Scuttling Crabs
humorous quatrains in 8/7/8/796 total reviews
Comment from Joyce L.
Ha Ha, this one was a light hearted poem to sit back and enjoy. Thanks for the read and for constantly coming up with new ideas to write about. Enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Ha Ha, this one was a light hearted poem to sit back and enjoy. Thanks for the read and for constantly coming up with new ideas to write about. Enjoyed it.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Joyce. So glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from --Turtle.
I read the quatrain, I don't know if it's humorous, but it's surely enjoyable with a good message to take to work, where I feel like a scurrying crab with its head cut off trying to win a race and avoid a gull and store some beans.
Loved the build up to the last line.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I read the quatrain, I don't know if it's humorous, but it's surely enjoyable with a good message to take to work, where I feel like a scurrying crab with its head cut off trying to win a race and avoid a gull and store some beans.
Loved the build up to the last line.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Turtle - glad you found the message if not the humor. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Just2Write
This IS nice and light, and has a perfect picture to round out the presentation. I had a big smile on my face when reading this delightful poem. Great work, Brooke - another charmer. Rose.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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This IS nice and light, and has a perfect picture to round out the presentation. I had a big smile on my face when reading this delightful poem. Great work, Brooke - another charmer. Rose.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Rose - so glad this induced a smile :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
We scamper to and fro and sometimes know
the purpose of our frantic daily wailing
but even then we scamper on as if
responsibility might cause a sting.
We scamper through a life made obsolete
by mass beliefs and corporate law society,
and then we scamper home and spend our time
just trying to remember who we are.
Mike
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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We scamper to and fro and sometimes know
the purpose of our frantic daily wailing
but even then we scamper on as if
responsibility might cause a sting.
We scamper through a life made obsolete
by mass beliefs and corporate law society,
and then we scamper home and spend our time
just trying to remember who we are.
Mike
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Mike, are you trying to shove it in my face that you used scamper??? LOLOLOL I actually really like that obsolete by mass beliefs passage :-) Brooke
Comment from AnnaLinda
I think that we humans do an all too good of a job at collecting numerous and various 'pocket full of worries' Brooke! You certainly have taken a very different approach to that message. It is an important one as well.
I liked your skuttle, scoot and skitter in there and the squirel and crab similies. Your photo choice is also the
perfect match for your creative poem.
Very clever!
Linda
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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I think that we humans do an all too good of a job at collecting numerous and various 'pocket full of worries' Brooke! You certainly have taken a very different approach to that message. It is an important one as well.
I liked your skuttle, scoot and skitter in there and the squirel and crab similies. Your photo choice is also the
perfect match for your creative poem.
Very clever!
Linda
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Linda. I'm so glad you found meaning in this poem and enjoyed its composition, too :-) Brooke
Comment from zmacgirl
As always your work is creative and imaginative and wonderfully written. It's light and fun to read which was a nice change of pace this evening since I've been writing heavy stuff myself tonight. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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As always your work is creative and imaginative and wonderfully written. It's light and fun to read which was a nice change of pace this evening since I've been writing heavy stuff myself tonight. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you, zmacgirl. I appreciate your kind review :-) brooke
Comment from flygirl254
Brooke,
This is a really cool poem. When James wakes up, I'm going to read it to him, because I think he needs it right now.
Of course, if I were that crab, I'd sure be scuttling as fast as I could, and I definitely would be worried! But I do recognize the connotations behind only storing up worry as opposed to treasures, and how we as humans often feel compelled to do everything possible, driving ourselves into anxiety sometimes, just to feel ilke we've gained something.
I love the picture, and I've always thought gulls were on the one hand very interesting, but on the other hand very creepy and cruel, and perhaps even evil. It's from one of my favorite books, called THE TALLISMAN by Stephen King and Peter Straub. This particular photo makes that gull's eye look dead.
Anyway, great work as always. That 8/7/8/7 gives the poem a rhythmic flow that gives it a sing-song quality when read aloud. I like that very much!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
This is a really cool poem. When James wakes up, I'm going to read it to him, because I think he needs it right now.
Of course, if I were that crab, I'd sure be scuttling as fast as I could, and I definitely would be worried! But I do recognize the connotations behind only storing up worry as opposed to treasures, and how we as humans often feel compelled to do everything possible, driving ourselves into anxiety sometimes, just to feel ilke we've gained something.
I love the picture, and I've always thought gulls were on the one hand very interesting, but on the other hand very creepy and cruel, and perhaps even evil. It's from one of my favorite books, called THE TALLISMAN by Stephen King and Peter Straub. This particular photo makes that gull's eye look dead.
Anyway, great work as always. That 8/7/8/7 gives the poem a rhythmic flow that gives it a sing-song quality when read aloud. I like that very much!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Teresa. Has James been hurrying or worrying too much lately that he needs the poem? I hope my friend is doing well. I appreciate your great comments. Brooke
Comment from Dall
What a cute poem. I liked this, crabs hmmm, they do scuttle about. Some of us are like them too, hurrying and not getting much of anything accomplished or, jumping out of the frying pan into the fire.. well done!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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What a cute poem. I liked this, crabs hmmm, they do scuttle about. Some of us are like them too, hurrying and not getting much of anything accomplished or, jumping out of the frying pan into the fire.. well done!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Dall, for your most thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Soulester
Hi, Brooke! I thoroughly enjoyed your "something light". (I guess crabs can have adult ADHD, too!) LOL Your message in the second verse is well received. Once again--great job! Mary
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Hi, Brooke! I thoroughly enjoyed your "something light". (I guess crabs can have adult ADHD, too!) LOL Your message in the second verse is well received. Once again--great job! Mary
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Mary, for your humorous and lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from AnetteAurora
I like the message in the last verse. The first was a little forced by the the words you were forced to put in I think. I am not sure I understand what the first line means at all?. Will you please let me know? Liked the message....remember to store all the good memories aswell. One can live long on those .0)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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I like the message in the last verse. The first was a little forced by the the words you were forced to put in I think. I am not sure I understand what the first line means at all?. Will you please let me know? Liked the message....remember to store all the good memories aswell. One can live long on those .0)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2010
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I was not forced to put any words into this poem so I'm not sure what that means. The first line means that we people rush around just like crabs who are scooting to get out of the way of seagulls who are trying to catch them for their dinner. The point of the poem is that we should stop scurrying around like crabs and squirrels because all that rushing just ends up in stress. I hope that helps. Thanks for reading. Brooke :-)
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Sorry Brooke.....I think I got confused beacuse you wrote this in your Author note:
Author Notes
scuttle, scoot, skitter, scramble, scurry - all synonyms - I didn't manage to fit in scamper :-)
So I thought for somehow that it was for one of those "same word" contests. I understand much better now thanx:)
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no, I just used words that mean the same thing for my own fun and because they enhance the sound and the humor of the poem :-)
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I understand now, thanx.....you know I love what you write .)
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I'm so glad you get it now - thank you :-) Brooke
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Me too, I learn so many things in here, its just so great... .)
