In a Faraway Place
story poem125 total reviews
Comment from F Oktoprimasakti
Hi brooke, congrats for winning the 3rd place at this competition. I've been so busy with work and ministry at church that I haven't visited FS for quite some time. Enjoyed this poem a lot!:)Can't give you 6 stars, not available yet:)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Hi brooke, congrats for winning the 3rd place at this competition. I've been so busy with work and ministry at church that I haven't visited FS for quite some time. Enjoyed this poem a lot!:)Can't give you 6 stars, not available yet:)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Fransiska - it is good to see you - work and ministry - worthy ways to be spending your time :-) Brooke
Comment from sierra scribbler
How wonderful this is; what a lovely story. Congratulations on your contest win.
In line 22, I might have written: she had nothing but bile and a cackled whine. Of course that is just a suggestion.
As always, enjoyed your work.
Thanks.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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How wonderful this is; what a lovely story. Congratulations on your contest win.
In line 22, I might have written: she had nothing but bile and a cackled whine. Of course that is just a suggestion.
As always, enjoyed your work.
Thanks.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Sierra, for your thoughtful review and your kind congratualations. Brooke :-)
Comment from RolandtheGunslinger
I just read your entry in the poem contest and I thought it was a wonderful piece of writing. It was filled with sadness and wonder. I loved the way that your poem flowed throughout never missing a beat. It was a pleasure to read your entry. I hope that I have more opportunities to read more.
Congrats on a fine poem.
Roland
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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I just read your entry in the poem contest and I thought it was a wonderful piece of writing. It was filled with sadness and wonder. I loved the way that your poem flowed throughout never missing a beat. It was a pleasure to read your entry. I hope that I have more opportunities to read more.
Congrats on a fine poem.
Roland
Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much, Roland, for this most gracious and generous review - I am so pleased you enjoyed this story :-) Brooke
Comment from fairydancer
Brooke, I think this is wonderful - so clever, beautiful use of words and phrases. Such a great story, but its the way you tell it!
You should have won!
I would have given you six stars but have none left!
Take care - Cally :)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Brooke, I think this is wonderful - so clever, beautiful use of words and phrases. Such a great story, but its the way you tell it!
You should have won!
I would have given you six stars but have none left!
Take care - Cally :)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much, Cally - I am thrilled you enjoyed my story poem that much :-) Brooke
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Brooke. Congratulations! What a sweet poem this is. If I may suggest, (and I seldom do to you) LOL...why not change this line by one word to personalize it a bit more:
"that all evil and wrong washed away from this land." (Make it "her land"
Just a suggestion of course...You should have won first place, girl....Bob
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Hi, Brooke. Congratulations! What a sweet poem this is. If I may suggest, (and I seldom do to you) LOL...why not change this line by one word to personalize it a bit more:
"that all evil and wrong washed away from this land." (Make it "her land"
Just a suggestion of course...You should have won first place, girl....Bob
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Bob - I'll look at that line. Too bad I don't decide who is on the contest committees. LOL Brooke :-)
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Amen..but after being here for over six years, I can tell you...unless you spend a lot of REAL money you won't be allowed to win much first placers..LOL...They spread the wealth around, you know? Just good business. How bad would itbe if someone as talented as you won over and over again...See? :) Bob
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Believe me, I get what you're saying. I've won one site-sponsored contest in one and a half years - no worries about my winning over and over. LOL
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Yes. I have much to discuss about this if you ever want to take the time at my personal E-mail, Brooke. It's Bobahbooe@aol.com...Bob
Comment from nora arjuna
hi brooke, congrats on your winning story in a poem. it was a sweet story, what we all want to believe - that love finally won. i've missed a lot of posts here lately. well done. :)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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hi brooke, congrats on your winning story in a poem. it was a sweet story, what we all want to believe - that love finally won. i've missed a lot of posts here lately. well done. :)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Nora, thank you. I've missed hearing from you and have missed having a book of yours to follow!! :-) Brooke
Comment from Hitcher
I had to come and read what I had missed Brooke, Congratulations friend, you did a fine job here, loved the smooth refined flow and the visuals where great, you know I love visuals and I also love witches, cruel conniving creatures that they are, ha ha. LOVE...Nothing can compare to its power, NOTHING.
Well done Friend!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I had to come and read what I had missed Brooke, Congratulations friend, you did a fine job here, loved the smooth refined flow and the visuals where great, you know I love visuals and I also love witches, cruel conniving creatures that they are, ha ha. LOVE...Nothing can compare to its power, NOTHING.
Well done Friend!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Hey, Hitch - congrats on your win - I've already reviewed it, so you know how much I enjoyed your story :-) So glad you enjoyed mine, too :-) Thanks, my friend. Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke This is such a lovely fairy tale. I love the rhyming and the sing-song flow. Strange I just noticed this on my opening page that you got third in the contest (congrats) but for some reason it didn't get placed on my messages from fans. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke This is such a lovely fairy tale. I love the rhyming and the sing-song flow. Strange I just noticed this on my opening page that you got third in the contest (congrats) but for some reason it didn't get placed on my messages from fans. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Gaye, the poem was first posted a couple months ago, so you could just have missed the notification back then. And it's just been on the opening page since this morning :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from grassroots08
adewpearl,
This is wonderfully penned. Great story telling. Cheers, and I knew you had it in you my friend. I've been away for a bit, but must return now and then. I guess I was away kissing princesses desiring beyond all hope to turn just one of them into Missy frog. LOL
Cheers always,
Don
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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adewpearl,
This is wonderfully penned. Great story telling. Cheers, and I knew you had it in you my friend. I've been away for a bit, but must return now and then. I guess I was away kissing princesses desiring beyond all hope to turn just one of them into Missy frog. LOL
Cheers always,
Don
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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So glad you enjoyed my fairy tale, Don - thanks bunches :-) Brooke
Comment from jlsavell
adewpearl, absolutely magical in its eloquent words and
vivid imagery. wonderful rhyme scheme and perfect balance.
Suh an enchanting story..jimi
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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adewpearl, absolutely magical in its eloquent words and
vivid imagery. wonderful rhyme scheme and perfect balance.
Suh an enchanting story..jimi
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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jimi, thank you so much, my fellow story teller :-) Brooke
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yes I absolutely love the challenge of telling a story in a poem..Although it comes easy for me and you, it is obviously difficult and anybody who can accomplish such is truly a vivid writer..Hitcher is just one of those too
