(pollen spills from bees) tanka
five lines of comic musing90 total reviews
Comment from kintesiegel
This is one of those poems that make me want to scream:" yes, yes, yes..." or something like that. The ending is a perfect surprise that wraps the whole story up just right. I love it.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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This is one of those poems that make me want to scream:" yes, yes, yes..." or something like that. The ending is a perfect surprise that wraps the whole story up just right. I love it.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you, my friend, for your wonderfully enthusiastic review :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Bees do indeed feed our world - and I know that you are only having some fun, for it is so accident. They are part of the perfect plan. A very reflective tanka on a topic dear to my heart. For thousands of years, bees have taken care of man, without giving him a second thought - Now, we must take care of them - or we all will be in great peril. Rose.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Bees do indeed feed our world - and I know that you are only having some fun, for it is so accident. They are part of the perfect plan. A very reflective tanka on a topic dear to my heart. For thousands of years, bees have taken care of man, without giving him a second thought - Now, we must take care of them - or we all will be in great peril. Rose.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Rose - glad you found the message in the humor :-) Brooke
Comment from raw form
I love the spring and the flowers and trees that bloom but my allergies do a number on me and I cant take it but I'm glad that you enjoy the spring and the bloomimg of all that blossoms as the seasons turn.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I love the spring and the flowers and trees that bloom but my allergies do a number on me and I cant take it but I'm glad that you enjoy the spring and the bloomimg of all that blossoms as the seasons turn.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Steve, thank you, my friend - those allergies do many of us in! :-) Brooke
Comment from Joyce L.
This poem had a touch of Spring in it and it was also very informative. Nothing like a little bit of science to start my day. Enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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This poem had a touch of Spring in it and it was also very informative. Nothing like a little bit of science to start my day. Enjoyed it.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Joyce, thank you for your kind visits and comments this morning :-) Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke Even without the great artwork your words show a lovely picture. I love the word 'serendipity' I'm not quite sure about 'sloppy' Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke Even without the great artwork your words show a lovely picture. I love the word 'serendipity' I'm not quite sure about 'sloppy' Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Gaye - I love "serendipity" too - the "sloppy" is meant to be funny since the pollen falls off their bodies as they flit about. Brooke :-)
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Hi Brooke Thanks for explaining I must watch around my garden for 'sloppy' bees.
Cheers Gaye
Comment from MissMerri
Perfect in every way, as far as I can tell. I especially like the 'serendipity' line. That's just wonderful! And of course, the line "crumbs that feed the multitudes" makes the reader think of Jesus feeding the five-thousand with a few loaves of bread. A miracle, in both instances.
Clever and well written and thoughtful.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Perfect in every way, as far as I can tell. I especially like the 'serendipity' line. That's just wonderful! And of course, the line "crumbs that feed the multitudes" makes the reader think of Jesus feeding the five-thousand with a few loaves of bread. A miracle, in both instances.
Clever and well written and thoughtful.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you, MissMerri. I'm so glad you got the loves and fishes reference :-) I think that sailed right past lots of folks. Brooke
Comment from Annmuma
I like the "merry" feeling of this work. I could almost see the pollen dripping from the bees legs as they wondered from plant to plant. Great. ann
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I like the "merry" feeling of this work. I could almost see the pollen dripping from the bees legs as they wondered from plant to plant. Great. ann
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Ann - so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicki_Mist
A very nice tanka poem. I had to giggle that the insects feed our world but so true. You used great flow, imagery and rhythm with this lovely poem.
Nicole
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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A very nice tanka poem. I had to giggle that the insects feed our world but so true. You used great flow, imagery and rhythm with this lovely poem.
Nicole
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Nicole. So glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from Kellytr
Brooke, I love your tanka and its theme. God help us if the bees disappear. I read somewhere recently that bees are in deep trouble, not because they are dying off for the usual reasons, but because they can no longer find their way home. In an experiment, a cell phone was left in a garden, which confused the bees to such an extent, they lost their direction. One cell phone! How many cell phones in the world? Scarey. Cheers, Kelly
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2010
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Brooke, I love your tanka and its theme. God help us if the bees disappear. I read somewhere recently that bees are in deep trouble, not because they are dying off for the usual reasons, but because they can no longer find their way home. In an experiment, a cell phone was left in a garden, which confused the bees to such an extent, they lost their direction. One cell phone! How many cell phones in the world? Scarey. Cheers, Kelly
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2010
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I hadn't even heard of the cell phone twist! I know they've been disappearing - gee, progress always has a price to pay. Thanks so much, Kelly. Brooke :-)
Comment from bard owl
Ah, the pragmatic attitude of nature. One creation benefits another, even in its lack of grace. Excellent tanka. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2010
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Ah, the pragmatic attitude of nature. One creation benefits another, even in its lack of grace. Excellent tanka. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Linda, for your insightful comments :-) Brooke
