Comment from Connie P

Excellent

Well written with lots of interesting detail, a good flow and well thought-out terminology and detail. I found no obvious errors or issues.
Connie

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010

Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from Donna Thompson

Excellent

What a tiring trek you must have had with all this waking up at 4 am and staying active the entire day and night... I am exhausted just thinking about it... Well done with description and flow of one thought to the next. great job

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010

As long as you didn't fall a sleep reading it. LOL I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Another interesting chapter for your book, Mike. Here's a few things I found you might wanna look at...

when one of the(??) yelled, "Hey assholes,

It(I??) was told to relax

dusted myself and watched continue (continued to watch??)

It(I??) was up the next morning,

It is(was) here that we got the first glimpse of how our treatment will(would) be by the backcountry staff.

iridescent green body and ruby thought(throat)

Can I sneak to your camp also.(?)

and t(extra t) the same time a humbling one

Indy :>)

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010

i not only looked at them, I corrected them as well. I thank you very much for the recommended changes, the compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from nora arjuna

Good

hi mike, you sure have lots of experience to share and seemed to remember every details.

check some notes:

We were walking by the ranger's camp at tent city when one of the [ ] yelled, - something missing there

None of us replied. - should be put in a new para

I was touched [at] the fact I had plenty - by

"Oh shit!" look on their [face], - faces

I got up, dusted myself [and watched continue] while it seemingly chased - check the construction

I either had a fever or a migraine [headache] - no need headache i think

While the backpacking MIGHT be up and down affair that WAS tough, the scenic vistas WERE beyond compare. - you shifted to present tense here

It WAS here that we got the first glimpse of how our treatment WOULD be by the backcountry staff.

They laughed[.] "Hey, we got us a rattlesnake

hope those help.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010

Thank you very much for reviewing this, I miss not talking to you for the longest of whiles and I am glad that you caught one of the chapters. I have made the corrections that you mentioned and thank you for them, as well the reviews. Doing this book hasn't had one boring or challanging chapter for me to write and I am amazed at the considerations. This is only half of the adventure and will post the other half. I got mired in research as the only map of the camp is a low resolution one and the maps are in pages so I can't see the entire trail system. The strange thing is the adventure doesn't stop and I want to provide it for the reader in total, as it is the most memerable experience in my life. Again, thanks. With love, Mike

reply by nora arjuna on 28-Mar-2010

you're welcome, mike. i'm editing my book at the moment and haven't been here just as much.