rispettos
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The Day I Die"rispetto poetry
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Comment from --Turtle.
I read through this poem,
I thought this was a strong thought. A subtle, the door closes, the door opens, the dust settles and the sun rises. With the second thought contrasting and accentuating... the door opens the door closes.
The authors note puts a cool light on the poem too, uncovering things one wouldn't be able to read into when reading the poem, but reshaping it afterwards.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2010
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I read through this poem,
I thought this was a strong thought. A subtle, the door closes, the door opens, the dust settles and the sun rises. With the second thought contrasting and accentuating... the door opens the door closes.
The authors note puts a cool light on the poem too, uncovering things one wouldn't be able to read into when reading the poem, but reshaping it afterwards.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Turtle, for your gracious comments :-) Brooke
Comment from perunest
Your wisdom and beautiful take on the
endless cycle of life is wonderfully
stated in this poem. Your family surely is
an example of how the world goes on and we
all are swept along. I suppose that's a good
plan, after all. I love this poem! Carolyn
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2010
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Your wisdom and beautiful take on the
endless cycle of life is wonderfully
stated in this poem. Your family surely is
an example of how the world goes on and we
all are swept along. I suppose that's a good
plan, after all. I love this poem! Carolyn
Comment Written 09-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Carolyn. I appreciate your most gracious and generous review and comments, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
This is a lovely work. It has such a beautiful message wrapped in your well-chosen words. I enjoyed every one of those words. elaine
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2010
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adewpearl,
This is a lovely work. It has such a beautiful message wrapped in your well-chosen words. I enjoyed every one of those words. elaine
Comment Written 09-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Elaine. I appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem. Brooke :-)
Comment from RavenShrift
What an amazing poem about the cycle of life. I am forced to dole out a six. Having lost my mother at age 23 (a far cry from age 8), I can appreciate your observation that life continues with its joys and sorrows as people and things come and go in the world. I especially liked this line: and so the world will mark my death. The day's births or new beginnings stand as a monument to the loss. Very well done.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2010
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What an amazing poem about the cycle of life. I am forced to dole out a six
Comment Written 09-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2010
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Losing one's parent is never easy - I lost my dad when I was in my 30's and that totally threw me for a loop. Thank you so much for your most generous review and for sharing your experiences with me. Brooke
Comment from Amicus
I like this rispetto, Brooke. The cycle of life is great material. I was reminded of how my belated sister's nephew spoke at her funeral of the special bond he felt to her because he was born on the day our mother died and grew up hearing from my sister about how she spent that evening holding and rocking him, taking comfort in his birth and the awareness that life goes on.
Your lovely rispetto jogged a lovely memory while providing a most pleasant reading experience. Thanks.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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I like this rispetto, Brooke. The cycle of life is great material. I was reminded of how my belated sister's nephew spoke at her funeral of the special bond he felt to her because he was born on the day our mother died and grew up hearing from my sister about how she spent that evening holding and rocking him, taking comfort in his birth and the awareness that life goes on.
Your lovely rispetto jogged a lovely memory while providing a most pleasant reading experience. Thanks.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Amicus, for sharing that story - I'm discovering so many of us share similar experiences. Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
the picture goes so perfectly with this one. made me smile. yeah, i know that this is supposed to be sad but it seems so peaceful. just when we think the world has stopped turning we look around and see it goes on. hardest lesson to learn, isn't it? sigh.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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brooke,
the picture goes so perfectly with this one. made me smile. yeah, i know that this is supposed to be sad but it seems so peaceful. just when we think the world has stopped turning we look around and see it goes on. hardest lesson to learn, isn't it? sigh.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Barbara. I appreciate your review, as always. I guess nobody wants to know the world will do just find without them :-) Brooke
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brooke,
i think you are right. this was one of the first things my mom taught me - the world doesn't revolve around me. when i'm gone it will go on. when tragedy has struck and i've had to duck out of life i have always been amazed at how quickly my space is taken by something or someone else. always saddened me. but nothing you can do but plunge back in and try to regroup.
love,
barbara
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I had a good friend, a man I dated briefly, who had a job of authority. He was always cutting short our time together because some emergency called him back to work. He was convinced this place could not operate without him. Then, after we stopped dating, he was felled by a debilitating disease. One day he was at work, the next he was retired. And guess what he learned, the Louisville Convention Center still operates pretty much on schedule without him!!! A humbling experience.
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very humbling experience. i have never understood the drive some people have or the way they act like they can't be replaced. i feel so bad for them when they discover the truth. it is indeed humbling.
love,
barbara
Comment from Annmuma
You are so right -- the world just keeps on turning! I like the sort of somber-hopeful feel of this poem. Life is a never-ending wheel and we all get our turn on top. Great job. If I had six, I'd spend it here. ann
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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You are so right -- the world just keeps on turning! I like the sort of somber-hopeful feel of this poem. Life is a never-ending wheel and we all get our turn on top. Great job. If I had six, I'd spend it here. ann
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Ann - your kind visits and comments today are all most appreciated - I hope to read something new by you soon, too :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
Oh, beautifully put! I love the contrasting stanzas, saying the same thing from the two opposing viewpoints. The cycle of nature, in all it's simple truth, expressed in a poem :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Oh, beautifully put! I love the contrasting stanzas, saying the same thing from the two opposing viewpoints. The cycle of nature, in all it's simple truth, expressed in a poem :-)
Mike
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Mike - aren't you most gracious? :-) Brooke
Comment from Lady & Louis
That's a cool way of looking at it, Brooke - one hears the "I die/new babe is born" contrast often enough, but to reverse it is refreshing. Makes me think of the chain of linked lives that runs through Spirit (what people often think is reincarnation).
It's funny how aabb (or in this case, ccdd) can work - or not. So often I see it and it just looks clunky, in unpracticed hands, and I cringe and hit the skip button. When a skilled poet (suchasyerself) uses it, it flows naturally and works a treat.
Ciao!
Louise :)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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That's a cool way of looking at it, Brooke - one hears the "I die/new babe is born" contrast often enough, but to reverse it is refreshing. Makes me think of the chain of linked lives that runs through Spirit (what people often think is reincarnation).
It's funny how aabb (or in this case, ccdd) can work - or not. So often I see it and it just looks clunky, in unpracticed hands, and I cringe and hit the skip button. When a skilled poet (suchasyerself) uses it, it flows naturally and works a treat.
Ciao!
Louise :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thank you so much, Louise, for your specific points and most encouraging comments :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
What beautiful thoughts, Brooke, and an exquisite poem. I think of that sometimes when we get a new baby and hear a Code Blue being paged over the hospital speakers. The world does keep turning.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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What beautiful thoughts, Brooke, and an exquisite poem. I think of that sometimes when we get a new baby and hear a Code Blue being paged over the hospital speakers. The world does keep turning.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Karyn. Oh, I can't imagine the emotional overload of your job. Brooke
