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Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "As Twilight Readies Skies for Night"rispetto poetry
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Comment from mstad55
As campers we often used a mason jar of fireflies to light our path in the mid of night. Not too many of those little glow bugs seem to be around anymore. It's probably the polution or global warming. As for the Jasmine's perfume, we had a bush right outside our front door, and from sun down to sun up you could smell the blooms while humming to Seals & Crofts summer breeze. Excellent work. Mike
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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As campers we often used a mason jar of fireflies to light our path in the mid of night. Not too many of those little glow bugs seem to be around anymore. It's probably the polution or global warming. As for the Jasmine's perfume, we had a bush right outside our front door, and from sun down to sun up you could smell the blooms while humming to Seals & Crofts summer breeze. Excellent work. Mike
Comment Written 31-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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Yeah, while we still have them, there are way fewer - they used to just light up the sky. I don't know as if I've ever done any of my humming to Seals & Crofts. Perhaps I should give it a whirl :-) Thanks, Mike - results show in a half hour! Brooke
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Surely, you remember them and the song Summer Breeze? I'm sorry, Brooke you must remember Seals & Croft, they were all over the air waves in the early to mid seventies before falling off the face of the earth or at least the charts.
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I remember them, I just never hummed their stuff. :-)
Comment from laurelp
I love the descriptions you used in this poem. And the picture was wonderful, so bright an vivid in color. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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I love the descriptions you used in this poem. And the picture was wonderful, so bright an vivid in color. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Laurel, and good morning!! Brooke :-)
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Yes, I had one of those nights where I couldn't sleep. Frustrating but it can be productive.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You have created so much feeling in this form it reads so very strongly I enjoyed again very well done a great piece very well presented regards Fuller
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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You have created so much feeling in this form it reads so very strongly I enjoyed again very well done a great piece very well presented regards Fuller
Comment Written 31-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Fuller. I appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from Amicus
Hey friend,
are you-el kidding?
This ole foo-el's
been known
to droo-el
in his gru-el
but he has never
ever said
fu-el! :>)
In spite of differing pronunciations, I still admire this poem...You really capture the mood of late spring/early summer twilight here. Terrific imagery and a great flow make it work beautifu-elly.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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Hey friend,
are you-el kidding?
This ole foo-el's
been known
to droo-el
in his gru-el
but he has never
ever said
fu-el! :>)
In spite of differing pronunciations, I still admire this poem...You really capture the mood of late spring/early summer twilight here. Terrific imagery and a great flow make it work beautifu-elly.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2010
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Hey, my rhyming and funny friend - I can't account for your strange speech patterns!! LOL It's not a word where there are two hard, distinct syllables - it's like when people say fire as two syllables. Only in this case, two syllables is actually the preferred form. :-) I just got to beautifu-elly. Funny. My children and I have a sarcastic streak when we have fun teasing each other - you would get along well in my family :-) Brooke
Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
What a lovely work! The words, the scene, the artwork--all seem to fit together superbly to create this work. I like the form as well. It suits your content. Enjoyed. elaine
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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adewpearl,
What a lovely work! The words, the scene, the artwork--all seem to fit together superbly to create this work. I like the form as well. It suits your content. Enjoyed. elaine
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Elaine, for your most generous review. I so appreciate your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
Comment from Jarlsbane
Nicely done Brooke!! I really like this one, it speaks with such easy tones and tells a simple and beautiful story. Grand writing as always! -Michael
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Nicely done Brooke!! I really like this one, it speaks with such easy tones and tells a simple and beautiful story. Grand writing as always! -Michael
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Michael - I'm always pleased when you like one :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Ah, the romance of jasmine essence and how well you describe a pleasant twilight. We have a flowering bush which I know by the name of "moon flower", which opens up in the evening.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Dear Brooke,
Ah, the romance of jasmine essence and how well you describe a pleasant twilight. We have a flowering bush which I know by the name of "moon flower", which opens up in the evening.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 30-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Thanks, Reg, yes, I encountered that flower when googling night blooming flowers :-) Brooke
Comment from wholechild
A beautiful poem that acknowledges the beauty of nature in the evening. Truly all the words are well chosen, but I think my favorite is the line about children searching for jelly jars. The accompanying picture is a lovely match.
Shannon
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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A beautiful poem that acknowledges the beauty of nature in the evening. Truly all the words are well chosen, but I think my favorite is the line about children searching for jelly jars. The accompanying picture is a lovely match.
Shannon
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Shannon, for your wonderful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from HAWordsmith
I really loved the imagery of this rispetto. There is one major problem with it though... there just were not enough stanzas. LOL This was such a pleasure to read in form and format, rhyme and rhythm. I loved how you worded it from the fireflies fueling up to kids searching for the jelly jars, and the smattering of assonance and alliteration just added to the whole beautiful effect. Thank you so much for this posting. I can smell the jasmine. :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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I really loved the imagery of this rispetto. There is one major problem with it though... there just were not enough stanzas. LOL This was such a pleasure to read in form and format, rhyme and rhythm. I loved how you worded it from the fireflies fueling up to kids searching for the jelly jars, and the smattering of assonance and alliteration just added to the whole beautiful effect. Thank you so much for this posting. I can smell the jasmine. :)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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You are a total sweetheart - thank you so much, dear friend :-) I'm so pleased this appealed to you!! Brooke
Comment from sara-beth
This is written so prettily, I felt like I was there! I love the part about jasmine blooming, and the scent of its perfume. Very beautiful!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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This is written so prettily, I felt like I was there! I love the part about jasmine blooming, and the scent of its perfume. Very beautiful!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Sara-beth - it is great to hear from you :-) Brooke
