative form. I like the way you've used the form to emphasize your focus.
A very good poem. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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This is a deceptively simple poem. In reality, it has complex imagery and creative form. I like the way you've used the form to emphasize your focus.
A very good poem. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Patricia. I'm pleased you like my use of this form :-) Brooke
Comment from smileycloud
hey Brooke
this is strong with emotion and pictures of strength in the flight through the late hours of one's wakefullness
I love the term clouds drawing drapes across the sky; it conjures up beautiful images but marks the closing of the day very uniquely
have a smiley day
lorraine
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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hey Brooke
this is strong with emotion and pictures of strength in the flight through the late hours of one's wakefullness
I love the term clouds drawing drapes across the sky; it conjures up beautiful images but marks the closing of the day very uniquely
have a smiley day
lorraine
Comment Written 16-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Lorraine. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the imagery :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonqueen1983
i had never heard of a katydid so your authors notes where very useful. you have a well written poem here and i like the colours that you used
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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i had never heard of a katydid so your authors notes where very useful. you have a well written poem here and i like the colours that you used
Comment Written 16-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, my friend :-) Glad I could introduce you to the katydid. Brooke :-)
Comment from Amicus
This is a fine poem, Brooke. You always manage to make these musical repeated line poems sing while at the same time they carry a smart sentiment. This is no exception. Your last stanza with its strong statement of the efficacy of faith in the face of darkness delivered with a chorus of katydid in the background is especially good.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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This is a fine poem, Brooke. You always manage to make these musical repeated line poems sing while at the same time they carry a smart sentiment. This is no exception. Your last stanza with its strong statement of the efficacy of faith in the face of darkness delivered with a chorus of katydid in the background is especially good.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Amicus - you always make me sound so smart when you analyze my work :-) Brooke
