Dear Lexi
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Why Not Be Legal?""Let the little children come unto me." ~ Jesus
25 total reviews
Comment from findingmyroom
Excellent, on-the-level discussion of a titillating but tough topic. Kids have such a limited view on things but really get it when presented with a much wider array of facets in an open forum. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2010
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Excellent, on-the-level discussion of a titillating but tough topic. Kids have such a limited view on things but really get it when presented with a much wider array of facets in an open forum. Great job.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2010
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thanks, findingmyroom. love, jan
Comment from allinmyhead
I loved the choice of format for this piece. Writing it as a letter to a beloved grandchild was a unique slant for a persuasive piece of writing.
The point made on 'job security' argument was the most non-preachy approach I have ever come across. Very clever. Not quite playing Devil's Advocate, but certainly enough to give young minds food for thought without stuffing a point of view down their throats.
The last bit where personal responsibility was discussed was excellent. By the time that point was reached, you would have had the full attention of your audience, rather than their being tuned out from a talk they would have perceived as a lecture.
Very interesting piece. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2010
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I loved the choice of format for this piece. Writing it as a letter to a beloved grandchild was a unique slant for a persuasive piece of writing.
The point made on 'job security' argument was the most non-preachy approach I have ever come across. Very clever. Not quite playing Devil's Advocate, but certainly enough to give young minds food for thought without stuffing a point of view down their throats.
The last bit where personal responsibility was discussed was excellent. By the time that point was reached, you would have had the full attention of your audience, rather than their being tuned out from a talk they would have perceived as a lecture.
Very interesting piece. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2010
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thanks, allinmyhead. and a non-preachy way of letting my granddaughter know how I feel, too. love, jan
Comment from Ann Smith
I like your approach to talking to middle school students. By taking the side of being legal and coming through the back door they got it. Sometimes if you try to say black is black and white is white, they will always say it is grey. I like your reason of more jobs. Especially the police and hospital people. I like the letter format. Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2010
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I like your approach to talking to middle school students. By taking the side of being legal and coming through the back door they got it. Sometimes if you try to say black is black and white is white, they will always say it is grey. I like your reason of more jobs. Especially the police and hospital people. I like the letter format. Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2010
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thanks, Ann. I appreciate your support. love, jan
Comment from warbler
I enjoyed your story. I liked the setting in a school and using the assignment as a platform for your views. The letter is a nice reason for writing the story. Very creative.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2010
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I enjoyed your story. I liked the setting in a school and using the assignment as a platform for your views. The letter is a nice reason for writing the story. Very creative.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2010
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have to go with what you know, warbler. thanks. love, jan
Comment from Sally Carter
A most interesting "take" on the challenge, and what clever psychology to present an argument from the unexpected angle and get kids to work things out for themselves!
I enjoyed your account very much, and what a wonderful gift to give a child when she is old enough to ask these questions too.
Good luck in the voting.
Sally
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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A most interesting "take" on the challenge, and what clever psychology to present an argument from the unexpected angle and get kids to work things out for themselves!
I enjoyed your account very much, and what a wonderful gift to give a child when she is old enough to ask these questions too.
Good luck in the voting.
Sally
Comment Written 16-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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thanks, Sally. I always believed kids should learn from the inductive style of reasoning. love, jan
Comment from FredCollingwood
Great debate. Good thing they weren't teenagers. No one can win an argument against them.
My reasons alcohol should always be legal are: job security; population control; help people make new friends; continue the need for building medical facilities; ...but, but, but, Mrs. Holland Lexi, those kids wouldn't even let me finish my list after they promised they would. > You have a colon, commas, semicolons, an ellipses, and period in this sentence. Something needs to be done with it.
I could tell this hit home() so I chose not to drive it home any harder. > add comma
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Great debate. Good thing they weren't teenagers. No one can win an argument against them.
My reasons alcohol should always be legal are: job security; population control; help people make new friends; continue the need for building medical facilities; ...but, but, but, Mrs. Holland Lexi, those kids wouldn't even let me finish my list after they promised they would. > You have a colon, commas, semicolons, an ellipses, and period in this sentence. Something needs to be done with it.
I could tell this hit home() so I chose not to drive it home any harder. > add comma
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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thanks, Fred. when my daughter was a teenager, I did not even try to argue the pros and cons, just told her the rules but also told her if for any reason she broke them and needed me to come get her to call, I would still love her; thanks, Fred
Comment from Rama Rao
I liked the unusual way you presented you views to middle school students and made them understand what they should realise.
Normally discussions of this nature start with platitudes and bring negative reactions in children. It then becomes difficult to get your message across to them.
Great Job.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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I liked the unusual way you presented you views to middle school students and made them understand what they should realise.
Normally discussions of this nature start with platitudes and bring negative reactions in children. It then becomes difficult to get your message across to them.
Great Job.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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It's called almost 40 years of experience, LOL! thanks, Ramarao. love, jan
Comment from ulster3
Hello Jan.
What an excellent and original write. Such a clever way to handle the question about making alcohol legal. Nicely and subtly brought out detriments to over-imbibing. This should do very well in the contest.
Rebecca
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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Hello Jan.
What an excellent and original write. Such a clever way to handle the question about making alcohol legal. Nicely and subtly brought out detriments to over-imbibing. This should do very well in the contest.
Rebecca
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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I love the inductive method of reasoning for kids. thanks for your input. love, jan
Comment from Cairn Destop
I would tend to believe you are more of the "prefer you didn't drink" group. Liked how those kids got behind the idea, though I do admit the story's premise a bit hard to accept. As written, it sounded like alcohol was illegal. Of course, considering the group, perhaps the real issue was the age restrictions. No SPAG noted while reading.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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I would tend to believe you are more of the "prefer you didn't drink" group. Liked how those kids got behind the idea, though I do admit the story's premise a bit hard to accept. As written, it sounded like alcohol was illegal. Of course, considering the group, perhaps the real issue was the age restrictions. No SPAG noted while reading.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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I am definitely more of the prefer you didn't drink group. thanks for your input. love, jan
Comment from Adri7enne
Oh, wow! What a teacher you must be! This is so wise, delivered in such a smart, loving way. How could any youngster not be positively influenced by the tone of the wonderful piece. You should be invited to give a lecture on the subject to all the schools in the area- as a starter.
I couldn't find fault in the reasoning, the composition, the writing of this post. And no spags, besides. Congratulations on a great piece. Loved it.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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Oh, wow! What a teacher you must be! This is so wise, delivered in such a smart, loving way. How could any youngster not be positively influenced by the tone of the wonderful piece. You should be invited to give a lecture on the subject to all the schools in the area- as a starter.
I couldn't find fault in the reasoning, the composition, the writing of this post. And no spags, besides. Congratulations on a great piece. Loved it.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2010
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thanks, again, for your wonderful review. love, jan
