Comment from daniela.albu

Exceptional

This is an excellent contemplative triolet. We should always be careful what we wish for. The rhyme and tempo flow in perfect cadence and the artwork illustrates the deep meaning of this poem.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010

Thank you so much, Daniela, for this wonderfully generous and gracious review :-) I so appreciate your lovely comments : -) Brooke

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Brooke, I have asked myself this question so many times. I have concluded that what I've asked is not God's will for me a certain time in my life or may not be for at all. Our relationships with God help us understand the difference.

I am currently writing a poem on this subject as well, for it is so prevalent as we progress through life.

Thank you for sharing a poem that WE all need to read. And of course, it was written perfectly.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010

Thanks for another most thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from bayoupoet

Excellent

This is a very well written and well expressed poem of truly profound reasoning. It has vivid imagery and very deep emotion. It is such a pleasure to read for you Brooke!
sandra

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010

Thank you, Sandra. I so appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem. Brooke

Comment from EllieKaye

Excellent

Hi Brooke,
See? Wisdom in the lines. I love it.
I also like the gambling analogy. Go into any casino and you can see people handing over their money, still hoping for riches beyond all odds. It's the same with asking for something you think you want, and then it doesn't happen. Well done. :)

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010

Thanks, my friend, for your perceptive read :-) Yep, the world is filled with people who think they will just get what they want, if in a casino or in a church :-) brooke

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Dear Brooke,
This vivid piece of introspective writing displays strongly, your faith in a God on whom you can rely to provide the answers to your every query in life. Despite my belief in a supreme being, I envy you in the comfort you can derive from your belief.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010

Thank you, Reg :-) As for God providing answers to my every query in life, I sure wish it worked that way for me :-) Brooke

Comment from jack silver

Exceptional

god answers us all. but often his answer is no. we as humans don't like that. you put the words to what I try tell people about god. I enjoyed reading. look forward to more. Didn't see anything you needed to work on. really loved it.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010

Thanks so much, Jack, for this wonderfully generous review :-) You are most gracious and I am most appreciative :-) Brooke

Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

hey
Brooke
a whole lot of wisdom and self inspection squeezed into a very good well formatted triolet with humility and grace
have a smiley day
lorraine

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010

Thank you, Lorraine. I'm starting my day off early for no good reason at all, but I'll try to make it a smiley one once the sun comes up. LOL Brooke :-D

Comment from amel

Excellent

The end was stunning
and it really got to me.
"When God gives answers I reject
I have to question what I've asked"
How so true, Brooke. We often goad God as if we know the best answer for us . Great in flow , meaning and beauty. You are so talented Brooke.
Fondly,
amel

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010

Thank you, Amel, for your most gracious response to this poem. Brooke :-) Brooke

Comment from flygirl254

Excellent

Brooke,

I like this poem and the message behind it. Whenever I ask God something, it's hard to deal with the fact that He might say no. What's even harder is when He says to wait. Sometimes it's also hard to remember that I have to be careful what I ask God for, because He just might give it to me. I've learned not to ask for patience in some lighthearted way.

James was asking about this poem, and we talked about its meaning quite a bit. Thank you, therefore, for giving my little man here something to think about. I think he understands your meaning, now.

You've fit everything well into the triolet form. I like the lines you've chosen for repetition. I also think the reference to gambling, and taking a gamble when you ask God for something because He might say no, is really cool.

Great work, as usual, my friend!

Teresa

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010

James asked me about the meaning in his review - I hope my answer helped. I think it is great that a boy his age thinks about what poems really mean and it's great you and he have thoughtful discussions :-) Thanks, Teresa. Brooke :-)

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

and then again, God sometimes answers our prayers in
ways we might not know. Thought provoking triolet
with good repeating lines and rhyme.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010

Thank you, Nancy :-) I appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke