Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

This little guy is truly a dreamer. He never used his ticket, buried his talents. This poem speaks of many people, Brooke. Its words are beautiful and the rhyme and flow good as always. I thoroughly enjoyed the poem.
Well penned. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thank you, Jada. I'm learning that many people feel such regrets. They need to join you on some safaris :-) Brooke

Comment from Connie C

Excellent

Such a wonderful poem that addresses how we often have dreams or intentions of things that we plan to do, but we never quite do them. At least, that's how I interpret this. Very nice! Connie C

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thanks so much, Connie. I appreciate your most insightful comments. Brooke

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Brooke,

This is an excellent poem about old people reflecting on the missed opportunities of their lives. I enjoyed reading it and have one comment:

"and watch the white whales blow." If you took the word "white" out, your rhythm scheme would be better.

Dave

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

I'd have to replace white with something or I would not have the correct number of beats in that line. Thanks, Dave :-) Brooke

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello adewpearl, Brooke,

A thought-provoking poem. Sometimes one has to leave the coffee shop and put themselves out there.

This poem reads and flows well and I have no suggestion for improvement.

I enjoyed reading this poem. Regards, LateBloomer

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thanks so much, LateBloomer. I appreciate your kind comments. Brooke :-)

Comment from Realist101

Excellent

Hi Brooke! This poem makes me wish I had tried more, and done more. But I guess there is only so much one can really do. But this is very easy and enjoyable to read, flowing and rhyming perfectly! Best of luck in this contest too!! :) Susan...UPDATE!!! HI there!! I have to reclick the stars, and say CONGRATULATIONS my friend, this is a wonderful poem!!! Luv ya!!! ") ") Susan

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thank you, Susan. You're right, we can't do every thing - a choice to take one path means another was not taken, and we make those choices all the time. Brooke

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

adewpearl,

The flow was good. The theme was excellent! Your descriptive words were very good for explaining your ideas and your feelings. They were very understandable and comprehensible.

I saw no SPAG and no typos. It was very clean.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thank you, Oatmeal. I truly appreciate your thoughtful review. Brooke

Comment from Words Talk

Exceptional

I really like this poem. I like the flow of rhythm and I like the subject. I especially like the title! When you read the title, you find yourself anticipating many ideas in your head and you are delighted to see it will be about the traveling the oceans. Wonderful!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thank you so much, Words Talk, for this wonderfully generous review :-) I truly appreciate your kind and encouraging comments :-) Brooke

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

Four perfectly rhymed quatrains with a gently rocking meter that reminds me of being at sea. This is a totally delightful poem, though a bit sad in the end. The lesson is unmistakable... We can miss out on so much if we fail to actually get up and go! I want to use my tickets and not miss the boat. : ) Thanks for this eloquent reminder.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thank you, MissMerri, and good morning :-) I'm pleased the meaning came through for you. Brooke

Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea

Excellent

And I'm out of sixes! This is breathtakingly lovely, Brooke. Perhaps the best one ever from you. I love it- the message is spot on and your choice of "lyrics" (for it's a song) are perfection.

Penny

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thanks so much, Penny. I truly appreciate your wish for a six :-) Brooke

Comment from fionageorge

Excellent

Hi Brooke, this is a lovely poem, and conjures up well the various plans - unfortunately, never achieved. Great rhythm and rhyme. It flows freely.
Warmest regards,
Marijke

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010

Thank you, Marijke. I appreciate your thoughtful comments, as always :-) Brooke