Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Hello Mike! I was on vacation and I think I must have missed some chapters, so I'll try to get to them when I get a chance. This is an enjoyable chapter.
Indy :>)

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2010

I was wondering about your disappearance. It's nice to have you back. That you time, you know me. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Glad to see you too. Mike (K2 would be redundant)

Comment from Perp Ihebom

Excellent

This is an interesting story about school life experiences. You told the stories well, but there are some grammatical errors that need to be fixed, especially in the third stanza from bottom. cheers

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010

I'll take a look. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

This is good discriptive writing,
well presented, making it easy to
follow and understand. It's a treat
to review such well written work...


and found out I didn't swap out my 7 inch sheath knife
and found I hadn't swapped out my .....

Margaret.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010

I really appreciate your review and the compliments, which I thank you very much for. I also made the recomended change. Have a good weekend! Mike

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

the night school principle was kicking me out - principal
heavier then I was - than
opened my role book - roll
Mike, you relate your experiences in good, clear detail and also make it clear how you reacted emotionally to various experiences - there are so many things that happen in school that make little logical sense but are part of the bureaucracy, and you explain that well, too. Brooke

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010

Thank you very much for the corrections, compliments and this review. In one sense, I am a very zero tolerance person for many things, yet one has to apply it with due faith and common sense. Often it ends up being used against a student that they want to get rid off. While zero tolerance is used by the schools, it is not used by the Juvenile Justice agency to seperate out the bad kids with the good. There policy is one of, "Any Tolerance." That baby lead me to draw a line in the sand with the kids that threaten me. At that point, the interfering police totally freaked and left me alone and I was prepared to take out a kid or two. Luckily, they got the message and left me alone. It was great that word got out not to mess with me, because I was crazy! Well it worked.

While that aspect isn't going to be in this book, I do hope to get across that it was a heavy, yet benevolent hand that guided me into being a much better person.

Have a great week ahead, Mike

Comment from RazberryBullet

Excellent

Interesting character in the protagonist-- If I was going to use a weapon, I would have put a pencil in a fire extinguisher hose..."Yep, you got the academic smart-ass." LOL!!!

Once my winding subsided>Once I got my breath back?

Good job!

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010

LOL. I did mention that jem to the principal and he thanked me for keeping my ideas to myself. I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas

Excellent

A true classical style is presented here. It reminded me of Jane Eyrye, though story wise it is totally different. The narration was beyond praise and truly admirable. The ending was prompt and suitable.

Aspects of my life outside of school was just a powerful in experience and practice, what I more or less considered the tip of the iceberg. [ Your sentences carry huge meanings and support the theme very well]

A good one to read

K

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010

Wow! I really appreciate the review and thank you for it and the compliments. One problem that I encounter is the parallel aspects of my life which overlap, yet are just as important to the central theme. The best analogy that I can use is the shingles on a roof. This is more like one made with wooden shakes, which come in all different thicknesses and widths. You still put them side to side, but there is a bit of artistry and judgement to really make it look will. I especially enjoy the comment, about the last sentance as it is the tie in to the next chapter that takes a small step back into time. Again, many thanks and have a great weekend, Mike