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Comment from --Turtle.
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And I read this one, too, which I found very sweet. The style of the poem is a mouthful to say aloud but if I read it slowly each image manifests (for me with little whispy clouds) The underlying concept I came away with was the image of the world falling apart, and love still giving a person the strength and joy to keep on keeping on.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Turtle - you're making my evening, cold as it is :-) Brooke
Comment from DeboraDyess
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Now that'd be a tall order! But it is a beautiful sentiment. We should find hope in people, in those God gives us to love and care for, to be loved and cared for by. Well written agian (as if I expect anything different from great!) D

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Deb. Nobody really expects life to measure up to hyperbole :-) Brooke
Comment from SamanthaD.
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Oh, Brooke, this is simply beautiful. I think the rehyming is exceptional and the words you chose were touching and deep. The art you chose is also wonderful for your poem. I love it! Ssamantha

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Samantha. I truly appreciate your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
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Dear Brook,
I love the way you stack up all the negatives to lead to your irresistibly positive attitude on life. What price Don Juan now?
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
    Thanks, Reg - for the review and the smile :-) Brooke
Comment from Kellytr
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Brooke, A very beautiful and superbly crafted tribute to a loved one, with a feel of old-world romance and tenderness about it. Lovely! Kelly

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Kelly. I'm so glad you liked the tone of this piece :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
    Thanks, Kelly - glad you enjoyed the tone of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
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Superb iambic pentameter; I am glad you chose to write it in ten syllables instead of eleven, because I can never figure out how to get iambic meter out of a line with an odd number of syllables. Excellent execution of the rhyme scheme as well. Good nature imagery and excellent juxtaposition of picture and poem.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Alvin - glad you like the structure of this poem :-) Brooke
reply by AlvinTEthington on 26-Mar-2010
    You are welcome.
Comment from mtngalofnc
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Hi Brooke,

This poem could be used in religious direction. Could this be God leading through those trials? Or is it simply the feelings of human love?
Nice poem with a good rhyme and flow. Thank you for sharing this thought provoking write.

Becky

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Becky, I deliberately left this open to interpretation - glad you recognized that :-) Brooke
Comment from F Oktoprimasakti
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Beautiful! I like the imagination and your closing statement. I wonder whose smile that is... I always enjoy your poems, too bad I only have two six stars to give each month:).

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Fransiska. You are most generous :-) Brooke
Comment from Lady & Louis
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I can't give you any more sixes for the month and then you go and post this - ! Augh!

Brooke, this is just beautiful. It is SO romantic and speaks of such love. Need I say Himself thoroughly approves?

Louise xxxx

PS nice to see 'doldrums' used in its specific context for a change!

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
    Thank you, Louise - you've just lit up the morning, and the sun is not even up yet :-) And when Himself approves, well, then my entire day is made!! Brooke
reply by Lady & Louis on 26-Mar-2010
    Our pleasure! :D
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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This is one of the most wonderful thoughts imaginable; "I still will find the spark within your smile to light my path and guide me through each trial." I really like that idea.


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2010

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
    Thanks so much, Barbara - so glad you enjoyed this :-) Brooke