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Ageless Apparition

the reaper

61 total reviews 
Comment from Agrona
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A clear reminder that we don't live forever. I guess I'll take your advise and slow down as well. lol There is so much yet to do, to see, to publish. I like the flow of your poem and your word choices.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
    Thank U. Actually U might be safe. He's scared of dragons.
reply by Agrona on 28-Feb-2010
    LOL Great, I'll make sure I'm always surrounded by dragons then. :D
Comment from bard owl
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Nothing stops cold a case of the "hurries" so quickly and with such finality as death. Your poem is a wakeup call to those whose life is so hurried. Stop and smell the roses, for it is death's lot to come for us. Excellently thoughtful. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
    Ooh, do I love ur first sentence. Yep, kinda doesn't matter where U were with that... death pretty much puts a damper on it.
Comment from indelibleink
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victortouche-

Side note first: Your author's note made me laugh out loud! Great (and appropriate) comment!

I must say: Such a short poem carried quite a message, and the artwork was absolutely perfect for your piece.

I think I'll take it easy myself, today!

Great job....

Indelible

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
    Thank U. Hey, it's all "in deli blink".
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
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This poem talks about obscurity of things we don't know, tone is dark and serious, words are awesome and the supernatural style is very cleverly chosen.
The ageless apparition waits

and with his scythe he smiles.

'Tis just his lot [ What a grand poetic style and lines]

Loved it all the way

K

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
    Ah Kashif, U are kind to me. I still need to get to more of ur works. Don't go anywhere. LOL
reply by Kashif Ali Abbas on 28-Feb-2010
    You are welcome.
    Lolz, and I aint going:)

    best wishes

    K
Comment from Sharesy
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This lovely creepy poem could be interpreted in so many ways.

to reap from us

the ones with endless hurry : From this, I can see the reaper collecting the lives of speeders who die in traffic accidents, or 'type A' personalities that race so fast through life that they die of stress related diseases.

This was well written, Victor. I liked it very much. The verse tied in nicely with the cover art.



 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
    Thank U my dear. This is one type "A" that's trying to counter his genetics.
reply by Sharesy on 28-Feb-2010
    Aren't we all! lol.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
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Hi Victor:}
wow! you certainly nailed one reason for early reaping. Unfortunately at my age it is already too late to slow down. Any slower and I won't need reaping. Lol.

Someone else already reaped all my extra stars.

Great visual imagery. Very clever words.Thank you for sharing.

Roger

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
    Now that was quite humorous my dear. I thank U for the review before U expire. LOL
Comment from Soulester
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I guess I'm pretty safe then, if he's after those in constant hurry. LOL The Reaper's grim smile is not one I am in a hurry to see. Your poem makes a good point about slowing down in life, Victor. I enjoyed this posting. Mary

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
    Thank U Mary. He's just a figment of our over active imaginations. Yea, well... hey, do U hear that tapping?
Comment from honeytree
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The art work is very telling and the words describing this reaper are really very good.

I liked the creative way how these words were written.

Honeytree

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Thank U once again, my ever sweet tree.
reply by honeytree on 27-Feb-2010
    Great writing victortouche and I enjoyed reading.

    Honeytree.
Comment from patmedium
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A five star write which is clear-cut and to the point, Victor... I think I should slow down a little, too. Many thanks for this smile I am wearing. Pat.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Thank U. Yes, he comes for us all, eh?
reply by patmedium on 27-Feb-2010
    Sooner or later, friend. Pat.
Comment from nigai
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Where's the rest of it? "to reap from us the ones with endless hurry." That settles into my bones. "A dreary cloak (no comma)...." My doctors plunk commas in the strangest places too.

Keep writing!

Nigai

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 Comment Written 27-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Ha, Ha. Thanks. he reaped the rest of it. That's all there is left.