Behold the Penguin
a fanciful quatrain with a message107 total reviews
Comment from amel
Yes Brooke, a penguin is always a pleasure to know
Excellent in descriptive content.
Lovely flow, and a very helpful notes
You crafted these words nicely
'then watch him swim, a splendid sight.' (this is my favorite line because I wonder how he swim )
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Yes Brooke, a penguin is always a pleasure to know
Excellent in descriptive content.
Lovely flow, and a very helpful notes
You crafted these words nicely
'then watch him swim, a splendid sight.' (this is my favorite line because I wonder how he swim )
Comment Written 03-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Amel, for your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
Tell me if this is the message or if it's a trick question with multiple answers. I get; even if you are a flightless bird, you can still look good swimming in a tuxedo. Do I get extra points?? Nice one. You probably know I'm a penquins fan, and I don't even like hockey. Mike
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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Tell me if this is the message or if it's a trick question with multiple answers. I get; even if you are a flightless bird, you can still look good swimming in a tuxedo. Do I get extra points?? Nice one. You probably know I'm a penquins fan, and I don't even like hockey. Mike
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2010
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You do, you get bonus points, and a free life-time pass to Shoeworld :-) Thanks, Mike. Brooke :-)
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Great! Thanks for that. Now I'll be singing, New Shoes New Shoes I'm going to get New Shoes. Mike
Comment from jeslaf
I have sat in that same spot and watched these guys (as a child, and then again as adult with my own chidren)--and right you are! I love your 'tobagganing'--super strong verb. :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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I have sat in that same spot and watched these guys (as a child, and then again as adult with my own chidren)--and right you are! I love your 'tobagganing'--super strong verb. :)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Thanks so much, Jes - I am still laughing at the thought of you rubbing Buddha bellies in free trade coffee shops :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
Behold the human, stumbling
in an alley full of needles,
wheedling an existence
from the ground.
Behold the human, stalking
through the sunbeams on the beach,
littering disgust
with solid frowns.
Mike
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Behold the human, stumbling
in an alley full of needles,
wheedling an existence
from the ground.
Behold the human, stalking
through the sunbeams on the beach,
littering disgust
with solid frowns.
Mike
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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well, now, that is not funny, Mike - that is downright sad. :-) Brooke
Comment from F Oktoprimasakti
Yeah, another enjoyable, but full of insight poem. To me this poem reminds me that each one of us is special. We have our own unique gifts and talents...who said that we have to be smart, or beautiful, or wrinkless:)? Thanks, Brooke:)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Yeah, another enjoyable, but full of insight poem. To me this poem reminds me that each one of us is special. We have our own unique gifts and talents...who said that we have to be smart, or beautiful, or wrinkless:)? Thanks, Brooke:)
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Fransiska, for your insightful review : -) Brooke
Comment from flygirl254
I love your poem! I have always been taken with doing exactly what you said - watching the penguins. They have a small enclosure at the zoo in Columbus, so it's not as easy to watch them. But back in Chicago they had a wonderful area where I would do as you said and sit for hours just watching penguins and drawing sketches of them. They are a lot of fun, and they are another creature that reminds me of God. As you say, "who says each bird must be in flight?" The ostrich and emu interest me in the same way.
I like your rhyme in this quatrain. It would have taken me quite a while to come up with waddles/toddles.
Great work on your poem, and that's a very cute picture, too! I'm glad I decided to try some reviewing tonight! This is a bad time of year for me, so you'll hear from me sporadically. I have had a type of rheumatoid arthritis along with the regular old arthritis, and these weather shifts and rainy days swell up my hands and make it nearly impossible to type someimtes. But here it is, 3 a.m., and for the first time in two days I can get my fingers to work! I'm so glad I did, if for no other reason than to see the penguins!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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I love your poem! I have always been taken with doing exactly what you said - watching the penguins. They have a small enclosure at the zoo in Columbus, so it's not as easy to watch them. But back in Chicago they had a wonderful area where I would do as you said and sit for hours just watching penguins and drawing sketches of them. They are a lot of fun, and they are another creature that reminds me of God. As you say, "who says each bird must be in flight?" The ostrich and emu interest me in the same way.
I like your rhyme in this quatrain. It would have taken me quite a while to come up with waddles/toddles.
Great work on your poem, and that's a very cute picture, too! I'm glad I decided to try some reviewing tonight! This is a bad time of year for me, so you'll hear from me sporadically. I have had a type of rheumatoid arthritis along with the regular old arthritis, and these weather shifts and rainy days swell up my hands and make it nearly impossible to type someimtes. But here it is, 3 a.m., and for the first time in two days I can get my fingers to work! I'm so glad I did, if for no other reason than to see the penguins!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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My stepmother's daughter had rheumatoid arthritis - I understand. I'm glad the fingers are working and thank you for a lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from chelabella
The penguins are amusing animals and this is an amusing poem that made me grin. The artwork you chose was quite fitting. I love that you use the word tobogganing.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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The penguins are amusing animals and this is an amusing poem that made me grin. The artwork you chose was quite fitting. I love that you use the word tobogganing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Chelabella. Glad you like penguins too :-) Brooke
Comment from Joyce L.
Those black and white creatures are a pleasure to watch. They waddle and walk and seem to struggle with their steps. I am sure they know exactely what they are doing though. Cute poem and a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Those black and white creatures are a pleasure to watch. They waddle and walk and seem to struggle with their steps. I am sure they know exactely what they are doing though. Cute poem and a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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So glad you love penguins too, Joyce - thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from L.lora
Simply delicious, and in
so few words you've painted
vivid images and put a
smile on my face. This was
definitely a most enjoyable
read. no nits or spags. Lora
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Simply delicious, and in
so few words you've painted
vivid images and put a
smile on my face. This was
definitely a most enjoyable
read. no nits or spags. Lora
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Lora. Smiles were hoped for, so I'm thrilled :-) Brooke
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Well I'm definitely beeming...this was awesome. L
Comment from SteveG1960
You've done a great job here portraying these clowns of the ice and their wonderful antics. I laughed as I read this because they are my favorite thing to watch when I go to the zoos as well. Thanks for a fun bit of whimsy!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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You've done a great job here portraying these clowns of the ice and their wonderful antics. I laughed as I read this because they are my favorite thing to watch when I go to the zoos as well. Thanks for a fun bit of whimsy!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2010
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Thanks so much, Steve - so glad you enjoyed the whimsy :-) Brooke
