Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Hey You!"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from daniela.albu
This is an excellent contemplative triolet. It is perfect in format and its idea is inspiring. The artwork by Photon enhances your message. It is clear that time has come not only for the character in the photo but for every person that just sits and looks to get engaged. But the question is "engaged in what". There are lots of noble causes on this earth but in my opinion to strengthen the message of your poem it might be helpful to more specifically express or relate to engagement.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2010
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This is an excellent contemplative triolet. It is perfect in format and its idea is inspiring. The artwork by Photon enhances your message. It is clear that time has come not only for the character in the photo but for every person that just sits and looks to get engaged. But the question is "engaged in what". There are lots of noble causes on this earth but in my opinion to strengthen the message of your poem it might be helpful to more specifically express or relate to engagement.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Daniela. I love the art available on Fan Art. I appreciate your thoughtful feedback. Brooke :-)
Comment from honeytree
The art work is great, and the words tell us what is happening within this picture.
I really liked reading these words very much, and the art work is very telling.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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The art work is great, and the words tell us what is happening within this picture.
I really liked reading these words very much, and the art work is very telling.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Annie. I appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from amada
There you go! I loved this one, so well told, a perfect poem for the picture in there. I like the lines you chose to repeat. My best to you.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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There you go! I loved this one, so well told, a perfect poem for the picture in there. I like the lines you chose to repeat. My best to you.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Thank you, amada. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. Brooke :-)
Comment from Jo_Tweedy
Nice reminds me of being at school this one lol
It could be anyone just sitting there!
It's so true we will never achieve anything by just sitting there. I like it! :-)
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Nice reminds me of being at school this one lol
It could be anyone just sitting there!
It's so true we will never achieve anything by just sitting there. I like it! :-)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Jo - so glad the meaning came across :-) Brooke
Comment from Justin Chopin
Hey pearl. I love the message that you put in this poem which I believe is that if you just sit down in your comfort location whether that be in a chair or in your bed just get up and get inspired. That's a great message.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2010
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Hey pearl. I love the message that you put in this poem which I believe is that if you just sit down in your comfort location whether that be in a chair or in your bed just get up and get inspired. That's a great message.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Boz Roz, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Razz
Very good, Brooke.
I enjoyed this one.
Very smooth and so very true for so many people.
It speaks to many of us.
Making it personal is the trick.
Razz
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Very good, Brooke.
I enjoyed this one.
Very smooth and so very true for so many people.
It speaks to many of us.
Making it personal is the trick.
Razz
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Razz. It is always good to hear from you :-) Brooke
Comment from JudithMarie
You told a story within the scheme of a triolet. The first few lines brought a smile then I realized there must be more to "just sitting there." The shift in emotions was powerful here as I read. What I assumed was not correct. A lot going on here within few words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Well done. Thank you. JudithMarie
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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You told a story within the scheme of a triolet. The first few lines brought a smile then I realized there must be more to "just sitting there." The shift in emotions was powerful here as I read. What I assumed was not correct. A lot going on here within few words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Well done. Thank you. JudithMarie
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Thank you, JudithMarie. I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Brad Sterling
Yes you - got the slight change for emphasis - and it pays off - very effective type of verse with the line repetition so deceptively carried out - message - get up and get on with life - but surely some quiet time is necessary for meditation? Once more a delight in showing off your multi- faceted talent to your readers benefit - well done again.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Yes you - got the slight change for emphasis - and it pays off - very effective type of verse with the line repetition so deceptively carried out - message - get up and get on with life - but surely some quiet time is necessary for meditation? Once more a delight in showing off your multi- faceted talent to your readers benefit - well done again.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Brad - of course quiet time is necessary for meditation - this poem is not directed at folks who relax once in a while. It is directed at people who do lots of complaining without ever getting involved in making this a better place. Brooke :-)
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Missed that one - can't win them all - brad.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, Brooke, your poetry offer so much wisdom. Just sitting around does not take you far in life. We can't expect things to land at our door, we must go after what we want in life.
In its brevity, your poem brings that message to life.
Always a pleasure reading your work, Brooke. I gain insight.
Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Wow, Brooke, your poetry offer so much wisdom. Just sitting around does not take you far in life. We can't expect things to land at our door, we must go after what we want in life.
In its brevity, your poem brings that message to life.
Always a pleasure reading your work, Brooke. I gain insight.
Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Thank you, my friend :-) I so appreciate your gracious response to this poem. Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Who me? Naw...
But then again, this one did make me squirm in my chair, just a little. You aer so right - the best way to fix the situation is to get up and do something. Think I'll go and raid the frige.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Who me? Naw...
But then again, this one did make me squirm in my chair, just a little. You aer so right - the best way to fix the situation is to get up and do something. Think I'll go and raid the frige.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Rose - you can be wickedly funny :-0 Brooke
