Octograms
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Comment from DecrepitOldBag
And what excellent pondering it is too, Brooke. Professor Rose sounds like a great teacher.
This octogram works just beautifully with this message. I like the repetition and the questions the piece asks. As always, faultless, thoughtful writing.
Hugs
Kat
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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And what excellent pondering it is too, Brooke. Professor Rose sounds like a great teacher.
This octogram works just beautifully with this message. I like the repetition and the questions the piece asks. As always, faultless, thoughtful writing.
Hugs
Kat
Comment Written 12-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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He was fantastic - thanks so much, Kat :-) Brooke
Comment from Soulester
Hello, Brooke! It's Friday, and I am just getting to your March 9th posting, "One Bridge to Cross". I think of your passionate poems about social issues as Brooke's Tuesdays Poems, as you often post them on Tuesdays or Wednesdays after volunteering at the shelter. I think Sally Yocum was really on to something good when she came up with the Octogram, and you embellished it with your existential questions. I think the fact that you did not start even one of them with the word "why" makes your point more serious and solvable than just a "Why, why, why?!" lament. Very, very interesting! Mary
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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Hello, Brooke! It's Friday, and I am just getting to your March 9th posting, "One Bridge to Cross". I think of your passionate poems about social issues as Brooke's Tuesdays Poems, as you often post them on Tuesdays or Wednesdays after volunteering at the shelter. I think Sally Yocum was really on to something good when she came up with the Octogram, and you embellished it with your existential questions. I think the fact that you did not start even one of them with the word "why" makes your point more serious and solvable than just a "Why, why, why?!" lament. Very, very interesting! Mary
Comment Written 12-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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Mary, I love her octogram form - what a genius Sally is :-) I so appreciate your most generous rating and your thoughtful comments! Brooke :-)
Comment from wholechild
This poem is so well done. The question that is raises seems so much a part of our lives. I like that you ask the question, but leave us to ponder the answer. Is it fear or insecurity or an unwillingness to step outside our small comfort zone? I like that you repeat the line, "one bridge to cross" after each example. Thank you for asking the question.
Shannon
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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This poem is so well done. The question that is raises seems so much a part of our lives. I like that you ask the question, but leave us to ponder the answer. Is it fear or insecurity or an unwillingness to step outside our small comfort zone? I like that you repeat the line, "one bridge to cross" after each example. Thank you for asking the question.
Shannon
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Shannon, for your most thoughtful response to this poem. Brooke
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Brooke:
One can only imagine what mankind could have
really accomplished if fear had not created
wars for trumped up reasons and the different
cultures had actually worked together. Great
piece. love, jan
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Brooke:
One can only imagine what mankind could have
really accomplished if fear had not created
wars for trumped up reasons and the different
cultures had actually worked together. Great
piece. love, jan
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
Comment from minopavlic
I've always found a certain sense of appreciation within anything you've written, as it seems to have its own spark of electricity entwined within a powerful message.
My own writing, I've decided to put it all together now in one collective novel,and have someone from Toronto who will make it into a marketable package.
Take care and keep writing
No_obstacle
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I've always found a certain sense of appreciation within anything you've written, as it seems to have its own spark of electricity entwined within a powerful message.
My own writing, I've decided to put it all together now in one collective novel,and have someone from Toronto who will make it into a marketable package.
Take care and keep writing
No_obstacle
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You are so write in this piece and your notes that you shared below I think if we all took one step back and look into these things we would realize that threes nothing to be frightened of if something is just a little different well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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You are so write in this piece and your notes that you shared below I think if we all took one step back and look into these things we would realize that threes nothing to be frightened of if something is just a little different well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Fuller - I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from RebelRose
Very well written with a good rhyming scheme and rhythm.
Good structure and smooth flow of lines. You have introduced some very profound thoughts into these lines.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Very well written with a good rhyming scheme and rhythm.
Good structure and smooth flow of lines. You have introduced some very profound thoughts into these lines.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Rose. I always appreciate hearing from you. Brooke :-)
Comment from Oatmeal
Adewpearl,
Your thoughts are well described. Well chosen words are expressive. Your arrangement here is very creative. The theme flowed well all through your poem.
It is completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Adewpearl,
Your thoughts are well described. Well chosen words are expressive. Your arrangement here is very creative. The theme flowed well all through your poem.
It is completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Thanks so much, Oatmeal, for your positive review :-) Brooke
Comment from flyboy130
Ths is a very sweet poem you wrote. Nothing is wrong with this poem you wrote. I really do not have a favorite line bute this poem is fantastic.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Ths is a very sweet poem you wrote. Nothing is wrong with this poem you wrote. I really do not have a favorite line bute this poem is fantastic.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Thank you, James - this poem has lots of meaning for me. Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from closetpoetjester
Great job adewpearl! I love this style of poem and it has a real chant about it. Construction excellent and rhyme and meter perfect as we would expect from our no. 1 gal! You adapt beautifully to any style...possibly the sign of a GREAT POET! Loved the resounding message "one bride to cross"
Cheers closetpoetjester
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Great job adewpearl! I love this style of poem and it has a real chant about it. Construction excellent and rhyme and meter perfect as we would expect from our no. 1 gal! You adapt beautifully to any style...possibly the sign of a GREAT POET! Loved the resounding message "one bride to cross"
Cheers closetpoetjester
Comment Written 11-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2010
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Thank you, my friend - I love playing with various styles - otherwise I'd bore myself silly :-) Brooke
